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Pleiades 6 Contest Sponsored by Joseph May 09/20/23

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Vampire

Vladimir shuns sunlight
Vampire bat stalks at night
Vivid moon shines so bright
Vile pointed teeth cause fright
Veins on nude neck he’ll bite
Virgin’s blood his delight
Victim turns ghostly white

Copyright © Jan Allison | Year Posted 2023

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September 29, 2023 at 5:11 PM

Congrats on your vein popping win, Jan

September 28, 2023 at 10:37 AM

Well done, Jan! straight from the castle in Transylvania! Stark, scary imagery! Congrats and high fives! Think I'll go find a garlic necklace now, just for drill! Blessings and hugs!

September 27, 2023 at 3:17 PM

Great entry, Jan. Congrats on your win. Janice

September 27, 2023 at 7:22 AM

Very nicely done; congratulations

September 27, 2023 at 6:04 AM

Very nicely done Jan, Congrats on your win

September 22, 2023 at 6:15 AM

Wow Jan, You did such a good job with this. It's creepy and spooky, not to mention it's a monorhyme too. You made it look so easy. We chose the same word and was challenging for me. Best of luck in the contest. Have a great weekend-Alexis

September 22, 2023 at 6:52 AM

Thanks Alexis, i will drop right on by:-) hugs jan xx

September 21, 2023 at 4:01 PM

You little show off, you. A monorhyme Pleiades… and a top notch one too. I haven’t posted mine yet… guess what.. it’s ‘Vampire’ too. Now THAT’S uncanny.

September 24, 2023 at 5:08 AM

To be honest Terry it was a subject I really wanted to get my teeth into lol:-) hugs Jan xx

September 22, 2023 at 6:52 AM

yeah I thought i would show my critics that I can write 'real' poetry for a change lol:-) hugs Jan xx shame U for urine/urinal wasnt there lol:-) hugs jan xx

September 21, 2023 at 1:56 PM

well done, jan! vampires always creep me out...

September 22, 2023 at 6:51 AM

Yeah me too Ilene, never been in to horror - its bad enough looking in the mirror in the morning lol:-) hugs jan xx

September 21, 2023 at 11:05 AM

A very intellectual new piece my good friend. Vastly strong on its v's. If for a contest its got to place high. God bless you

September 22, 2023 at 6:50 AM

Thanks Robert:-) hugs Jan xx

September 21, 2023 at 7:02 AM

DAMMIT....I had to run and bite a tomato after reading this. Wicked take on the Snow White fable and an expose' of the Dwarfs....

September 21, 2023 at 7:10 AM

ha ha ha thanks John I do appreciate your support, your comment sure made me lol:-) hugs jan xx

Victor Buhagiar

September 21, 2023 at 1:33 AM

Brilliant Pleiades on a vampire. Perfect description. Hugs xx

September 21, 2023 at 5:40 AM

Thanks Victor I hope Joseph likes it:-) hugs jan xx

Jerry Brotherton

September 20, 2023 at 6:11 PM

OOOOOH, a great Halloween poem Jan. Surely a winner for the contest.

September 21, 2023 at 5:39 AM

Thanks Jerry i am not a fan of Halloween or Hop Tu Naa as it is called here but thought i would try the contest:-) hugs Jan xx

September 20, 2023 at 1:52 PM

Fun and spooky at the same time. Wonderfully melodic with great form and perfect for Halloween! Well done.

September 20, 2023 at 2:25 PM

Thanks Karen. where i live on the isle of Man it is called Hop Tu Naa :-) hugs Jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen

September 20, 2023 at 1:23 PM

- "Victim turns ghostly white" ... snow white ... - what a bloody bite, Jan :) - GL in the contest :) - hugs

September 20, 2023 at 2:24 PM

thanks Anne-Lise:-) hugs Jan xx

September 20, 2023 at 1:14 PM

Oh, this Pleiades is so bloody well written! (I had to write that.) And I just commented on your other, but this one deserves high praise for also being Monorhyme. Great job!

September 20, 2023 at 2:24 PM

Oh thanks Lin, I hope the sponsor likes this one it took some time to write but I set myself the challenge of monorhyme:-) hugs Jan xx

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