Validation

In their dreams… Yes, please Whisper indoctrinated dialect Upon my harrowing song Yes, please Remove that scented, plastic tulip Place it upon my oblivious palm As if we’re in a Sadie Hawkins dance Bribing hearts With petal currencies Psst, hey I woke up only feeling like a thousand bucks. A foreign knock-off made of recycled, rubber bolts And ambiguity Please Tell me I’m priceless with borrowed, high-interest breaths Liquidate my potent complacency To become that symbol of an elitist humanity Yes! Stroke that clouded, diamond tip With your sensual thumb Love stamps of approval After 6 months of quickie penetration And co-signatures on dilapidated apartment leases PLEASE, YES! Take me to our creator! Tell Him I am free!!! I will stand here in virtual observance! Wait, where are you going? Come back to me! COME BACK TO ME! My wheelchair’s batteries are fading! How will I stand?! NO! … Sadly, they never validated their reality… ©Drake J. Eszes

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Scott Thirtyseven

Date: 9/8/2015 9:43:00 AM

Those last few lines crack me up. Great work mate.

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 7/21/2013 10:39:00 AM

Drake, this is sad, the imagery. My mother was in a wheelchair the last 9 years of her life. Thank you for clarifying things in your blog. LINDA

Poet Tacito
Date: 7/21/2013 11:49:00 AM

Damn, im sorry to hear that Linda. Youre very, very welcome.

Debbie Duncan

Date: 7/8/2013 1:23:00 PM

So it is the same person you talk of, write of in this case. Or like me, and write on imagination and some memories ;} nicely done Drake ;}

Poet Tacito
Date: 7/8/2013 1:29:00 PM

Hey Debbie! This would involve one person (fictional) that I write of, seasoned w/a bit of imagination. ;-) Thanks so much!

Good Night

Date: 6/4/2013 4:43:00 PM

drake you are really gud at this keep writing

Poet Tacito
Date: 6/4/2013 5:04:00 PM

Thanks very much. I plan to. :)

Michael Ainsley

Date: 6/1/2013 1:00:00 PM

Drake I love the progression and power in this work. I really felt this emotion . Thanks

Poet Tacito
Date: 6/1/2013 1:05:00 PM

I'm very happy to hear that. Many, many thanks, Michael! :)

Mario De Paz

Date: 6/1/2013 4:18:00 AM

Your poetry is impressing. I see a sort of desperation in your words, desperate for a lost love and for solitude. I hope it is only a dream.

Poet Tacito
Date: 6/1/2013 7:29:00 AM

It was certainly a dream. More certainly, it wasn't mine. But, others I've come across. ;) Nice to meet you Mario! Thanks so much for stopping by!

Elai Cee

Date: 6/1/2013 12:39:00 AM

hi Drake! you are truly a son of a nice poet! this is awesome!

Poet Tacito
Date: 6/1/2013 12:46:00 AM

Hey, Elai!!!! :) Thank you so much! "Son of a nice poet", lol. Cute. It's great to see you stop by here!

Kim Van Breda

Date: 5/30/2013 12:18:00 PM

Drake.. a real gem once again.. format, content and emotive captivation.. love your stuff.. real talent.xx

Poet Tacito
Date: 5/30/2013 1:15:00 PM

Kim, that really means a lot. Thank you so much. :) Very awesome you stopped by!

Nette Onclaud

Date: 5/30/2013 2:24:00 AM

just passing by to say hello... okay, got more?..:) huggs

Poet Tacito
Date: 5/30/2013 7:07:00 AM

LOL Hi! Soon. ;) (hug)

Audrey Haick

Date: 5/29/2013 11:53:00 PM

This is a "dream imitatng life" Drake. One only has to stand back and observe to see the truth in your words. Awesome writing as always! Thanks for the visit. Annalise

Poet Tacito
Date: 5/30/2013 7:06:00 AM

Very, very well said, Annalise! Thank you so much. It's awesome to see you again!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/29/2013 9:33:00 PM

a dream but seems a reality in some ways. Deep writing!!

Poet Tacito
Date: 5/29/2013 9:46:00 PM

It can be. It has been for some, ironically enough. Thanks so much for stopping by, Andrea.

Juli- Michelle

Date: 5/29/2013 9:13:00 PM

i love this. great work :) thank you for your kind comments on my poetry.

Poet Tacito
Date: 5/29/2013 9:45:00 PM

Hi, Juli! Thanks so much! :)

Donna Jones

Date: 5/29/2013 7:59:00 PM

Drake.wow....what a dream....huh? Great descriptive writing

Poet Tacito
Date: 5/29/2013 9:44:00 PM

Yeah, seriously. lol Thank you so very much, Donna! :)

Abdulhafeez Oyewole

Date: 5/29/2013 5:24:00 PM

Your thinking faculty is very sound. This pen of yours is very deep and meaningful. Well done~A.O

Poet Tacito
Date: 5/29/2013 5:26:00 PM

Hey there! That's greatly appreciated. I'm grateful you stopped by. :)

Holly Moore

Date: 5/29/2013 4:26:00 PM

Wow! That was very interesting. It leads you to thinking one event, then quickly changes to another. Great write! xxoo Holly Moore

Poet Tacito
Date: 5/29/2013 4:54:00 PM

Hi Holly!!! Nice to meet you. I'm glad you got the idea of this. :) Thanks so much!

Eileen Manassian

Date: 5/29/2013 9:45:00 AM

Drake...I thought there would be a happily ever after. The lead up was so amazing! :( Great write...I don't know where it came from...reality or fiction, but...great write, nonetheless!

Poet Tacito
Date: 5/29/2013 9:54:00 AM

On the surface, no. But, if you look deeper, there is one. The question is, can it be accepted & understood as something that much more substantial? Because, remember, it was just a dream. ;) To answer your question on where it came from...my mind. :) Thank you so much, Eileen! Stay awesome! :)

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 5/29/2013 9:29:00 AM

You are validated! Simply a wondrous use of interlocking thoughts.

Poet Tacito
Date: 5/29/2013 9:51:00 AM

Ha! Thanks!:) I don't need validation myself. But, I certainly appreciate it! You rock, Richard! Many, many thanks to you!

Nette Onclaud

Date: 5/29/2013 9:26:00 AM

an enjambment of thoughts that provides substance to your theme of uncertainty.. such wonderful word puzzles... grreat job, drake..:) huggs

Poet Tacito
Date: 5/29/2013 9:48:00 AM

You got it on point, once again, Nette. :) Thank you so very much!

Poet Tacito

Date: 5/29/2013 8:52:00 AM

Hi, Anne Lise! Yes, essentially it's what happens when a "What If" consumes our being. Thanks so much!

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 5/29/2013 8:46:00 AM

- A very interesting poem Drake, it says more than what you write. - We all have thoughts and dreams of what could have been .... if / when / maybe???? - Then comes the reality .... - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)

Poet Tacito
Date: 5/29/2013 8:52:00 AM

Hi, Anne Lise! Yes, essentially it's what happens when a "What If" consumes our being. Thanks so much!