Venom

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i scream laughter ... pain like endless dangerfield one-liners rocks me breathless tears - unchristened acid on my cheek knock-knock-open-up lips as sweet as scorpions my, how sublime that juicy fruit they hide a sexy serpent dancing pierced and plump 'tween your butter-chub cheeks wrapped ‘round me like love violet eyes looking up shining … murder me, mercilessly your taste of me i die for.

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Robert Lindley

Date: 7/13/2021 1:13:00 PM

This illuminating gem to me speaks volumes. Humanity too often exists with its follies, darkness, deceit and vanity as a rampaging and clever beast wearing masks born from Medusa's blood. Yet as poets we must emphasis the better, kinder, sweeter and more romantic views of life as an offering of encouragement and hope in the light that stirs our souls with the magic held within each new dawn! A fav.. God bless..

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 7/16/2021 1:05:00 AM

You are always kind - thank you Robert!

Christuraj Alex

Date: 7/11/2021 7:26:00 PM

murder me, mercilessly your taste of me Deeply passionate words.

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 7/16/2021 1:04:00 AM

Many kind thanks, Christuraj!

Paghunda Zahid

Date: 7/11/2021 5:51:00 PM

Congratulations on your win in the contest

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 7/16/2021 1:04:00 AM

Thank you so very much, Padhunda!

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 7/9/2021 5:50:00 PM

I’m surprised by the lack of comments. I’m glad you posted to Facebook as I am not here that often.

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 7/9/2021 11:34:00 PM

Thank you so much, Richard, I greatly appreciate - I rarely get comments here ... it's discouraging at times, but I write for the few who DO appreciate it. If we can affect ONE life in a positive way, then we've done our jobs as poets, I think ... if we've brought a little bit of beauty or emotion to this world. Blessings, Brother.