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Poetic Form: Quatrain

Inspired: 2024 June 04

Image: Kilauea Volcano Erupting by USGS

An aerial image shows Kilauea volcano erupting in Hawaii Volcanoes National Park, June 3, 2024. / Credit: U.S. Geological Survey

A butterfly, aliferous, of subtle slights, soniferous, common spirits, days just went by, aliferous . . . a butterfly. Low pinnacles alight sought rest forgiving sun favors spread best microscope's trial . . . clinical's nigh shipyard trash, few binnacles. A game of chess, castling sleight clouds, floating iced-pawn, a seaboard crowds, Queen waves her move, column King, guess, castling sleight clouds, a game of chess. A sun descends, dusk purple trend, birds fly inland, soon be darkened, crater aglow, twilight ascends dusk purple trend, a sun descends. Orange drawn night, few shakes be such, the moonlight trade, silver isn't much, tours came and left cause show took flight, few shakes be such orange drawn night.

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/1/2024 9:47:00 PM

Some nice imagery here, William. Thanks for taking my challenge And congrats

Hilo Poet
Date: 7/2/2024 11:36:00 AM

The twist that the form takes is fun, I like where one may go with it. Thanks!

Ink Empress

Date: 7/1/2024 5:51:00 AM

Dear hilo, you have a very creative way of weaving words and this is no exception! Brilliant diction and imagery throughout! Clever chess wordplay and also i love the last two quatrains! From birds flying to orange drawn nights! How artistic! Thats also a beautiful picture: must be of hawaii? Pleasure always reading you fellow islander! Keep sharing and shining! Congratulations on your win too

Hilo Poet
Date: 7/1/2024 9:50:00 AM

Mahalo, Ink Empress--'breaths of my refreshing smiles', my dear, dear poetess! Your winning entry, sooo idyllic to Tee-->Zee, back 2 me of rumored island girl canoeing off Waikiki--TOO bad its on the wrong island my dear. This poem been a while--still methanks my dear island poetess, me issues I've told our dear Sara RE that page pop-up [Return HTTP 500]"It haunts me": Aloha, Ink Empress ;)