Vijay Pandit Poet Rhyme

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September 24, 2023; Placed 1st: Unwritten Absence Contest; By Ink Empress

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Unwritten Absence

Rhythms of pulses echo in souls, augmenting tenor of love song,
Reminiscing in sanctuary of life, together they shared for long;
Yet, memories sadly clamor aloud, since the day she’s been gone,
Of nightmares that cruelly shattered, dreams of their avid dawn.

Her unwritten absence now perturbs in void of the undone, unsaid,
As their unfinished tapestry longs, for stitch of the missing thread;
Vying affluence she delivered, to wealth of their beloved yore,
Steadfastly defying angst that destiny grievously brought to fore.

Unseen, she still occupies, fond yearnings of his moaning heart,
Struggling in her absence, since stealthily she decided to part,
Missing her hypnotizing smile enriching the fervor of her glance,
Nostalgic in embrace of desires, proffering a pledge of romance.

Emptiness haunts him now for misinterpreting clues of silent sighs,
As regrets torment: how long did her smile, hide her desolate cries;
Neither could he sense in her eyes, tacit bawl of love gone awry, 
Nor could he decipher from her kiss, subtext of her covert goodbye.

Curtain may fall, music may end; yet allure of real love never dies,
Words of their solemn oath, unwritten absence no longer denies,
For bond of love reinvigorates hearts, tolling eternally as time,
Strumming passion’s sound of music, enamored in love sublime.

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Maria Williams October 2, 2023 at 4:46 PM I see this is for a competition, and I was going to wish you good luck, however I noticed you've won . That's wonderful Vijay, and it's no surprise, as it's truly a masterpiece. Congratulations my dear friend. Hugs

Andrea Dietrich October 2, 2023 at 8:45 AM Big congrats for your win, Vijay.

Heidi Sands September 29, 2023 at 6:12 AM Congratulations for your win Vijay :)

Ink Empress September 29, 2023 at 3:25 AM Very evocative and descriptive write as always Vijay! Your way with expressing is so heartfelt and soul touching. and your wordplay is so exquisite and unique! i love so many lines in this and the emotions flowing in sublime rhymes. especially " unfinished tapestry longs..” “ curtain may fall…” yes true love never dies! Those last lines hit home! So poetic and beautiful how you’ve expressed.Felt this one! A fave too! Thank u for writing. Congratulations on winning!

Andrea Dietrich September 27, 2023 at 1:44 PM Lots of lovely imagery to impress the Empress of Ink. I bet this scores high!

Deb M September 27, 2023 at 8:17 AM Melancholy and simple beautiful Vijay! Touching write…..Debx Vijay Pandit September 27, 2023 at 12:38 PM Thank you Deb--much appreciate.

Joanna Daniel September 26, 2023 at 8:51 PM Amazing! Sure to place high, Vijay, love that you gave it a positive ending:) Vijay Pandit September 27, 2023 at 12:37 PM Glad you liked the ending Jo. Always glad to see you on my page. Much appreciate--many thanks.

Brandy Nicole September 26, 2023 at 7:33 PM So many find it difficult to breathe, with only half a heartbeat. This is tender and emotional, all at the same time. Such a beautiful thought: the "allure of real love never dies." So true ! Your thoughts caress softly around me, Vijay. My best to you. Hugs, Brandy Vijay Pandit September 27, 2023 at 12:36 PM Nice to hear that from you my friend. Many thanks for your supportive and thoughtful comments, Brandy. Much appreciate, as always. Many thanks. Hugs to you as well.

Janice Canerdy September 26, 2023 at 6:43 PM A lovely, descriptive picture of hearts growing cool, then warm again as love and commitments are remembered. Janice Vijay Pandit September 27, 2023 at 12:35 PM Glad you liked the poem, Janice. Many thanks for your kind remarks.

Joseph P. DiMino September 26, 2023 at 4:38 PM "Nor could he decipher from her kiss, subtext of her covert goodbye." Brilliant poetry! We are never less for having loved, never a loss or depletion of any sort...love is our bank and connection with eternal joy of being -- all else will change, fade away, but love remains an everlasting companion. Love is the heartbeat of creation. Great read. Thank you. Vijay Pandit September 27, 2023 at 12:34 PM Yes--I like that line as well. Much appreciate your thoughtful insights, as always, my friend. Many thanks, Joe.

