Waiting

W ondering eyes canvas the room A ttitude hidden behind costume I nterest drawn to material things T houghts engrossed by any whim and cling I ndividuals by Iphone entertained N on-interest only self-attainment G yrating from self-grandeur to himself

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Kelly Deschler

Date: 8/23/2014 1:48:00 AM

I think technology is separating families instead of bringing them closer together, as so many claim.... This is a great acrostic poem, Sara! Well done! Congrats on your win!

Tim Smith

Date: 8/19/2014 6:10:00 PM

That is the way of the youth today...I have two in high school now...I know...congrats sweetie

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 8/19/2014 11:04:00 AM

Wow a unique take Sara ! Congrats on top win!

John Lawless

Date: 8/19/2014 8:17:00 AM

Hey, Sara, he was probably sharing a drink with his virtual girl friend.

Robert Lindley

Date: 8/19/2014 7:31:00 AM

Congrats on your win.. Two of my sisters once had guys like that as husbands.

Shadow Hamilton

Date: 8/19/2014 4:27:00 AM

great acrostic Sara congrats on win

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 8/19/2014 4:21:00 AM

That is the way it appears, but I have to think how lonely they must really be to think that is the best way to spend their time. Your poem is provocative and makes one ponder our present generation and what the next will be like. Congrats on your wonderful win!

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 8/19/2014 1:32:00 AM

Very brilliant write, Sara. congrats on the win.

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 8/18/2014 7:14:00 PM

Sara, Congratulations, on your win. Thank you for the awesome Acrostic Poem. Enjoy my blog "Dedicated to You" --and YOU" if you like. Have fun enjoying all the winning poems. Always & Forever ~LINDA~

Arthur Vaso

Date: 7/12/2014 10:40:00 PM

thats why I have a Samsung and not a iPhone!!! LOL just kidding, loved this!

Peter Dome

Date: 7/12/2014 11:38:00 AM

Excellent Sara. what a great and clever write. Love the first line. Well done best wishes. Pete.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/11/2014 9:24:00 PM

Makes you wonder what his kind is waiting for. I just get sick by this scene of young people!!

Earl Schumacker

Date: 7/10/2014 1:35:00 PM

Hi Sara, Nice encapsulation of alienation, ego gone wrong and strong elements of social significance presented in a sharp, clear, concise manner. "Waiting" in and of itself is interesting. A very complete poem that hit the center of the target. Nice job. Keep up the good work. Have a great day. Take care. Earl

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 7/10/2014 1:29:00 PM

Wonderful acrostic Sara! Truly defined wait,,,Gl in contest!