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I'd just checked out of a hotel in the town of Santa Fe Went to the store to collect supplies and went on my way I was heading for the gold rush in the state of California And had registered a claim at the foot of the Sierra Nevada. I arrived in Arizona and knew there was desert up ahead I'd heard many folks who'd tried to cross it had ended up dead But I'd prepared myself well and had brought plenty of water Because temperatures were rising and it was going to get hotter. I took it easy and walked my horse slowly, along with my mule Pushing them in this heat would have been the actions of a fool An old- timer I'd met in town had crossed this desert once before And had drawn me a map showing a water hole, in a canyon floor. It was about a two day ride in and I'd see three tall rocks he'd said But my plans were about to change soon because trouble lay ahead It was now approaching noon and everywhere shimmered in the heat My horse and mule needed a rest and were looking dead on their feet. After about an hour I set off, and then noticed vultures circling I thought it must be an animal that was on the verge of dying It was then that I heard two loud gunshots in the far distance I thought someone's is in distress and might need my assistance. Cautiously I headed off from my route to where I'd heard the sound To me someone firing shots meant that they wanted to be found I came across the scene, there was a covered wagon on its side Sat by the wagon was a young girl and when she saw me she cried. The wagon had lost a wheel and had fallen ten feet down a divide Both the horses were dead, along with a man and woman inside With the fall and the injuries I could see why they didn't survive The girl had been sleeping and the soft bedding, had kept her alive. The girl told me her name was Jenna and that she'd fired the gun She was badly dehydrated and her face badly burnt from the sun I gave her some sips of water but signs of heatstroke were showing I hope the old-timer had been right, but I had no way of knowing. I buried her folks in a shallow grave, it was the least I could do The shapes of the vultures circling stood out against the blue I managed to make crosses out of wood and put them side by side Then turned to the girl Jenna and said, "At sundown we'll ride". I then transferred some gear from my horse onto the mule Thought it would be better to travel at night when it was cool Luck was on our side with a full moon, as we headed into the night You could make out the features of the landscape in the bright light. We'd been travelling about seven hours and then straight up ahead Were three towering stacks of rock, just like the old-timer had said Standing majestic in the morning sunrise and were glowing a bright red I prayed the old-timer had been right or me and the girl would be dead. It was dark and cool in the canyon with towering walls either side Horse and mule were struggling now and wouldn't survive a long ride All my canteens were now empty and I'd given Jenna the last drop Then my horse lifted his head snorting , and came to an abrupt stop. Then over to my right there it was, crystal clear water in a well About three days ride from now we'd be out of this burning hell After a few hours resting in the canyon we were completely revived And I knew that without water neither of us would have survived. I made sure horse and mule had drank enough, and got ready to go But before any prospecting was done, I was going to Sacramento That's where Jenna and her folks had been going, she had told me To live on a farm of her fathers brother, his wife and their family. One thing I'd learnt on this trip was always prepare for the unexpected Or it would surely cost you your life and you could easily end up dead I was looking forward to some whiskey and a bath when we hit town And as we headed off out of the canyon the sun was going down. written 25th July 2022 Pick-A-Title, Vol 31 Poetry Contest Sponsored by Edward Ibeh

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Date: 8/31/2022 2:12:00 PM
More than impressive, Tom! You have great skill at crafting a story and incorporating rhyme and rhythm. I've not ever known anyone who did that, let alone do it as successfully as you do. Engaging.
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Date: 8/31/2022 3:43:00 PM
Thank you very much Sara, im happy that you enjoyed the story. My love of the old American west inspired me when writing this one. Tom
Date: 8/10/2022 11:23:00 AM
WoW! Tom, I thoroughly enjoyed your well written write. It was like I was watching a good western movie. Best wishes in the in the contest. I looks like a winner to me. PS, Did you write this with Jenna in mind? If so I know she really loved it-Alexis
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Date: 9/3/2022 3:31:00 AM
Thank you for your return visit and congrats Alexis.
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Alexis Y.
