Get Your Premium Membership

Walking In Gray

The red-tailed hawk soars above the Mall of America, as the jumbo-jetliner glides in for a landing nearbye. Clouds are moving in, blotting out the sunlight, as I squash plans to walk outside in the sunshine. Bare trees, snow covered ground and I'm havin' a tuna sandwich on whole-grain bread.The whole world seems to be bundled up in heavy winter coats, but I'm just in my shirt-sleeves....the cold feels good on my skin, lets me know I'm alive, waiting for the sun to come back out....but the sky only gets grayer, and my mood only gets darker, time to go home and write this poem.....maybe I'll walk inside.....

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010




Post Comments

Poetrysoup is an environment of encouragement and growth so only provide specific positive comments that indicate what you appreciate about the poem. Negative comments will result your account being banned.

Please Login to post a comment

Date: 11/17/2010 9:34:00 PM
I think your writing is where it should be your soul ponders what your heart does see And After receiving your message of support No question, but my friendship you've bought In time I know we'll come to share Only what true Poets hold onto so dear But that is something of what we already knew The only passion in life is holding what's TRUE Thanks 2bpositive
Login to Reply
Date: 11/17/2010 7:37:00 PM
Hello, James here enjoying your deep poem. ((cold feels good on my skin, lets me know I'm alive, waiting for the sun to come back out)) love this verse,,.p.d.
Login to Reply
Date: 11/17/2010 6:28:00 PM
I love the simplicity and the true to life narration....just fabulous James!!
Login to Reply
Date: 11/17/2010 4:53:00 PM
You have such a creative way of expressing your thoughts, Jimbo. I like the image of the hawk soaring above "the mall of America" as your jet is preparing to land. Having flown from Florida to Northern destinations, I can appreciate the way you describe the cold feeling "good" when you first step off the plane. Southerners are supposed to have less tolerance for the cold, but it's always a treat for me. Seldom feel the need to "walk inside." Just revel in snow. Love, Carolyn
Login to Reply
Date: 11/17/2010 4:01:00 PM
Hey, lets go to the mall and walk..seriously, this is quite nice..reads like a book that Id want to keep reading. BG
Login to Reply
Date: 11/17/2010 3:23:00 PM
may be a car/plane....ok maybe not enjoyed.
Login to Reply

Book: Reflection on the Important Things