Upon Waking

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I woke, and in a voice unlike my own, I spoke,
"Am I having nothing more than a dream,
and my heart deceived by a reverie in a cloak?”
I beg, tell me things are not what they now seem
and that these last hours spent held in rapt passion...
were they an illusion and not what I deemed real?
Were I to see my face in a mirror, would it be ashen?
I'm not at all certain about the emotions I feel.

If I have dreams within dreams, how fragile and fleeting.
And if I should wake to the reality of being all alone,
then the purpose of having them is entirely self-defeating.
I shall punch my pillow as a foe, sigh, weep and moan
without returning to my reverie, refusing to slumber on.
I'll never wish to be a spying voyeur in my own dream,
a mere object of affection, on the chessboard, a pawn.
No, the thought of that fantasy is a nightmarish scheme.

What was I thinking before I closed my eyes and slept?
If it causes dreams like these, then wake me in my bed,
if from rival night visions that found cause to intercept.
But if perchance they're rhapsodies, leave me, instead.
It's not within the realm of an impossibility, I suspect,
but it would be a less than perfect aspiration I would seek.
To live in a dream inside a dream, I'd have want to reject.
For the dreamworld of others, I dare not judge nor speak.

If I cannot dream peacefully of where I wish to be
then give me constant sunlight so my eyes never close.
And please nudge me if I doze. Pull the blanket from me
so never shall I dream again, nor smell the scent of a rose.
Worthless would be my dream state without aspirations
of finding a fairytale love, in a dreamscape for my pleasure.
One in which I feel love's tender emotions and sensations,
each enjoyed for its own affectionate merit and measure.

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Date: 11/21/2024 5:36:00 AM
Dear Lin, I enjoyed your exploration of consciousness and reality. I love poems like yours, especially the philosophical questions about dreams, perception, and the nature of existence. As a seasoned poet, I appreciate your skillful use of rhyme and meter, which enhances the dreamlike quality of the piece. So Poe-esc! Autumn Blessings, My Dear Friend, Daniel
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Date: 11/21/2024 5:52:00 AM
Reality of a dream... sometimes so detailed that it certainly seemed to have been true. Thank you for your support of my poetry, Daniel. Your comments are always welcome reading.
Date: 11/21/2024 12:16:00 AM
I think our state of mind before we retire for the night decides our dreams, if you're worrying about something then those dreams won't be pleasant, can we go below that and dream within a dream, our minds are powerful tools so yes, anything is possible. Good luck Lin. Tom
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Date: 11/21/2024 5:50:00 AM
I believe you're right, Tom. The few times I dream, it was about something I'd talked about or thought about that day. Thanks so much.
Date: 11/20/2024 2:58:00 PM
beautifully penned lin! hugs jan xx
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Date: 11/21/2024 5:49:00 AM
Thanks a bunch, Jan.
Date: 11/20/2024 11:09:00 AM
- Don't be afraid of your dreams, Lin ... challenge you to dare to dream ... reach for your dreams - A sensitive poem - Best wishes in the contest :) - hugs
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Date: 11/21/2024 5:49:00 AM
Rarely do I dream, Anne-Lise. I don't usually sleep long enough at one time to get that deeply asleep. Thanks for your well wishes.
Date: 11/20/2024 10:29:00 AM
Nice poem Lin. I feel the same way.
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Date: 11/21/2024 5:48:00 AM
Thanks, Jay.
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