Date: 8/16/2022 1:00:00 PM
Oh , I see it did win. Congratulations on your win. It was well deserved:-) Alexis
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Date: 8/10/2022 3:25:00 PM
Thank you very much Alexis, I was thinking of a girls name and Jenna was the first name that came to mind. Im glad you enjoyed it. I hope you are keeping well. Tom
Date: 8/6/2022 10:04:00 PM
This is an amazing narrative, Tom. Silky smooth, great rhymes.. just pure captivation! Great drama and imagery. Your exceptional storytelling talent shines! Double congrats for your excellent win in Edward’s contest and for POTD honors. Enjoy your Sunday. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
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Date: 8/6/2022 11:49:00 PM
Thank you very much for your congrats on both counts Susan, I love stories about the old west and it was that that was the big inspiration for the poem. I hope you are keeping well. Tom
Date: 8/6/2022 12:00:00 AM
Congratulation ion anther gem pennend so proud you must be. An honorable choice by Poetry Soup distinguishing your Poem as POTD truly wonderful - hope you celebrated the honor bestowed on you. blessings, Jennifer
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Date: 8/6/2022 12:31:00 AM
Thank you very much for your congrats Jennifer, I did and wrote a follow up to it. Tom
Date: 7/31/2022 12:18:00 PM
Such a gripping narrative poem, Tom:-) You have an enviable gift of taking the reader on a journey with your writes! Congratulations on your win in my contest!
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Date: 7/31/2022 1:51:00 PM
Thank you very much for my placement Edward, I'm happy you enjoyed it. Thanks too for hosting the contest. Tom
Date: 7/31/2022 11:50:00 AM
Congratulations Sir Tom for your win in Edward Ibeh's contest, great story! Have a nice Sunday!
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Date: 7/31/2022 1:50:00 PM
Thank you very much Tania, I'm glad you enjoyed it. I hope you too have a lovely day. Tom
Date: 7/31/2022 9:28:00 AM
Back with "Congratulations" on your New win. What a story/write and storyteller. Have a great/blessed day writing more stories for us to enjoy.....................
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Date: 7/31/2022 9:36:00 AM
Thank you very much for your congrats and return visit Paula, much appreciated, hope you're enjoying your weekend. Tom
Date: 7/31/2022 2:16:00 AM
Back to your poem to congratulate you on your great win dear Tom !
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Date: 7/31/2022 2:32:00 AM
Thank you very much for your return visit and congrats Valsa, Tom
Date: 7/29/2022 7:32:00 AM
Great story with a warning! Thanks, Tom! Hugs ~ Kim
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Date: 7/29/2022 8:29:00 AM
Thank you very much Kim, I'm pleased that you enjoyed it. Tom
Date: 7/28/2022 11:54:00 AM
- Glad I stopped by ...excellent story, Tom :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 7/28/2022 12:32:00 PM
Thank you very much Anne, im happy you enjoyed it. Hope you're keeping well. Tom
Date: 7/28/2022 8:25:00 AM
Such an amazing tale Tom, so well told with great rhyme and flow too making it a really enjoyable read. Have a blessed day, Gordon
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Date: 7/28/2022 9:25:00 AM
Thank you very much Gordon, im pleased that you enjoyed the story. Hope you're keeping well, there's a chance it's going to warm up again, it was too much the last time. Tom
Date: 7/28/2022 4:48:00 AM
This is just amazing... I love your stories within poems. Always enjoy them so much. I hope this is a winner as it should be. God bless you friend - love, Gina
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Date: 7/28/2022 7:04:00 AM
Thank you very much Gina, im happy that you enjoyed it. Tom
Date: 7/28/2022 2:59:00 AM
It tells a wonderful story. Good one, Tom.
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Date: 7/28/2022 3:14:00 AM
Thank you very much John, I'm happy that you enjoyed the story. Tom
Date: 7/27/2022 11:20:00 PM
Fabulous story/poem Tom, one must learn not to ride a horse in the sun. Congratulations on poem of the day… Belle
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Date: 7/27/2022 11:45:00 PM
Thank you very much Belle, even that hot spell we had recently was too much for me, death valley in california is the hottest place on earth. Tom
Date: 7/27/2022 7:37:00 PM
SorryI missed this POTD, was sick but OK today. You have a true knack for writing… Congratulations. Panagiota xxx
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Date: 7/27/2022 11:47:00 PM
Thank you very much for your congrats Pangie, sorry to hear you've not been well, hope you make a speedy recovery. Tom
Date: 7/27/2022 6:50:00 PM
You have a talent for telling stories and amazing that you do it in rhyme form! Kudos, Tom, this piece of creative writing is without a doubt deserving of the honor of being chosen as POTD. I like the way it wraps up everything!
