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Vampire

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Pleiades 6 Contest Sponsored by Joseph May 09/20/23

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Vladimir shuns sunlight Vampire bat stalks at night Vivid moon shines so bright Vile pointed teeth cause fright Veins on nude neck he’ll bite Virgin’s blood his delight Victim turns ghostly white

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Terry Flood
Date: 9/29/2023 5:11:00 PM
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Congrats on your vein popping win, Jan
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 9/28/2023 3:47:00 PM
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a cleverly written Pleiades...and the picture is perfect. have a great evening, Sara
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Sam Kauffman
Date: 9/28/2023 10:37:00 AM
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Well done, Jan! straight from the castle in Transylvania! Stark, scary imagery! Congrats and high fives! Think I'll go find a garlic necklace now, just for drill! Blessings and hugs!
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Janice Canerdy
Date: 9/27/2023 3:17:00 PM
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Great entry, Jan. Congrats on your win. Janice
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Terry Miller
Date: 9/27/2023 7:22:00 AM
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Very nicely done; congratulations
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Joseph May
Date: 9/27/2023 6:04:00 AM
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Very nicely done Jan, Congrats on your win
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Alexis Y.
Date: 9/22/2023 6:15:00 AM
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Wow Jan, You did such a good job with this. It's creepy and spooky, not to mention it's a monorhyme too. You made it look so easy. We chose the same word and was challenging for me. Best of luck in the contest. Have a great weekend-Alexis
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Jan Allison
Date: 9/22/2023 6:52:00 AM
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Thanks Alexis, i will drop right on by:-) hugs jan xx
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Terry Flood
Date: 9/21/2023 4:01:00 PM
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You little show off, you. A monorhyme Pleiades… and a top notch one too. I haven’t posted mine yet… guess what.. it’s ‘Vampire’ too. Now THAT’S uncanny.
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Jan Allison
Date: 9/24/2023 5:08:00 AM
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To be honest Terry it was a subject I really wanted to get my teeth into lol:-) hugs Jan xx
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Jan Allison
Date: 9/22/2023 6:52:00 AM
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yeah I thought i would show my critics that I can write 'real' poetry for a change lol:-) hugs Jan xx shame U for urine/urinal wasnt there lol:-) hugs jan xx
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Ilene Bauer
Date: 9/21/2023 1:56:00 PM
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well done, jan! vampires always creep me out...
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Jan Allison
Date: 9/22/2023 6:51:00 AM
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Yeah me too Ilene, never been in to horror - its bad enough looking in the mirror in the morning lol:-) hugs jan xx
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Robert Lindley
Date: 9/21/2023 11:05:00 AM
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A very intellectual new piece my good friend. Vastly strong on its v's. If for a contest its got to place high. God bless you
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Jan Allison
Date: 9/22/2023 6:50:00 AM
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Thanks Robert:-) hugs Jan xx
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John Lawless
Date: 9/21/2023 7:02:00 AM
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DAMMIT....I had to run and bite a tomato after reading this. Wicked take on the Snow White fable and an expose' of the Dwarfs....
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Jan Allison
Date: 9/21/2023 7:10:00 AM
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ha ha ha thanks John I do appreciate your support, your comment sure made me lol:-) hugs jan xx
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Victor Buhagiar
Date: 9/21/2023 1:33:00 AM
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Brilliant Pleiades on a vampire. Perfect description. Hugs xx
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Jan Allison
Date: 9/21/2023 5:40:00 AM
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Thanks Victor I hope Joseph likes it:-) hugs jan xx
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Jerry Brotherton
Date: 9/20/2023 6:11:00 PM
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OOOOOH, a great Halloween poem Jan. Surely a winner for the contest.
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Jan Allison
Date: 9/21/2023 5:39:00 AM
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Thanks Jerry i am not a fan of Halloween or Hop Tu Naa as it is called here but thought i would try the contest:-) hugs Jan xx
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Karen Jones
Date: 9/20/2023 1:52:00 PM
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Fun and spooky at the same time. Wonderfully melodic with great form and perfect for Halloween! Well done.
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Jan Allison
Date: 9/20/2023 2:25:00 PM
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Thanks Karen. where i live on the isle of Man it is called Hop Tu Naa :-) hugs Jan xx
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Anne-Lise Andresen
Date: 9/20/2023 1:23:00 PM
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- "Victim turns ghostly white" ... snow white ... - what a bloody bite, Jan :) - GL in the contest :) - hugs
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Jan Allison
Date: 9/20/2023 2:24:00 PM
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thanks Anne-Lise:-) hugs Jan xx
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Lin Lane
Date: 9/20/2023 1:14:00 PM
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Oh, this Pleiades is so bloody well written! (I had to write that.) And I just commented on your other, but this one deserves high praise for also being Monorhyme. Great job!
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Jan Allison
Date: 9/20/2023 2:24:00 PM
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Oh thanks Lin, I hope the sponsor likes this one it took some time to write but I set myself the challenge of monorhyme:-) hugs Jan xx

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