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Visitors

Spirits riding time,
in swirling clouds, mist and fog,
off the bluff they rolled.



Special thanks to James Marshall Goff for taking the time to explain haiku to me in a manner 
that helped me to appreciate its imagery and rigid format.

"Visitors" is a spin-off from another poem "Heritage", which I wrote a few years ago and 
posted on PS only a few minutes ago. If the imagery and emotions I attempted to evoke fell 
short of your expectations, read "Heritage" and you'll tell more about what I was attempting 
to communicate. This is my first attempt at haiku, so do be too mean. ;-) ~<><

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James Marshall Goff Date: 4/23/2017 7:48:00 AM Love it again! inspirational, Jim! Login to Reply Jim Fish Date: 5/5/2017 9:46:00 AM Thanks again, James.

Katherine Stella Date: 4/24/2010 6:01:00 AM Jim this blew me away this reminded me of that song riders in the sky very nice imagery in this one thanks for sharing and congrats on this being featured Login to Reply

Carol Sunshine Brown Date: 4/19/2010 2:53:00 AM Congratulations on your poetry being featured this week Jim. Love, Carol Login to Reply

Date: 4/18/2010 4:01:00 PM Good use of imagery in this haiku! Nice tribute to James. Congratulations on having your poem featured. Wishing you continued success with your writing. Karen Login to Reply

Raul Moreno Date: 2/28/2010 11:19:00 PM Great attempt at haiku Jim. The first thing is syllable use and you have that down. I look forward to seeing you try Senryu, Same syllable use just the topic is not about nature...Raul Login to Reply

Donna Golden Date: 11/29/2009 12:43:00 PM Jim, this is a gorgeous haiku! You've proven that your skills go far beyond the Cowboy Poetry niche. Hugs, Donna Login to Reply

Sara Kendrick Date: 10/30/2009 4:07:00 PM I can see the clouds swirling off the bluff. Keep writing. Sara Login to Reply

Brian Strand Date: 10/29/2009 1:16:00 AM Thank you for your welcome blog comments today Jim.Rgds Brian Login to Reply

Steven Goff Date: 10/1/2009 7:23:00 PM WHO CRIES THE DOVE! Login to Reply

Steven Goff Date: 10/1/2009 7:22:00 PM Hi Jim! steve Login to Reply

Brian Strand Date: 9/26/2009 7:55:00 AM Niced one Jim.Rgds Brian & thanks for your welcome blog comments today Login to Reply

Date: 9/19/2009 11:25:00 AM So much depth in this poem, leaving the reader with a lot to think about. I really like the opening line. I enjoyed your response of "Verbal Art" to my blog question. The description certainly fits this poem. Keep on writing! Karen Login to Reply

Sharon Winter Date: 9/14/2009 9:12:00 AM soup mail - awesome haiku! love, shar Login to Reply

Sue Mason Date: 8/14/2009 9:29:00 PM Beautifully done haiku ... its a fun form along with the Senryu which is the same syllable count but concerns more human foibles than nature. I guess I've seen too many westerns in my day because I really see the natives lined up on the bluff in this one ... LOL ... great write, Jim !! Login to Reply

Dane Ann Smith-Johnsen Date: 8/13/2009 12:09:00 PM Jim, This is a very well written haiku. As I read, two things came to mind. Almost instantly, my memories went to my children who, when on summer vacation, rolled down Hill Commorah laughing all the while...climbed back up and rolled down again, many times. It also brought to mind a place called Hueco Tanks, Texas where Native Americans lived during an earlier time. Both memories were enjoyed because of your words. Thank you. DAS-J Login to Reply

Frances King Date: 7/11/2009 3:14:00 AM This is great, Jim! I can see the mustangs and smell the war-paint! Brilliant first Haiku! Thank you for your comments on Canvey Island summers, yes, we are in England, just downriver from London. Tarmacadam is the stuff they put on roads - you know it as blacktop, and an assegai is the long spear used by African Zulu warriors. Grandad was a sailor on the sailing ships around 1900, and he brought back all sorts of stuff. He also missed the Titanic, but that's another poem ... =o Login to Reply

James Fraser Date: 6/25/2009 3:42:00 PM Super Haiku Jim, it's amazing how so few words can say so much>>James Login to Reply

Raul Moreno Date: 6/25/2009 12:56:00 AM You've mastered my favorite style Jim. Excellent work...Raul Login to Reply

James Marshall Goff Date: 6/24/2009 1:16:00 PM wow Jim! you hit it oughta-the park on your first at bat!!! now I see an example here of Native American Ancestral vision-quest, popularized by Native American poetry and story-books, from my research, the Ancestors swirl-up to communicate with visual evidence their path....and only reveal themselves to those worthy of such an honor, you have captured this genre perfectly, as I would expect someone of your talent to!!!! write more!!! and thanks for props! jmg Login to Reply

P Sheart Date: 6/24/2009 8:39:00 AM Hi Cowboy Jim What a beautiful vision you paint here. "Spirits riding time" I love that line. Feels Native American in my heart.I can see those ancestrial spirits riding on. For your first haiku I'd say Bravo! Take care Love Light Truth Patricia Login to Reply

Brian Strand Date: 6/24/2009 12:21:00 AM Nice one Jim.Rgds Brian Login to Reply

Carrie Richards Date: 6/23/2009 5:43:00 PM You've mastered the haiku perfectly. Beautifully done! Love, Carrie Login to Reply

Carolyn Devonshire Date: 6/23/2009 5:24:00 PM Brilliant, provocative haiku, Jim. Many interpretations can be made, but I see the returning (visiting) spirits of Native Americans. Awesome write! Love, Carolyn Login to Reply