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11/15/23

 Journey without movement Poetry Contest

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Seventh Place

Wading Rhapsody's Bliss

To beautify him further lacks only a gilded spark divine, love eternal unbound.
The night was young we stood closely, the moment held, we shared a kiss.
His incendiary sunshine smile could melt the polar ice and snowy ground.
I wade pining for another touch of your lips, silky and warm, rhapsody’s bliss.

The night was young, we stood closely, the moment held, we shared a kiss.
Lost in thoughts of you my perfection with no notice that twilight was nigh,
I wade pining for another touch of your lips, silky and warm, rhapsody’s bliss.
They’ll say I made a superlative effort to meet you again, O how they’ll sigh.

Lost in thoughts of you my perfection with no notice that twilight was nigh,
all that was fancy seems hours ago, now only stars make the dark heaven light.
They’ll say I made a superlative effort to meet you again, O how they’ll sigh.
To the brightness of a rich jewel you compared me, are you nowhere in sight?

All that was fancy seems hours ago, now only stars make the dark heaven light,
The white knolls mocking loudly “Your lusty young man nowhere in sight is he!”
To the brightness of a rich jewel you compared me, are you nowhere in sight?
Yet I move not a step, hushed by ecstasy, Lord let this not be deaths love story.

The white knolls mocking loudly “Your lusty young man, nowhere in sight is he!”
“Ariella my angel!”  Assure me it’s not a mirage, O speak again sweet sound!
Yet I move not a step hushed by ecstasy, Lord let this not be death’s love story.
To beautify him further lacks only a gilded spark divine, love eternal unbound.
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Kauffman Avatar
December 13, 2022 at 11:02 AM
Anaya, congratulations on your win! The love of a longing heart truly shines through your lines like "a gilded spark divine." Blessings.
Anaya Avatar
December 13, 2022 at 3:21 PM
Sam, I'm grateful for your gracious comment and congratulations! Blessings your way!
Agustin Avatar
December 6, 2022 at 7:20 PM
Wow! Congrats! Thanks for sharing your reflections, beautifully expressed through your awesome poetic style. God bless you.
Anaya Avatar
December 13, 2022 at 3:19 PM
Thank you, Beata, it's good to see you are fine. I am happy I have a poetic style :D! ~Happy Holidays!
Seeker Avatar
December 5, 2022 at 8:11 PM
Love in love with love seeking love alone and melding with the currents rising therefrom, with love being God’s omnipresent energy pervading the universe from microcosm to macrocosm, your enchanting poem takes us on this rapturous journey! Exquisitely penned, Anaya. Warmest congratulations on your win
Anaya Avatar
December 6, 2022 at 9:17 AM
I am honored you chose me, understood me, and placed me in your truly amazing contest, Unseeking Seeker. Thank you ~Anaya
One Avatar
December 4, 2022 at 11:17 AM
I love a pantoum..I've written so many but not in a while I used to write them with song titles..yours os great and done so well..it flows perfectly with great verses through out
Anaya Avatar
December 4, 2022 at 2:40 PM
With song titles, sounds interesting. Thank you for your kind comments and encouragement Silent One!
Hankins Avatar
December 2, 2022 at 8:45 AM
Delightfully composed and well-written, Anaya. I enjoyed it.
Anaya Avatar
December 2, 2022 at 8:53 AM
Milton, it means so much to me, I believe in you. Thank you, glad you enjoyed! :D
Rodrigues Avatar
December 2, 2022 at 6:20 AM
they’ll say I made a superlative effort, to meet you again…
Anaya Avatar
December 2, 2022 at 7:15 AM
I wanted her character to be as intellectual/Old English as possible while in a spiritual sense, her love's journey without movement stands!
Buhagiar Avatar
December 1, 2022 at 10:50 PM
Excellent. I know how difficult it is to write a pantoum. You did well.
Anaya Avatar
December 2, 2022 at 7:26 AM
As such, this journey is without movement, being but a choice to align with love, grieving not for false ego's bereavement. My character is suffering while in a romantic state of being. Thank you for the encouragement, Victor, I knew you would like this one! ;)
Cunningham Avatar
December 1, 2022 at 2:38 PM
Brilliant poetry Anaya, not an easy form to compose but you've made it look easy. Best of luck in the contest. Tom
Anaya Avatar
December 1, 2022 at 4:42 PM
My first time with the pantoum, Tom, oh and also kind of a first time writing about romance. Love your Santa bashing limericks! :D
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