Walking In Gray

The red-tailed hawk soars above the Mall of America, as the jumbo-jetliner glides in for a 
landing nearbye. Clouds are moving in, blotting out the sunlight, as I squash plans to walk 
outside in the sunshine. Bare trees, snow covered ground and I'm havin' a tuna sandwich on 
whole-grain bread.The whole world seems to be bundled up in heavy winter coats, but I'm 
just in my shirt-sleeves....the cold feels good on my skin, lets me know I'm alive, waiting for 
the sun to come back out....but the sky only gets grayer, and my mood only gets darker, 
time to go home and write this poem.....maybe I'll walk inside.....

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010



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Date: 11/17/2010 9:34:00 PM
I think your writing is where it should be your soul ponders what your heart does see And After receiving your message of support No question, but my friendship you've bought In time I know we'll come to share Only what true Poets hold onto so dear But that is something of what we already knew The only passion in life is holding what's TRUE Thanks 2bpositive
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Date: 11/17/2010 7:37:00 PM
Hello, James here enjoying your deep poem. ((cold feels good on my skin, lets me know I'm alive, waiting for the sun to come back out)) love this verse,,.p.d.
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Date: 11/17/2010 6:28:00 PM
I love the simplicity and the true to life narration....just fabulous James!!
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Date: 11/17/2010 4:53:00 PM
You have such a creative way of expressing your thoughts, Jimbo. I like the image of the hawk soaring above "the mall of America" as your jet is preparing to land. Having flown from Florida to Northern destinations, I can appreciate the way you describe the cold feeling "good" when you first step off the plane. Southerners are supposed to have less tolerance for the cold, but it's always a treat for me. Seldom feel the need to "walk inside." Just revel in snow. Love, Carolyn
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Date: 11/17/2010 4:01:00 PM
Hey, lets go to the mall and walk..seriously, this is quite nice..reads like a book that Id want to keep reading. BG
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Date: 11/17/2010 3:23:00 PM
may be a car/plane....ok maybe not enjoyed.
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