Carrie Richards Poet Sijo

Vacant Lot

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                 in a nettled field riddled with foxtail that pricks the sun
                     a Popsicle wrapper clings to a thistle in sweet surrender
                          remembering the yesterdays of bare feet and blue jeans

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Alan Reed June 12, 2010 at 10:03 PM sharp inanimate objects conjer up the days when we could care less if we were barbed by nature. It was all part of the fun. Living on the edge in a certyain way.

Audrey Haick June 10, 2010 at 5:58 AM Ah, a sweet Sijo, Carrie...Congratulations on your win in the contest. I especially love the last line, as it relates to some of my favorite things, even today...I love going barefeet. Love, Audrey

Barbara Gorelick June 9, 2010 at 9:04 AM congrats on your win Carrie..this is a sweet piece...BG

Daniel Cwiak June 9, 2010 at 9:03 AM Beautiful thoughts embraced in this Sijo! Congrats on your win in the contest. Dan C

Kabuteng P.Ink K. June 9, 2010 at 8:05 AM Hi Carrie :)--I really enjoyed this one, it has so much imagery in 3 lines ) congrats on your win! --nikko :)

Carol Sunshine Brown June 9, 2010 at 6:41 AM Congratulations Carrie on your win in the "Sijo" contest by Rick Parise. Love, Carol

Linda-Marie Sweetheart June 8, 2010 at 7:42 PM Congrats Carrie on your winning poem in the Sijo contest with this great entry.. enjoy another well earned win.. with luv.. Linda-Marie..

Joyce Johnson June 8, 2010 at 7:27 PM Great job, Carrie. I like this one and you got the job done in the turnaround surprise last line. Congratulations. Love, Joyce

Gert W. Knop June 6, 2010 at 5:53 AM Sweet memories of childhood, Carrie! And thank you for your kind comments. Wish you good luck in the contest and have a nice Sunday!...Gert

Andrea Dietrich June 5, 2010 at 11:21 AM Ahhh, mixing nature with childhood memories. A very good way to approach this contest, Carrie. I really like the descriptiveness of the field, how it evokes that image of happy carefre days. Luv, andrea

James Fraser June 5, 2010 at 5:00 AM Just wonderful, so many times i have past shrubberry and noticed a sweetie paper rasping away as the winds caresses it. Good luck in Rick's contest >> James

Poet Destroyer A June 4, 2010 at 12:58 PM good luck in this contest as well. Nice on the memory, enjoyed,..p.d.