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Date: 7/27/2022 11:48:00 PM
Thank you very much Lasaad, I'm happy you enjoyed the story, I love tales of the old west and it was the inspiration for it. Tom
Date: 7/27/2022 4:03:00 PM
A captivating western from head to toe. Your character's name Jenna one of the most beautiful names! Is that our Jenna? Congratulations on POTD Tom! ~Anaya
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Date: 7/27/2022 11:50:00 PM
Thank you very much Anaya, Im glad you enjoyed it. Yes, that's our Jenna when she was about ten years old, soups own Mattie Ross. Tom
Date: 7/27/2022 7:06:00 AM
Bravo Tom, this is seriously excellent, so deserving of POTD. Harry.
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Date: 7/27/2022 8:54:00 AM
Thank you very much for your congrats Harry, im happy that you enjoyed it. Tom
Date: 7/27/2022 6:39:00 AM
Tom, you are a master story teller--and in rhyme! This narrative piece certainly deserves the title POTD. Love the ending! Janice
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Date: 7/27/2022 8:54:00 AM
Thank you very much Janice, im pleased that you enjoyed it, wasn't sure if it was too long. Tom
Date: 7/26/2022 7:02:00 PM
Congratulations, Tom, on your POTD honour - what an exciting story! You are such a story-teller, Tom ..You should start writing novels. Best wishes ~ Mala
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Date: 7/26/2022 10:37:00 PM
Thank you very much Mala, I'm happy that you enjoyed it. It's something I've thought about. Hope you're keeping well. Tom
Date: 7/26/2022 5:54:00 PM
My friend you have captured the heated scene , great story. Congratulations on POTD, well deserved. Many blessings
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Date: 7/26/2022 10:35:00 PM
Thank you very much Eve, I'm pleased that you enjoyed it. Hope it wasn't too long,, I couldn't stop lol. Tom
Date: 7/26/2022 5:51:00 PM
Tom to the rescue. : ) While reading these words from your pen, I felt like I was watching a Western. You certainly kept me in suspense. Congratulations Tom, on Poem of the Day. My best to you. Hugs, Brandy
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Date: 7/26/2022 10:34:00 PM
Thank you very much Brandy, I'm pleased that you enjoyed the story. Tom
Date: 7/26/2022 4:08:00 PM
Tom, an excellent poem, love the story and that Jenna was in your poem, congratulations on POTD!
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Date: 7/26/2022 10:33:00 PM
Thank you very much Tania, I'm happy that you enjoyed it. As you've probably guessed I'm a big fan of Westerns. Hope you're well. Tom
Date: 7/26/2022 2:26:00 PM
You are a novelist Tom. I really enjoyed your story. Congratulations on it being honored with POTD! You were hero and earth angel to little Jenna in your story. I hope it is a top winner for you Tom. Blessings xxoo
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Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 7/28/2022 4:23:00 PM
My son loved the desert. He had just bought property in Arizona before he died. He saw the wild beauty of the desert landscape.
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Tom Cunningham
Date: 7/26/2022 2:37:00 PM
Thank you very much Connie, when I saw the title Vultures Circling my muse took me to the desert region in Arizona and years of reading westerns gave me the inspiration. I'm pleased that you enjoyed it. Tom
Date: 7/26/2022 12:47:00 PM
Hi Tom, congratulations on a well deserved Poem Of The Day with this wonderful write. You have written a western gem that can stand beside the best. Hope you are well, my friend ..... Mike.
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Tom Cunningham
Date: 7/26/2022 1:14:00 PM
Thank you very much Mike, im glad you enjoyed it. Hope you're keeping well too. Tom
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