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Wails Of A Song

The coda of mourning jays vibrates In bittersweet tracks when daybreak scans An almost whipping backdrop, hushed By low warbles from birds’ paean; Indistinct as dusty sketches— Throaty on a lane of funeral’s last rites; Where the hazily drawn view turns bland Moistening wail of eyes with a muted song, Tunes stale, while jays drone on the horizon. Mixed Senses Contest for nette onclaud 20 Sept 2015 From Amelie Mara ---Music in 9 lines

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Date: 10/8/2015 1:57:00 AM
Superb write amelie, its so beautifully crafted n perfect to the theme, Congrats on first place win!
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Date: 10/3/2015 3:28:00 PM
ohh, so well put together with splendid imagery mingling all 3 senses appropriately.. your last line--- i don;t know if you noticed--- had all the senses woven together... top congrats, amelie and thank you for gracing my contest.. huggs
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Date: 10/3/2015 12:55:00 AM
This poem is so lovely and unique. Congratulations on your well deserved first place!
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Date: 10/2/2015 10:54:00 PM
Amelie, Congrats on your "MIXED SENSES win" *****SKAT
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Date: 10/2/2015 7:16:00 PM
Congratulations on your win! Wonderful write!!!!
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Date: 10/2/2015 4:33:00 PM
A sad atmosphere, but the poem is beautiful in content and expression. ~ Congratulations on your being placed first, Amelie! // paul
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Date: 10/2/2015 4:20:00 PM
Lots of great imagery. Exactly what Nette loves to see. BIG congrats on your top win.
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Date: 10/2/2015 3:31:00 PM
wonderful but sad imagery I can see why Nette loved this so much congrats:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 9/20/2015 6:04:00 PM
Thank you for sharing your nice poem.
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Date: 9/20/2015 3:03:00 AM
Definitely a rare mix of the senses in somber melody. Excellent poem.
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