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Watching You, Watching Me

Watching you, watching me this nightly ritual I shall uphold, wondering where can autumn be waiting for a hint of harvest gold This nightly ritual I shall uphold been sitting on the window sill, waiting for a hint of harvest gold just hoping for that familiar chill Been sitting on the window sill wanting to go out on a limb, just hoping for that familiar chill and to gaze at you on a wimb Wanting to go out on a limb lured me in like a can of tuna, and to gaze at you on a wimb under the pale light of Luna Lured me in like a can of tuna aligned amid each changing leaf, under the pale light of Luna an eclipse of sorts, all too brief Aligned amid each changing leaf staring down into my yellow eyes, an eclipse of sorts, all too brief but I love the way you mesmerize Staring down into my yellow eyes how easily your light bewitched, but I love the way you mesmerize when suddenly my senses twitched How easily your light bewitched to and fro a slender tail danced, when suddenly my senses twitched my curious nature so entranced To and fro a slender tail danced as pure joy awakened and grinned, my curious nature so entranced two spirits arose in the autumn wind As pure joy awakened and grinned simply to engage with this feline, two spirits arose in the autumn wind while distant gazes did intertwine Simply to engage with this feline wondering where can autumn be, while distant gazes did intertwine watching you, watching me. (9/13/2019)

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Date: 12/24/2019 7:43:00 PM
This is marvelous, regardless of how one chooses its subtle meanings to apprehend. I sensed the feline context approaching early on and felt so rewarded as you summoned the conclusion. So very, very well done.
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Kelly Deschler
Date: 2/15/2020 1:27:00 PM
Thank you Mark... I truly appreciate your kind comments on this poem... I'm glad you were able to pick up on the feline's perspective that I wanted to convey in this poem, but yes it could also be interpreted in other ways :)
Date: 10/8/2019 2:21:00 AM
Amazing poetry, Kelly, such a joy to read. congrats...
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Kelly Deschler
Date: 12/16/2019 8:53:00 PM
Thank you so very much ... I'm glad you enjoyed it Harry :)
Date: 9/28/2019 12:10:00 PM
i truly enjoyed reading this one..there is so much in this, .every time i read it, like an onion, , i get another layer of understanding :))
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Kelly Deschler
Date: 12/16/2019 8:43:00 PM
Thank you so very much Jim... I'm glad you enjoyed my poem :)
Date: 9/24/2019 1:06:00 PM
- Kelly, congratulations on your lovely win poem :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Kelly Deschler
Date: 12/11/2019 9:09:00 PM
Thank you so very much Anne-Lise :)
Date: 9/24/2019 12:47:00 PM
Kelly congratulations on your win in the contest!
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Kelly Deschler
Date: 12/11/2019 8:56:00 PM
Thank you for your kind congrats Dear Heart :)
Date: 9/23/2019 1:30:00 PM
Nicely done pantoum. congrats on your placement.
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Kelly Deschler
Date: 12/11/2019 8:44:00 PM
Thank you so very much for your kind comments Jeanne :)
Date: 9/23/2019 1:41:00 AM
Congratulations on your placement!;)
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Kelly Deschler
Date: 12/6/2019 8:36:00 PM
Thank you so very much Brenda :)
Date: 9/20/2019 12:58:00 PM
Hi Kelly:) For a moment you took me back to Abba's song, Knowing You Knowing Me! Pantoums are not easy to write, but you have done this one with apparent ease. I like the image of you sitting on the window sill waiting for a hint of harvest gold! Warm regards // paul
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Kelly Deschler
Date: 12/6/2019 8:15:00 PM
Hi Paul, thanks so much... and yes the pantoum is very challenging, but it is a form of poetry that I have come to love since I was first introduced to it here on Poetry Soup... I'm not familiar with that particular song. I will have to give it a listen :)
Date: 9/19/2019 4:42:00 AM
Nicely written pantoum, Kelly, enjoyed the read. All the best. Hugs, John
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Kelly Deschler
Date: 12/6/2019 8:01:00 PM
Thanks so much... I'm glad you enjoyed my poem John... Hugs :)
Date: 9/13/2019 1:37:00 PM
Wow, that was really well done Kelly. I enjoyed reading this a lot. The flow was smooth and you used the form perfectly. Beautifully done
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Kelly Deschler
Date: 10/12/2019 1:39:00 PM
Thank you very, very much for your kind comments Chris... I'm so glad you enjoyed my poem :)

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