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Vampire

Vladimir shuns sunlight
Vampire bat stalks at night
Vivid moon shines so bright
Vile pointed teeth cause fright
Veins on nude neck he’ll bite
Virgin’s blood his delight
Victim turns ghostly white

Copyright © Jan Allison | Year Posted 2023

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Terry Flood Date: 9/29/2023 5:11:00 PM Congrats on your vein popping win, Jan Login to Reply

Sam Kauffman Date: 9/28/2023 10:37:00 AM Well done, Jan! straight from the castle in Transylvania! Stark, scary imagery! Congrats and high fives! Think I'll go find a garlic necklace now, just for drill! Blessings and hugs! Login to Reply

Janice Canerdy Date: 9/27/2023 3:17:00 PM Great entry, Jan. Congrats on your win. Janice Login to Reply

Terry Miller Date: 9/27/2023 7:22:00 AM Very nicely done; congratulations Login to Reply

Joseph May Date: 9/27/2023 6:04:00 AM Very nicely done Jan, Congrats on your win Login to Reply

Alexis Y. Date: 9/22/2023 6:15:00 AM Wow Jan, You did such a good job with this. It's creepy and spooky, not to mention it's a monorhyme too. You made it look so easy. We chose the same word and was challenging for me. Best of luck in the contest. Have a great weekend-Alexis Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/22/2023 6:52:00 AM Thanks Alexis, i will drop right on by:-) hugs jan xx

Terry Flood Date: 9/21/2023 4:01:00 PM You little show off, you. A monorhyme Pleiades… and a top notch one too. I haven’t posted mine yet… guess what.. it’s ‘Vampire’ too. Now THAT’S uncanny. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/24/2023 5:08:00 AM To be honest Terry it was a subject I really wanted to get my teeth into lol:-) hugs Jan xx Jan Allison Date: 9/22/2023 6:52:00 AM yeah I thought i would show my critics that I can write 'real' poetry for a change lol:-) hugs Jan xx shame U for urine/urinal wasnt there lol:-) hugs jan xx

Ilene Bauer Date: 9/21/2023 1:56:00 PM well done, jan! vampires always creep me out... Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/22/2023 6:51:00 AM Yeah me too Ilene, never been in to horror - its bad enough looking in the mirror in the morning lol:-) hugs jan xx

Robert Lindley Date: 9/21/2023 11:05:00 AM A very intellectual new piece my good friend. Vastly strong on its v's. If for a contest its got to place high. God bless you Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/22/2023 6:50:00 AM Thanks Robert:-) hugs Jan xx

John Lawless Date: 9/21/2023 7:02:00 AM DAMMIT....I had to run and bite a tomato after reading this. Wicked take on the Snow White fable and an expose' of the Dwarfs.... Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/21/2023 7:10:00 AM ha ha ha thanks John I do appreciate your support, your comment sure made me lol:-) hugs jan xx

Victor Buhagiar Date: 9/21/2023 1:33:00 AM Brilliant Pleiades on a vampire. Perfect description. Hugs xx Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/21/2023 5:40:00 AM Thanks Victor I hope Joseph likes it:-) hugs jan xx

Jerry Brotherton Date: 9/20/2023 6:11:00 PM OOOOOH, a great Halloween poem Jan. Surely a winner for the contest. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/21/2023 5:39:00 AM Thanks Jerry i am not a fan of Halloween or Hop Tu Naa as it is called here but thought i would try the contest:-) hugs Jan xx

Karen Jones Date: 9/20/2023 1:52:00 PM Fun and spooky at the same time. Wonderfully melodic with great form and perfect for Halloween! Well done. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/20/2023 2:25:00 PM Thanks Karen. where i live on the isle of Man it is called Hop Tu Naa :-) hugs Jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen Date: 9/20/2023 1:23:00 PM - "Victim turns ghostly white" ... snow white ... - what a bloody bite, Jan :) - GL in the contest :) - hugs Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/20/2023 2:24:00 PM thanks Anne-Lise:-) hugs Jan xx

Lin Lane Date: 9/20/2023 1:14:00 PM Oh, this Pleiades is so bloody well written! (I had to write that.) And I just commented on your other, but this one deserves high praise for also being Monorhyme. Great job! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 9/20/2023 2:24:00 PM Oh thanks Lin, I hope the sponsor likes this one it took some time to write but I set myself the challenge of monorhyme:-) hugs Jan xx