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Vintage Pain

aged valise in field of ferns, burlap coat to shield love’s pain- vintage tote reveals its past, hoping to find youth again September 5, 2017

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James Inman

Date: 9/27/2017 9:00:00 AM

A really nice emotional write Laura. I came back to re-read this. It is much deeper than I initially realized. Very well done.

Subimal Sinha-Roy

Date: 9/12/2017 1:46:00 AM

Congratulations, Laura on your placement.

Eve Roper

Date: 9/11/2017 10:45:00 PM

Congratulations on your win , Laura, Hugs Eve

Winged Warrior

Date: 9/11/2017 6:17:00 PM

Congrats!!! my friend on your great win...god bless...^WW^

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 9/11/2017 6:10:00 PM

Back for congrats!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/11/2017 5:38:00 PM

How cool the way you added rhyme to it, Laura. VERY good job, and Congratulations

Jack Webster

Date: 9/11/2017 12:23:00 PM

Congratulations! Such beautiful and audible meter! I love the assonance between valise and field. The beautiful meter makes the triple stress on shield's love pain so strong. your use of meter reminds me of Emily Dickenson and Mary Oliver!

Nette Onclaud

Date: 9/11/2017 11:21:00 AM

lou, amazing diction that weaves a sentimental, fluent mood...my best congrats on your fine citation, and thanks for supporting this challenge... huggs

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 9/5/2017 9:02:00 PM

Love this, Luloo!

Lu Loo
Date: 9/5/2017 9:34:00 PM

thank you lovely Kim! :)