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Vintage Pain

aged valise
in field of ferns,
burlap coat
to shield love’s pain-
vintage tote
reveals its past,
hoping to find youth again


September 5, 2017

agesorrowverse

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James Inman

September 27, 2017 at 9:00 AM

A really nice emotional write Laura. I came back to re-read this. It is much deeper than I initially realized. Very well done.

Subimal Sinha-Roy

September 12, 2017 at 1:46 AM

Congratulations, Laura on your placement.

Eve Roper

September 11, 2017 at 10:45 PM

Congratulations on your win , Laura, Hugs Eve

Winged Warrior

September 11, 2017 at 6:17 PM

Congrats!!! my friend on your great win...god bless...^WW^

Kim Rodrigues

September 11, 2017 at 6:10 PM

Back for congrats!

Andrea Dietrich

September 11, 2017 at 5:38 PM

How cool the way you added rhyme to it, Laura. VERY good job, and Congratulations

Jack Webster

September 11, 2017 at 12:23 PM

Congratulations! Such beautiful and audible meter! I love the assonance between valise and field. The beautiful meter makes the triple stress on shield's love pain so strong. your use of meter reminds me of Emily Dickenson and Mary Oliver!

Nette Onclaud

September 11, 2017 at 11:21 AM

lou, amazing diction that weaves a sentimental, fluent mood...my best congrats on your fine citation, and thanks for supporting this challenge... huggs