Waning Heart of the Moon

In reflection on the ebb and flow -
it enchanted the moon to fall in love, but, the skin of the skies
wore bruised purple dyes from hardships of the day. Dawning tides
moved with poignant rhythm to a beating but bereft heart
swept out to a wept sea.


Susan Ashley
May 6, 2019


~ First Place ~
Contest: I Got A Darn N/A Again
Sponsor: Lu Loo
Entered June 14, 2019

*N/A'd*
Contest: May 2019 Premier 2, Any Form, Any Theme, Max of 5 Lines
Copyright © | Year Posted 2019

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Marcum Wong Avatar
July 4, 2019 at 12:53 AM
Even the best of the best get N/A's. I loved this melancholy poem. Congratulations on your first place win my friend. : ) xxoo
Ashley Avatar
July 5, 2019 at 9:24 AM
I relish your uplifting comments and your heartwarming congrats, Connie. I'm always so pleased when I know you've enjoyed my poem. Your gracious visit is truly appreciated, my inspiring friend. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan
Brenner Avatar
July 1, 2019 at 9:50 PM
Susan!!!...welp!!..once again your magic of words being placed so proper within a poem of utter captivation has you prevailing with an A+. lol..for real tho..lol.Congrats my dear friend.God Bless you always. :-)
Ashley Avatar
July 2, 2019 at 6:51 PM
It was a pleasure to know that I captivated you, dear Professor and thus received another A+! Lol! Thank you, Kenneth, for your beautiful, smiling inducing comments and kind congrats that have truly made my day. I will be over to visit your award winning piece very soon, my friend. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan
Wolf Avatar
May 9, 2019 at 8:54 PM
Susan, the symbiosis, the blend of your title with your verse --- in perfect sync! Bravo! ~ Gershon
Ashley Avatar
May 12, 2019 at 5:40 PM
Your shining comments send me over the moon, dear Gershon. I’m so pleased you enjoyed my poem. Thank you for sharing your precious thoughts and cherished friendship with me, my dear friend. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan
Marcum Wong Avatar
May 9, 2019 at 3:18 AM
There is outstanding imagery in your lines Susan. This piece is just beautiful! xxoo ; )
Ashley Avatar
May 9, 2019 at 6:13 PM
Your wonderful visit is heartwarming, Connie. It’s always so nice to see you here. Thank you for your gracious comments, my lovely friend. You are truly appreciated. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan
Sergi Avatar
May 8, 2019 at 7:00 PM
This poem flows beautifully like dawning tides!
Ashley Avatar
May 9, 2019 at 6:11 PM
Your wonderful visit and gracious comments are a joy to receive and are truly appreciated, Ralph. I'm so glad you enjoyed my poem. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan
Awtry Avatar
May 8, 2019 at 5:39 PM
"the skin of the skies wore bruised purple dyes" ---poetry glee! This is gorgeous!
Ashley Avatar
May 9, 2019 at 6:10 PM
Your wonderful visit and gracious comments are a joy to receive and are truly appreciated, P.S.. I'm so glad you enjoyed my poem. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan
Lindley Avatar
May 7, 2019 at 9:03 PM
Such magnificent depths and imagery my dear friend! So much power in a short piece!"""swept out to a wept sea!"""" Bravo! A great fave for me....
Ashley Avatar
May 9, 2019 at 6:17 PM
My dear friend, your shining comments are a treasured gift and are such a joy to receive. I'm so pleased you enjoyed my poem, Robert. Your precious feedback and fave are uplifting and means so much to me. Thank you for sharing the kindness of your heart with me. Warmest wishes always my wonderful friend.. ~Susan
Rushing Avatar
May 7, 2019 at 6:59 PM
Your poem is filled with emotion and beauty as always dear Susan! Good luck in Brian's contest!
Ashley Avatar
May 9, 2019 at 6:07 PM
Your gracious visit is a delight, Wren, and your inspiring comments are a joy to receive. It’s so wonderful to hear from you, my friend. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan
Dietrich Avatar
May 7, 2019 at 2:30 PM
wow this is fantastic. I think it could get a win. sure hope so for you.
Ashley Avatar
May 9, 2019 at 6:09 PM
Your gracious comments are a joy to receive and are truly appreciated, Andrea. I'm so glad you enjoyed my poem. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan
May Avatar
May 7, 2019 at 11:38 AM
A sad love story flowing out to sea...Well written Susan..
Ashley Avatar
May 9, 2019 at 6:07 PM
Joseph, your wonderful presence and gracious comments are truly appreciated. I'm so glad you enjoyed my poem. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan
Michael Avatar
May 7, 2019 at 6:12 AM
It had to go...time to go...Love the visuals and message too...
Ashley Avatar
May 9, 2019 at 6:06 PM
Arturo, your gracious presence and lovely comments are truly appreciated. I'm so glad you enjoyed my poem. Warmest wishes always mon ami.. ~Susan
Kiser Avatar
May 7, 2019 at 6:02 AM
Very vibrant scene in this line, alone, "the skin of the skies wore bruised purple dyes from hardships of the day." Beautiful pen.
Ashley Avatar
May 9, 2019 at 6:05 PM
M. L., your gracious presence and lovely comments are truly appreciated. I'm so glad you enjoyed my poem. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan
Andresen Avatar
May 7, 2019 at 3:18 AM
- A beautiful poem, Susan :) - Good luck in the contest :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Ashley Avatar
May 7, 2019 at 7:03 PM
Anne-Lise, your gracious presence and lovely comments are truly appreciated. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan
Onclaud Avatar
May 6, 2019 at 3:44 PM
how deeply pensive is this beautiful write, susan... one of your best!...huggs
Ashley Avatar
May 7, 2019 at 7:01 PM
Nette, I’m inspired by the beauty of your comments and appreciate your lovely visit. It is always such a joy to see you here. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan
Gondolf Avatar
May 6, 2019 at 2:07 PM
I love the imagery of this, Susan, you have such a smooth way with words. All my best to you. John
Ashley Avatar
May 7, 2019 at 6:42 PM
Your gracious visit is a delight, John, and your inspiring comments are a joy to receive. It’s so wonderful to hear from you, my friend. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan
Wanter Avatar
May 6, 2019 at 10:30 AM
You know I am jealous of your way with words!! LOL
Ashley Avatar
May 7, 2019 at 6:40 PM
Lol! Your wonderful visit is heartwarming and your shining poetry is always so beautifully expressed, Sunlite. It’s always so nice to see you here. Thank you for your gracious comments, my friend. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan
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