Jim Fish Poet Haiku

Visitors

Spirits riding time,
in swirling clouds, mist and fog,
off the bluff they rolled.



Special thanks to James Marshall Goff for taking the time to explain haiku to me in a manner 
that helped me to appreciate its imagery and rigid format.

"Visitors" is a spin-off from another poem "Heritage", which I wrote a few years ago and 
posted on PS only a few minutes ago. If the imagery and emotions I attempted to evoke fell 
short of your expectations, read "Heritage" and you'll tell more about what I was attempting 
to communicate. This is my first attempt at haiku, so do be too mean. ;-) ~<><

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James Marshall Goff April 23, 2017 at 7:48 AM Love it again! inspirational, Jim! Jim Fish May 5, 2017 at 9:46 AM Thanks again, James.

Katherine Stella April 24, 2010 at 6:01 AM Jim this blew me away this reminded me of that song riders in the sky very nice imagery in this one thanks for sharing and congrats on this being featured

Carol Sunshine Brown April 19, 2010 at 2:53 AM Congratulations on your poetry being featured this week Jim. Love, Carol

April 18, 2010 at 4:01 PM Good use of imagery in this haiku! Nice tribute to James. Congratulations on having your poem featured. Wishing you continued success with your writing. Karen

Raul Moreno February 28, 2010 at 11:19 PM Great attempt at haiku Jim. The first thing is syllable use and you have that down. I look forward to seeing you try Senryu, Same syllable use just the topic is not about nature...Raul

Donna Golden November 29, 2009 at 12:43 PM Jim, this is a gorgeous haiku! You've proven that your skills go far beyond the Cowboy Poetry niche. Hugs, Donna

Sara Kendrick October 30, 2009 at 4:07 PM I can see the clouds swirling off the bluff. Keep writing. Sara

Brian Strand October 29, 2009 at 1:16 AM Thank you for your welcome blog comments today Jim.Rgds Brian

Steven Goff October 1, 2009 at 7:23 PM WHO CRIES THE DOVE!

Steven Goff October 1, 2009 at 7:22 PM Hi Jim! steve

Brian Strand September 26, 2009 at 7:55 AM Niced one Jim.Rgds Brian & thanks for your welcome blog comments today

September 19, 2009 at 11:25 AM So much depth in this poem, leaving the reader with a lot to think about. I really like the opening line. I enjoyed your response of "Verbal Art" to my blog question. The description certainly fits this poem. Keep on writing! Karen

Sharon Winter September 14, 2009 at 9:12 AM soup mail - awesome haiku! love, shar

Sue Mason August 14, 2009 at 9:29 PM Beautifully done haiku ... its a fun form along with the Senryu which is the same syllable count but concerns more human foibles than nature. I guess I've seen too many westerns in my day because I really see the natives lined up on the bluff in this one ... LOL ... great write, Jim !!

Dane Ann Smith-Johnsen August 13, 2009 at 12:09 PM Jim, This is a very well written haiku. As I read, two things came to mind. Almost instantly, my memories went to my children who, when on summer vacation, rolled down Hill Commorah laughing all the while...climbed back up and rolled down again, many times. It also brought to mind a place called Hueco Tanks, Texas where Native Americans lived during an earlier time. Both memories were enjoyed because of your words. Thank you. DAS-J

Frances King July 11, 2009 at 3:14 AM This is great, Jim! I can see the mustangs and smell the war-paint! Brilliant first Haiku! Thank you for your comments on Canvey Island summers, yes, we are in England, just downriver from London. Tarmacadam is the stuff they put on roads - you know it as blacktop, and an assegai is the long spear used by African Zulu warriors. Grandad was a sailor on the sailing ships around 1900, and he brought back all sorts of stuff. He also missed the Titanic, but that's another poem ... =o

James Fraser June 25, 2009 at 3:42 PM Super Haiku Jim, it's amazing how so few words can say so much>>James

Raul Moreno June 25, 2009 at 12:56 AM You've mastered my favorite style Jim. Excellent work...Raul

James Marshall Goff June 24, 2009 at 1:16 PM wow Jim! you hit it oughta-the park on your first at bat!!! now I see an example here of Native American Ancestral vision-quest, popularized by Native American poetry and story-books, from my research, the Ancestors swirl-up to communicate with visual evidence their path....and only reveal themselves to those worthy of such an honor, you have captured this genre perfectly, as I would expect someone of your talent to!!!! write more!!! and thanks for props! jmg

P Sheart June 24, 2009 at 8:39 AM Hi Cowboy Jim What a beautiful vision you paint here. "Spirits riding time" I love that line. Feels Native American in my heart.I can see those ancestrial spirits riding on. For your first haiku I'd say Bravo! Take care Love Light Truth Patricia

Brian Strand June 24, 2009 at 12:21 AM Nice one Jim.Rgds Brian

Carrie Richards June 23, 2009 at 5:43 PM You've mastered the haiku perfectly. Beautifully done! Love, Carrie

Carolyn Devonshire June 23, 2009 at 5:24 PM Brilliant, provocative haiku, Jim. Many interpretations can be made, but I see the returning (visiting) spirits of Native Americans. Awesome write! Love, Carolyn