Watching You Dream

Soft flame flutters gently before surrendering to darkness wealth of golden glow. Your mind has been captured by dreams, pirates of the imagination controlling your activity. Crescent of gray light fades through the arch windows; you become spotlight bright! I study your eyes as they dash through never-ever real land. Are you racing, trying to catch the runaway unicorn? Steady, boy, this is your fantasy; let the legend come to you. Garnish him with a crimson saddle, canter across hills of sweet poppies. Your yellow-brick road need not bear lions, unless you wish to be their king -- color-splashed vision, enhanced by your chestnut mane. You roll; our waterbed rolls wave-like with you. lions and unicorns dwell not within the sea; they vanish, creating a tiny subconscious wrinkle of memory. Your fingers tighten, clinging to your raft, tossed by the tides and waves. Pan flutes from the bank's hanging cliff -- turbulence subsides; you float smoothly o’er open sea. So you mellow your mood, follow your eyes up, up, it glares but does not burn. Sun cannot hurt a dreamer’s eyes unless you let it. Stare as it slowly sinks to a spectral sunset that becomes a rainbow -- because you see it that way! Your raft is now a craft, thirty feet, steel-plated, sprouting rings of purple smoke and wings of green feathers. Your chariot, my lean and softly-lit friend, chases the sun across the sky to find your pot of gold, when the soft flame flutters gently before surrendering to darkness.
*Entry for the "Dream On" Contest

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011



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Date: 9/4/2011 3:00:00 AM
Wow, great work.
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Date: 9/1/2011 10:14:00 PM
Lovely write, Lee
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Date: 8/28/2011 11:16:00 AM
What a beautiful imaginative write, Carolyn - a sure winner
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Date: 8/28/2011 10:16:00 AM
Wow....Carolyn....I do believe this is one of your best poems!! I love this dream that sings as a classic poem! (By the way...I do hope sincerely that you are out of harms way...and that Irene has not been life changing for you personally!!!) My best wishes and prayers!!
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Date: 8/28/2011 12:49:00 AM
Oh wow, Carolyn, what an adventure of a dream you have weaved here! Totally enjoyed this one!! Such an amazing journey you've embarked here! Super congrats on your win :D
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Date: 8/28/2011 12:46:00 AM
oh, my gosh, this is one of the most beautiful poems I think I've read this whole week. I just love this kind of fanciful imagery, Carolyn. One of your best poems ever and going to my faves. LUv, Andrea
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Date: 8/27/2011 7:47:00 PM
Congrats...Sara
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Date: 8/27/2011 7:40:00 PM
Congratulations on your well deserved placement in Debbie Guzzi's "Dream On" contest Carolyn +++. Love, Carol
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Date: 8/27/2011 4:57:00 PM
Wow. You took me on your journey. Congratulations on your win.
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Date: 8/26/2011 7:08:00 PM
You are one heck of a writer! I'm waiting to exhale while absorbing every line of sweet melodic creativity. Fanciful words and mind glitter like imagery floats around every stanza of this astonishing and terrific entry!
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Date: 8/26/2011 10:47:00 AM
Wow!Beautiful!This is going to win the contest,Carolyn.luv Fabiyas
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Date: 8/26/2011 8:14:00 AM
this was a beautiful write my friend have a great day,and good luck in the contest. cory
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Date: 8/26/2011 7:55:00 AM
Very imaginative work for the contest..Reads like a winner to me..Some to the metaphoric lines are super..Good luck..Thanks for the kind review of my work..Sara
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Date: 8/25/2011 6:51:00 AM
The first thing that my wife and I do upon waking is share the dreams we had, Tony
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