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I gripped- the edge of the sail boat sea spray soaked me the shore- was far away a huge wave took the boat high up to the sky then into the pit of the rushing sea frothing waves tipped the boat on it's side over and again violently but it did not go under the deep blue sea loud thundering the boat leapt and fell wildly I had this sinking sinking feeling then the wind took the sail- and we headed at breakneck speed for land with the wind in my hair and sea salt on my lips the roar of the sea and the blazing sun at my back ___________________ September 24, 2015 Poetry/Free Verse/up to the sky Copyright Protected, ID 15-711-932-0 all Rights Reserved. Written under Pseudonym. For the contest, Open Sea, Sailing, Creatures, Treasures, sponsor, Chase Trevi Ninth Place

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Date: 10/23/2015 3:01:00 AM
Congrats on ur wonderful win with this superb write broken!
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Date: 10/22/2015 9:42:00 PM
Loved your creative layout for your sea adventure! Congrats Wings!
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Date: 10/22/2015 8:24:00 PM
Congrad's on your win a great sea story! Loved the page layout too! Light & Love
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Date: 10/22/2015 6:49:00 PM
thank you
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Date: 9/26/2015 3:11:00 PM
Love the form. Felt the emotion, and the wind and sun, beautiful imagery.
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Date: 9/26/2015 2:05:00 PM
Beautifully written, especially the cadence which gives the waves the force to make one feel as if he is on that ride. Great imagery which took me back to one of my trips on Lake Michigan. Nicely done!
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Date: 9/25/2015 12:49:00 PM
You captured the sea's turmoil, the sea is a dangerous place and this poem explains it very well.
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Date: 9/24/2015 9:13:00 PM
G'day BW... you took me on a wild ocean ride with your nicely constructed poem - well done - Lindsay
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Date: 9/24/2015 9:12:00 PM
Beautiful! Hugs Eve!
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Date: 9/24/2015 8:56:00 PM
Dear Broken Wings Another great work from an inspirational writer, I love to read your poems because they are so full of wonderful imagery, and spirit. I think this poem will do well in the contest, but i'll cross the fingers for you my friend, and you have a great weekend, oh and thanks for the review of my poems also, I will be posting something new tomorrow hopefully, cheri
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