Darren White Poet Free verse

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Vortices

Fastening my grip on you, throwing my head up high
Where colours fight in sunlight bright enough to blind me
Vortices, one after another, dizzyingly 
maelstroms of words disappear unspoken
Will they drown me
those waves, will they drown me
can I come up and breathe again?
can I hold on and survive?

Waves
riding the board with you
blue sky opens to warm glow of the sunlight
from where I am the shore is near 
I relax, while you steer
small waves rippling lulling me to sleep

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August 22, 2017
Copyright © Darren White

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Douglas Maes October 4, 2017 at 3:03 PM This is awesome :) I love your poems. You seem like a pretty cool guy! Darren White October 5, 2017 at 1:17 AM Thank you so much :)

Patricia Cresswell August 25, 2017 at 11:36 AM I remember going to Niagara Falls and watching the whirpool below the falls. There was a cable car you could take that rode out over the water. Shoreside was enough for me. your poem just popped that memory into my mind as clear as day. It is so descriptive of the fears I had as a child of falling into the maelstrom. The water mesmerized me, called to me. Thank you for the poem. It will be a favourite if you don't mind. Darren White August 26, 2017 at 9:21 AM I am absolutely delighted that you favourite my poem, thank you so very much :)

Pashang Salehi August 24, 2017 at 11:53 AM Your idea is as great as the image you created.... Pashang Salehi September 1, 2017 at 8:41 PM Always..... Darren White August 26, 2017 at 9:20 AM Thank you :)

Arthur Vaso August 22, 2017 at 10:17 PM I sure can relate to this one!! Great poem! Darren White August 23, 2017 at 1:14 AM Thanks my friend :)

Dean Wood August 22, 2017 at 10:53 AM First stanza is a dizzyingly maelstrom of words! Second stanza let me off the hook. You have a great talent for tugging the reader where you want them to go. Great Job Darren! And thanks for the help on the free verse. -- Dean Darren White August 22, 2017 at 11:09 AM Thanks Dean! Leading people on in poetry I enjoy indeed. And no thanks needed about the Free Verse.

Lin Lane August 22, 2017 at 7:01 AM It seems you survived and now you're breathing all those words in the most fantastic waves of poetry for all to read. Darren White August 22, 2017 at 11:08 AM Yeah :) Thanks so much Lin.

Tim Smith August 22, 2017 at 6:46 AM Many contemplations present themselves before we ride off on our wave... terrific my friend Darren White August 22, 2017 at 11:07 AM Thanks my friend :)

Robert Lindley August 22, 2017 at 5:54 AM Great write my friend. May also describe time waves as they wash over you , eventually wearing your life force down until that final huge wave washes you away.. I love such deep poems when so well composed! A fav... Darren White August 22, 2017 at 11:06 AM Thank you my friend, also for the fav :)

Joanna Daniel August 22, 2017 at 4:31 AM Deep poem, Darren, glad you found rest:) Darren White August 22, 2017 at 11:06 AM Thanks Jo :)

Sara Ella August 22, 2017 at 3:10 AM I love the idea of a maelstrom of words Darren :) A wonderful poem! Darren White August 22, 2017 at 11:05 AM Thanks Sara :)