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~ Venus and Mars ~

As the stars cross this brumous night ~

Standing here with these white washing tides

Carrying away the sands beneath my feet

Glancing beyond the repetitious of this champagne sea

Swells amid the rifts now rising....

Before my thoughts and inside of my heart

Communing with a chromatic collage of endless faces ~

This colloquy within my own souls revelations

As the mist before my eyes begins to clear

And the lighthouse of truth, as truth is, begins to appear

Castaway phantoms walking upon the waters

Beckoning unto me all of their beauties ~

Their irreplaceable hopes and dreams....

Transcending the tangibles, amid an unproportional world 

The relevancies of every life, speaking unto me 

As a warm tear rolls down my face

While Jupiter explodes, before my eyes ~

Impaling my spirit with these impeccable purities....

Sublime; as I walk further into the swishing swirling currents

Toward the fathoms of acceptances understandings

Taking their precious hands, as the moon smiles upon their, glow ~

Born anew, within this panoramic and palindrome view....

Embracing their beating breathing hearts~These creations!

Turning back the tides of time; castaways no more

For it is all of life that I see now, deep inside the splendor

The wonders of whom they are, each, as a precious jewel ~

Awakened, amid these implosive clarities....

As the stars cross the fading brumous night

Standing here with the white washing tides

Carrying away the sands beneath my feet, forever ~

Glancing beyond the repetitions of this champagne sea 

Phantasms of once thought lore, smiling as they come alive

Lessons learned, and shifting dunes, of truths unfold....

While these rubies as tears, fall, from the corners of my sight

Marking my cheeks, unto their graves of what used to be

Slightly quivering lips; as these endless wells of emotion, arise inside

Realizing, how much I truly care, for each and every one, of their lives ~

Mars, now embracing Venus with, an everlasting kiss....

                       ~ Of ~

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           ~ Unconditional Love! ~

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Charlene Bird June 10, 2009 at 8:22 PM This is Amazing! Love the depth and your excellent creativity with this piece. Such beauty within and his name is JOhn. January 12, 2012 at 12:24 AM ©©© • S M I L E • ®®® ... 'MmM' ... ®®® • S M I L E • ©©©

Cortney Bartholomew May 11, 2009 at 10:51 AM John, this is beautiful... i haven't been around in a while. i apologize. ive been reading your poetry i love reading all your poems, but i like this one especially... i hope i here from u n i miss talking to u....i have alot more poetry to put in and havent been to the library to use the computer for quite a while. miss u much cortney

Ernilando Tugaff April 30, 2009 at 9:45 PM John, you are indeed a poet, you possess a very fertile mind and imagination. Wonderful poem. Ernilando

Ashe Kristy De La Keur Scoville April 12, 2009 at 12:58 PM I like where your poem takes me...makes me forget my woes for just a little bit. Thanks for hyour comments I hope I am worhty...Kristy

Daver Austin April 10, 2009 at 4:46 AM Hi, John. Talk about imagination. This is a great trip, a realization, inspiration within imaginationl. I will read it again and again, Thanks for your comments. The poem you read is Moussorgsky's "Night on Bare Mountain" set to rhyme. Nothing personal, just some writing fun. Love, daver

Nadia Shahwan April 7, 2009 at 4:37 PM It rhymes...ideas flow smoothly. Thank you for commenting MonaLisa.

Nadia Shahwan April 7, 2009 at 5:43 AM Beautiful. I enjoyed reading it...all the best.

Anna-Marie Docherty April 7, 2009 at 1:03 AM Hint 4th line typo, to ease the read. Another piece of brilliance, I can see I'm going to enjoy the wonderful story ppictures you paint in poetic verse. Love you use of technique to move us onwards through your pieces. Well done! Happy Easter! Thanks for your welcome reads/coments!Anna-Marie. ;D

Janice Herzog April 2, 2009 at 8:22 AM Dear John: Such a romantic, tender, loving piece this is. Love, Janice Herzog xoxo

Bianca Reyes April 1, 2009 at 3:31 AM Hi John. Thank you for your comment on my poem That Night. It meant a lot since it has been a while since I've written poems because of my busy schedule. I've been reading through your poems, this one I particularly like because of the vivid and beautiful imagery. Great one John. Take Care. ~Andrea Bianca. :)

Laurie Ginn March 31, 2009 at 1:10 PM What a wealth of emotion John. I love the champagne sea, such a vivid desription, the bubbles the foam the color. Wonderful write.

