Waking Up

I remember thinking to myself, you can get a  good night's sleep even after a bad day.

It was 3 years ago today when I woke up, packed my belongings and left for good.
You were standing there at the bus stop and asked me how my day was.
I wasn't sure if I could respond....But I knew I should. 
Reply to Her that is.... Not many people ever care, but she does I thought.
I knew where I was standing but deep down I felt lost.
You stood there and I felt a little less lost.
A block away from my home....from my old home, I realized.
I felt found standing next to you.
I replied. "Couldn't be better"
But I was never good at lying.
And you were good at poker.
My bluff was called.

I wake up every now and then and think of the moment you lifted me.
With your words. 
You didn't even know my name. You didn't even know what you were doing.
You did it.

Now 4 years later happily married, I still wake up in the middle of the night.
I visualize the shoe's I was wearing, the dirty white laces that seemed to me not to be tied. Like a loose stage of my life. 
But you tied them. I was the left lace, you the right.
And every now and then when I look up in this dream I see my wife's beautiful eyes standing next to me, other time's its an angel. One and the same they are.

My bluff was called.
She said "You have the same look I had not but a few weeks ago. But your tone of voice is a lot more obvious."
"Were still out there" She says and looks up at the clouds.
She meant women you can love. I knew what she meant.
"Are you out there?" I replied.
"No." She says.
"I'm right here".

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014



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Date: 10/8/2014 6:01:00 PM
People don't realize what a poker face is. Google it and check it out. Looks like you have already read my analysis on my poetrysoup page already. Jim Horn
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Date: 10/8/2014 5:31:00 PM
The comparison between the shoelaces, and you and your wife, was very good. They were made for each other and meant to be together.... I think that this poem is more like a free verse, than a rhyming form. Either way, I really enjoyed this creative and heartfelt write. Great work, Hani!
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Date: 10/8/2014 12:45:00 PM
Your poem is thought provoking but I'm afraid I can't really give you any pointers it is too different from my poetry and to tell you the truth I never tried your style but I like it. I like the surprise like essence of your poem the answer seems to come out of nowhere and there is good buildup of the question there seems to be exclamation to the answer done not by exclamation symbol but by your use of words. Good job in my opinion
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Date: 10/8/2014 11:50:00 AM
Don't know how you found me or why you asked for my advice, but this space is to small for much. Just from this one poem though, I can say that I think you are gifted, gifted with both a passion for clarity and mystery, two qualities I love the most in a poem, and after a good night's sleep myself your poem has given my day a good start. Deeper comments will be yours with when you provide contact information. Were S/B We're Shoe's SB shoes time's SB times Suggest tied S/B your finding me tied
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Hani Gholami
Date: 10/8/2014 1:06:00 PM
Thank you Brian for saying I am gifted and have those qualities. I am honored you think so. I will PM you my email and hope to hear from you. Thank you again Brian.
Date: 10/7/2014 10:02:00 PM
Never could sent you my appraisal and analysis. You can go to the narrative I just wrote for you. Also, tried to reply to my message in PoetrySoup I received there and could not do it. Jim Horn
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Hani Gholami
Date: 10/8/2014 1:05:00 PM
You my friend, helped inspire me further. Thank you James.
Date: 10/7/2014 2:12:00 PM
This is so lovely. I kept wanting to know how it ended. Your words make me think.. great poem.
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Hani Gholami
Date: 10/8/2014 1:05:00 PM
I am very glad my poem had you intrigued and thinking. Thank you for the read and comment Betty, your friend, Hani G
Date: 10/7/2014 1:54:00 PM
Very moving, love the likening to a pair of laces, earth angels really do exist, nicely done, :) Heather
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Hani Gholami
Date: 10/8/2014 1:04:00 PM
Thank you Heather for your comment, Hani G.
Date: 10/7/2014 6:21:00 AM
My bluff was called.Nice.
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Hani Gholami
Date: 10/7/2014 1:57:00 PM
Charmaine, I loved your insight. Thank you for taking your time for the read and comment. I am glad you enjoyed this post! Your friend, Hani G.G. I am looking forward to hearing your insight on my future posts!
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Hani Gholami
Date: 10/7/2014 1:53:00 PM
Thank you, glad you enjoyed it.
Date: 10/7/2014 5:34:00 AM
'But I was never good at lying/and you were good at poker'-This line says so much.She was a stranger yet She seemed to read your soul.. and it seemed it was meant for her to find you,and meant for you to love her.I love this poem,it has that spice of mystery which keeps the reader coming to read it again,and makes one ask if there is more to the story in between lines..It takes only one special being to give us a merrier life.Awesome post!!!Charma
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Date: 10/8/2014 1:03:00 PM
Charmaine, thank you for your insight. Thank you for taking your time for the read and comment. I am glad you enjoyed this post! Your friend, Hani G.G. I am looking forward to hearing your insight on my future posts! It is nice that you see the hint of fate, with them almost being destined to meet.
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