Ut Oh!

Talcum powdery sandy basking, broiling, oiling picnic baskets, boogie boards storming, stinging, flying lifeless, stone cold dead

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James Fraser

Date: 8/31/2009 12:29:00 PM

Excellent Diamante Deborah>>James

Yoni Dvorkis

Date: 8/28/2009 6:46:00 PM

Also appreciated highly the reincarnation observation, as you are among the smartest poets I know:) In your context, a tabula rasa refers to our natural condition before the need to incarnate ever happened in the first place. It refers to the state of mere Being, one I'm sure you know plenty about from all your meditations. In this state of purified glorious Love, there is nothing to written because there is nothing to be written on nor anything to write with. This is usually called 'Oneness'.

Yoni Dvorkis

Date: 8/28/2009 6:42:00 PM

huh my first impression was a boogie boarder at the beach gets stung by a jelly fish...I guess one that would leave him lifeless, i heard a few of those exist off the coast of Japan, huge ones. Fun form to work with huh, it has this werid flow to it even though you just recite words and commas. Ruben wrote an awesome one that introduced me to it. Call me crazy (I do on a regular basis) but should the title be 'Uh Oh'? I don't think you'd miss that so I'm confuddled on the Ut. Nice one Deb -Yoni

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 8/28/2009 2:04:00 PM

A diamante verse has strict rules The purpose is to go from the subject at the top of the diamond to another totally different (and sometimes opposite) subject at the bottom. A seven line poem, shaped like a diamond Example Line 1: 1 NOUN-A Line 2: 2 ADJECTIVES-A Line 3: 3 GERUNDS-A (verb + -ing) Line 4: 2 NOUNS-A + 2 NOUNS-B Line 5: 3 GERUNDS-B (verb + -ing) Line 6: 2 ADJECTIVES-B Line 7: 1 NOUN-B a warm safe beach scene with a picnic to a boogie board in a storm.

Veronica Joseph

Date: 8/28/2009 12:09:00 PM

I've read this over and over...what is dead? I don't get the content of the poem. It starts out as a description of a beach day...then I got lost.

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 8/28/2009 12:06:00 PM

~~~WOW~~~I enjoyed reading your splendid poetry today Deborah. Thank you for sharing. Love, Carol

Michael Jordan

Date: 8/27/2009 10:38:00 PM

Deborah this poem is in a class all its own - Love the way it just pulls you in and then - BAMB - drops you over the edge - Excellent - God Bless, MJ

James Marshall Goff

Date: 8/27/2009 7:13:00 PM

I hope this dude wuz only playin' possum! nice work! Deb! jimbo

Andrew Crisci

Date: 8/27/2009 5:18:00 PM

Hi! I am reading your diamente with awe! I love the momentum you give to your words and then cease them with dread! Very inspirational and awesome! Keep on writing, Deborah. I wish you continued success with your writing. God bless you. Warmest Regards, Andrew. P.S. I'm sorry for the missing word in my previous comment. Take care and good luck.

Andrew Crisci

Date: 8/27/2009 5:13:00 PM

Hi! I am reading your diamante with awe! I love the momentum you give to your words and then cease them with dread! Very inspirational and awesome! Keep on writing, Deborah. I wish you continued success with your writing. Warmest Regards, Andrew.

Carrie Richards

Date: 8/27/2009 4:51:00 PM

This feels like the air slowly leaking out of a balloon.........Phfffffffffffffffft ! Great job!!

Sara Kendrick

Date: 8/27/2009 3:14:00 PM

Interesting up to a point and then it seems the fun is over. Keep writing. Sara