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Poetic Form: Ninette

Inspired: 2023 November 10

*3rd Place*
A November Ninette
Contest Judged: 2023 November 23
Sponsored by: Andrea Dietrich

Image: Autumn Wintry Forest Water Reflection by HD Wallpapers

wake
rousing
November's
tenacious earth
subject~surrenders
protected hues
dismembers
sublime
wake

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Sara Kendrick

Date: 11/26/2023 6:03:00 AM

Back with congratulations on this winning work in Andrea's contest. I enjoyed reading it. Way to go. Keep on writing. Sara K

Hilo Poet
Date: 11/26/2023 7:01:00 AM

Very kind of you, Sara. Much appreciated. Aloha, William

Linda Alice Fowler

Date: 11/25/2023 2:20:00 PM

Sweet, unique...just like you William. Congratulations! :)

Hilo Poet
Date: 11/25/2023 3:27:00 PM

Thanks, Linda, I appreciate it. Aloha, William

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 11/24/2023 8:26:00 AM

Congratulations on your win. What a lovely Ninette write/pretty picture. Have a great/wonderful day writing away...........

Hilo Poet
Date: 11/24/2023 10:10:00 AM

Thanks, Paula. A bit sage-like, but I had fun. A blessed day, my friend. Aloha, William

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 11/23/2023 8:35:00 PM

This is really pretty. I thought I had given it second place. Sorry about that. Congrats and happy Thanksgiving

Hilo Poet
Date: 11/24/2023 10:01:00 AM

Thanks, Andrea, and yes I did as a matter of factoring, hope yours was more so. Aloha, William

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 11/10/2023 1:02:00 PM

- November is the end and the beginning at the same time ... the colors of autumn are gone and winter is knocking on the door ... with frost, ice and snow (some love it ... others don't ... I don't) - Great choice of words in a beautiful poem :) - Best wishes in the contest - Have a lovely weekend, William :) - hugs

Hilo Poet
Date: 11/10/2023 7:56:00 PM

Hmm, some love it ... others don't, I guess I'd pick neither. I remember my aunt on our winter visit to her home, long flight. She told the family that dinner's ready, then asked the kids where I was, and they told her I was outside, she then blurted out, "In the SNOW!" "A-ha!", they replied. LOL. Thanks, and you too. Aloha, William

Sotto Poet

Date: 11/10/2023 10:48:00 AM

Ninette is stunning. Your captivating vocabulary, refined word choice, and enchanting imagery never fail to captivate feelings. The colors in this poem are vibrant and appealing, like a spellbinding display of magic. It depicts a scene in the rousing aftermath of November, where hope is sprinkled on cold earth, bare trees, and melancholy roses. BOL in the contest

Hilo Poet
Date: 11/10/2023 7:28:00 PM

My heartiest Mahalo, Lasaad. In Hilo here on the windward (wettest) side of the island, its just too lush and forested amidst waterfalls and riveting rivers. Some leeward (sunny) spots would show variable types of trees with an autumnal feel, but they're too far and few in between them. Aloha my friend, William

Ink Empress

Date: 11/10/2023 9:46:00 AM

How beautiful is this ninette, i really love your chosen word wake. And also how it flows while sticking to the theme, of november in such eloquence, especially the alliterations too and how you’ve written “ protected hues dismembers sublime wake! Ah! Soul stirring! Impeccable take. If this is for the contest, goodluck… im surely will do well.

Hilo Poet
Date: 11/10/2023 10:03:00 AM

Another admirable insightfulness, Ink Empress. I relish in the light of your exceptional exposé, for which I am grateful, my friend. Aloha, William

Sara Kendrick

Date: 11/10/2023 6:58:00 AM

Yes, November is awakening. It will be cold earth, bare trees to some extent showing their skeletal form but in a certain a beauty all its own. thanks for sharing this one with us and for dropping by my page. Sara K

Hilo Poet
Date: 11/10/2023 7:29:00 AM

Awe-some, Sara. If ours got to a skeletal form, our coconuts will fall. Well it falls often with that balmy breeze of ours--with heartfelt thanks, Aloha, William