Watching You, Watching Me

Watching you, watching me
this nightly ritual I shall uphold,
wondering where can autumn be
waiting for a hint of harvest gold

This nightly ritual I shall uphold
been sitting on the window sill,
waiting for a hint of harvest gold
just hoping for that familiar chill

Been sitting on the window sill
wanting to go out on a limb,
just hoping for that familiar chill
and to gaze at you on a wimb

Wanting to go out on a limb
lured me in like a can of tuna,
and to gaze at you on a wimb
under the pale light of Luna

Lured me in like a can of tuna
aligned amid each changing leaf,
under the pale light of Luna
an eclipse of sorts, all too brief

Aligned amid each changing leaf
staring down into my yellow eyes,
an eclipse of sorts, all too brief
but I love the way you mesmerize

Staring down into my yellow eyes
how easily your light bewitched,
but I love the way you mesmerize
when suddenly my senses twitched

How easily your light bewitched
to and fro a slender tail danced,
when suddenly my senses twitched
my curious nature so entranced

To and fro a slender tail danced
as pure joy awakened and grinned,
my curious nature so entranced
two spirits arose in the autumn wind

As pure joy awakened and grinned
simply to engage with this feline,
two spirits arose in the autumn wind
while distant gazes did intertwine

Simply to engage with this feline
wondering where can autumn be,
while distant gazes did intertwine
watching you, watching me.




(9/13/2019)
Copyright © | Year Posted 2019


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Date: 12/24/2019 7:43:00 PM
This is marvelous, regardless of how one chooses its subtle meanings to apprehend. I sensed the feline context approaching early on and felt so rewarded as you summoned the conclusion. So very, very well done.
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Kelly Deschler
Date: 2/15/2020 1:27:00 PM
Thank you Mark... I truly appreciate your kind comments on this poem... I'm glad you were able to pick up on the feline's perspective that I wanted to convey in this poem, but yes it could also be interpreted in other ways :)
Date: 10/8/2019 2:21:00 AM
Amazing poetry, Kelly, such a joy to read. congrats...
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Kelly Deschler
Date: 12/16/2019 8:53:00 PM
Thank you so very much ... I'm glad you enjoyed it Harry :)
Date: 9/28/2019 12:10:00 PM
i truly enjoyed reading this one..there is so much in this, .every time i read it, like an onion, , i get another layer of understanding :))
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Kelly Deschler
Date: 12/16/2019 8:43:00 PM
Thank you so very much Jim... I'm glad you enjoyed my poem :)
Date: 9/24/2019 1:06:00 PM
- Kelly, congratulations on your lovely win poem :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Kelly Deschler
Date: 12/11/2019 9:09:00 PM
Thank you so very much Anne-Lise :)
Date: 9/24/2019 12:47:00 PM
Kelly congratulations on your win in the contest!
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Kelly Deschler
Date: 12/11/2019 8:56:00 PM
Thank you for your kind congrats Dear Heart :)
Date: 9/23/2019 1:30:00 PM
Nicely done pantoum. congrats on your placement.
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Kelly Deschler
Date: 12/11/2019 8:44:00 PM
Thank you so very much for your kind comments Jeanne :)
Date: 9/23/2019 1:41:00 AM
Congratulations on your placement!;)
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Kelly Deschler
Date: 12/6/2019 8:36:00 PM
Thank you so very much Brenda :)
Date: 9/20/2019 12:58:00 PM
Hi Kelly:) For a moment you took me back to Abba's song, Knowing You Knowing Me! Pantoums are not easy to write, but you have done this one with apparent ease. I like the image of you sitting on the window sill waiting for a hint of harvest gold! Warm regards // paul
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Kelly Deschler
Date: 12/6/2019 8:15:00 PM
Hi Paul, thanks so much... and yes the pantoum is very challenging, but it is a form of poetry that I have come to love since I was first introduced to it here on Poetry Soup... I'm not familiar with that particular song. I will have to give it a listen :)
Date: 9/19/2019 4:42:00 AM
Nicely written pantoum, Kelly, enjoyed the read. All the best. Hugs, John
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Kelly Deschler
Date: 12/6/2019 8:01:00 PM
Thanks so much... I'm glad you enjoyed my poem John... Hugs :)
Date: 9/13/2019 1:37:00 PM
Wow, that was really well done Kelly. I enjoyed reading this a lot. The flow was smooth and you used the form perfectly. Beautifully done
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Kelly Deschler
Date: 10/12/2019 1:39:00 PM
Thank you very, very much for your kind comments Chris... I'm so glad you enjoyed my poem :)
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