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A Dilly Dally Contest: Vanishing Point 9 Sept 2024
I brave the winds to await summer And yearn for days when love duly appears, Long enough till daylight erupts Into a sizzle of wistful rendezvous-- While along the pier, a cruiseship far Moves toward me , my warm delight. Preparing foil of blossoms fresh, My hand trembles as the sail nears That my flesh moistens from the wait, as passengers alight from the door: Still, your silhouette becomes a haze, evanescing into air... where could he be? And this heart begins to fade in crushed pinpoint of night... a fleeting trance Just like so? God how I hurt: Now my screams slip into oblivion, a moment erased By a vanished dream thinning as summer weeps.

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Date: 9/11/2024 9:06:00 PM
The dream certainly dies hard in a torrent of pain. G.L. in the contest, Nette. :) Gershon
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Date: 9/11/2024 10:07:00 AM
Very painful...beautiful though, could read this was from your soul
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Date: 9/9/2024 3:15:00 PM
Nette, The pain you describe is something we can think about and empathize with. As I was reading, I was thinking about disappointments and how they can sting. In a way, it's lucky and good if we can move beyond. I am wondering if dreams ever vanish completely. The thinning you describe is something to contemplate. Smiling!
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Date: 9/9/2024 6:28:00 AM
Dear Nette, I feel so many things when I read your poem which shows the power of the poet. There is a true sense of vanishing returns and the hopelessness that it brings. I sure hope you do very well in the contest because the emotions are quite powerful. - Blessings, MY Dear Friend, Daniel
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Date: 9/8/2024 5:30:00 PM
I can feel the anticipation of arrival dashed by disappointment of one who hasn’t returned. Brilliant verse, Nettie! Great to read your poems again! :)
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Date: 9/8/2024 12:05:00 PM
Your poem powerfully conveys the complex emotions associated with longing and the inevitable disappointment that follows when those hopes are dashed. It effectively uses imagery and symbolism to evoke the transient nature of dreams and the heartache of unfulfilled desires.
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Date: 9/8/2024 11:46:00 AM
Anticipation unfulfilled, a vanishing point. So many questions linger. Excellent take on the theme dear Nette
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Date: 9/8/2024 11:37:00 AM
I could sense the forboding in your verse Nette best of luck in the contest. Hope your weekend is going well. Tom
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