Cheryl Mccall March 31, 2009 at 9:21 AM John Your poetry is fantastic and so feeling from your heart are you writing a book? if not you should share with the world I'm waiting for my copyright before I leave my legacy!

Laura Mckenzie March 30, 2009 at 6:58 PM My Dearest John you never stop showing me true talent as rare as a gem in a dark cave. You are romance wrapped in understanding ! Your voice screams to be noticed! And I see it clearly just a wonderful write this is indeed! Love Laura :) I think I have a love affair with your work!

Michelle Mac Donald March 28, 2009 at 3:14 PM Hey John! This piece swirls with imagery and symbolism. There is something romantically magical about the tides that roam beneath a starlit night. "Mars", the god of war who nourishes and protects."Venus",goddess of beauty and love. Small wonder why the tides are so restless. Surely Mercury, who recieves and processes perceptions, helps to maintain this "Unconditional Love"? This write feels tender and serene..Beautifully done! God's blessing to you and yours...Love to you, Mikki

Robin L. Gass March 26, 2009 at 9:53 PM I just commented on this but it is so rich and lovely, it can be read over and over! Thank you for your thoughtful words, John. I know that write was harsh but I wrote it for the contest from something I had written last summer when I was going through a rough time with my depression. I believe that God understands my depression & he gave me the abiityto write out these feelings & get rid of the. Thank you always, John, for your words of faith and wisdom. (John 3:16) Love, Robin

Charmaine Chircop March 26, 2009 at 5:11 PM stars,sands,tides,champagne.sea, wow!so romantic,i can visualize this picture,i love it,tnks for your sinciere comment too.

Carolyn Devonshire March 26, 2009 at 4:36 PM I love the way you bring Venus (women) and Mars (men) together "with an everlasting kiss!" The use of planets to convey human traits is intriguing throughout this great work, John! I shall be sending you a soup mail regarding prophecies. Love, Carolyn

Maryam Jameela Haniff March 26, 2009 at 1:26 PM this is such a dreamy poem...it makes u feel calm and happy inside..it is really heart touching and the emotions are just flowing perfectly..wonderful job!....Maryam*

Tyesha Ehigiator March 25, 2009 at 9:02 PM John, I am at a loss for words, this is absolutely beautiful, Wonderful images here flowing with a gentle tone...Very intriguing passionate piece crafted with such delicacy. All the right words in all the right places..God Bless You Always, Tyesha

David Smalling March 25, 2009 at 1:27 PM My dear, John, thanks for reading my poem. In this poem of titled planetary, I see the new mythology of the genders coming from different places, it must be a powerful force then that brings the aliens to kiss. You, Sir, are a very scholar, and a great writer. God bless you

Joyce Johnson March 25, 2009 at 1:15 PM Very touching John. I bow before your ability to find the right words. Thank you for your kind words. Love, Joyce

Diane Christian March 25, 2009 at 9:14 AM beautiful written John, I love been on the beach justblooking outt o sea, hope all is well, we all fine, god bless you from diane

L'Nass Shango March 25, 2009 at 8:07 AM Deeply provocative thoughts, my friend, a philosophy beyond mere peace stretched by exploration of self and beyond. I enjoy this with a slow reading like sipping on pina colada. Love January 12, 2012 at 12:15 AM YESSSS BABY * SWEEET LUV!! :)

Carrie Richards March 25, 2009 at 7:59 AM So beautifully written, the tide of it sweeps one away with such loveliness and gentleness...yet completly passionate as well. Unconditional love....what could be more pure or sacred...?? A wonderful poem, John. love, Carrie

Robin L. Gass March 25, 2009 at 6:39 AM This is filled wth such beautiful ans clear imagery, John! The depth of your emotions is tangible and your love for your fellowman shines through. Unconditional love, the love for us that God has for us and so He gave us Christ to raise us from the dead so we can share an eternity of love. hat is what this write makes me think of. Excellent work, my friend! (Revelation 1:1-8) Love always, Robin

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