Kim Van Breda Poet Rhyme

Vodka and Lime Andaree For Contest

VODKA AND LIME

light and heavenly distilled to silence night
personal dark secret delight
drifting thoughts spinning time
on substance abuse sublime
brain freeze back
lime
Vodka smack
another filtered climb
every poem clothed in rhyme
pure imagination takes to flight
light and heavenly distilled to silence night

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Charlotte Puddifoot October 19, 2015 at 4:12 PM as andrea said a few lines off on syllable count, but i really like the poem itself - this is why i'm not keen on restricted syllable form, it can push a very good poem far lower than it should be...congrats on your placement anyway :) Kim Van Breda October 19, 2015 at 4:30 PM Thanks Charlotte and Andrea for comments and encouragement :) .. my first attempt at Andrea's format, and not as easy as I thought. I think I got it right in the second one I tried.. called "LAMPS" ( about backstreet abortion).. but I had already submitted this one ~~X~~

Andrea Dietrich October 17, 2015 at 9:09 PM at least one line was off on syllable count. Great poem though! Congrats. Kim Van Breda October 19, 2015 at 4:28 PM Thanks Charlotte and Andrea for comments and encouragement :) .. my first attempt at your format, and not as easy as I thought. I think I got it right in the second one I tried.. called "LAMPS" ( about backstreet abortion).. but I had already submitted this one ~~X~~

James Fraser October 9, 2015 at 2:15 PM Crafted beautifully Kim, love it. Way to go - wishing you a lovely weekend, James :)