Mystic Rose Rose September 26, 2023 at 4:18 PM allure of real love never dies, no it does not, long after we are flesh and bone and ashes too, it lives within our memories , :) Vijay Pandit September 27, 2023 at 12:33 PM Thank you my friend. Much appreciate your kind feedback, Vienna.

Christina Bowring September 26, 2023 at 2:26 PM Dear Vijay this is such a beautifully crafted, expressed poem about the heartache of absence. So well written, flows very well and a great rhyme scheme. So many wonderful poetic lines,’ dreams of their avid dawn’ ‘ unfinished tapestry’’ subtext of her covert goodbye’. Wonderfully expressed. The last stanza is particularly poignant ‘ curtain may fall, music may end’ but sweet echoes of true love will forever resonate. Good luck dear Vijay in the contest. I’m sure it will do well. Hugs and smiles Vijay Pandit September 27, 2023 at 12:32 PM Much appreciate your glowing remarks, Christina. Always a joy when you visit. Many thanks, my friend. Hugs to you as well.

Heidi Sands September 26, 2023 at 8:40 AM This is so good. I can feel it in its depth. Wow. Well written, my friend! Vijay Pandit September 26, 2023 at 11:07 AM Many thanks my friend. Much appreciate, as always, Heidi.

Victor Buhagiar September 26, 2023 at 1:01 AM Using all the craft of poetry, alliteration, metaphors, allusions, and most of all the emotions evoked. Wonderful poem. Vijay Pandit September 26, 2023 at 11:06 AM Thank you Victor--much appreciate.

The Situation September 25, 2023 at 6:32 PM a tragic piece to bare. Vijay Pandit September 26, 2023 at 11:06 AM Thanks.

Darlene De Beaulieu September 25, 2023 at 3:57 PM Hello Vijay, She left him and he feels the loneliness now that she is gone. He finds the room or rooms too quiet. the quietness is too loud and he can not bear it. Enjoy your evening my friend. /Darlene\ Darlene De Beaulieu September 26, 2023 at 3:03 PM Hello Vijay, oh you are welcome my friend. Enjoy your evening my friend. /Darlene\ Vijay Pandit September 26, 2023 at 11:06 AM Your insights are on mark, my friend. Much appreciate your visit and kind feedback, Darlene. Many thanks.

Liam Mcdaid September 25, 2023 at 2:42 PM Your words carry a touch beautifully painted Vijay Pandit September 26, 2023 at 11:04 AM Thank you Liam--much appreciate.

Hiya Sharma September 25, 2023 at 9:16 AM This is such a deeply aching and heartfelt take for the contest, the melancholy is so palpable in hues of gloom, sigh! When unwritten absence weaves a sombre symphony laced with pain and heartbreaks.. "Yet allure of real love never dies" So true.. There are so many lines that I loved here and I'm sure Ink will truly like this write for her contest.. "Emptiness haunts him now for misinterpreting clues of silent sighs", "As their unfinished tapestry longs, for stitch of the missing thread" Wow Vijay Pandit September 26, 2023 at 11:04 AM You are always so very kind, Hiya. Much appreciate your thoughtful remarks and your vote of confidence. Many thanks. And a very special thank you for the FAVE. Hiya Sharma September 25, 2023 at 9:16 AM Best of luck for the contest, definitely a top winner, your rhymes are so intriguing & impeccable as always!! A FAV..

Sara Kendrick September 25, 2023 at 4:08 AM Great rhyming in these couplets and sometimes even monorhyme. Creative work for sure. Thanks for sharing this one and for dropping by my page. Your visits are always uplifting. Sara Vijay Pandit September 25, 2023 at 9:04 AM Glad to hear that. Much appreciate your visit and kind feedback, Sara. Many thanks.

Evelyn Judy Buehler September 24, 2023 at 4:50 PM I enjoyed reading this beautiful, insightful poem, Vijay. Though relationships may be flawed, love itself is blameless. Wonderful writing! Best wishes for the contest. Vijay Pandit September 25, 2023 at 9:02 AM So very kind of you, as always, my friend. Much appreciate your visit and supportive comments, Evelyn. Many thanks.

Silent One September 24, 2023 at 12:12 PM Great use of metaphors and rhymes in this poem.. I flows so well.. There is a lot of emotions in your words as always.. I think Ink will really like this one.. Vijay Pandit September 25, 2023 at 8:56 AM Thank you, my friend. Much appreciate your vote of confidence, SO. Many thanks.

Bill Baker September 24, 2023 at 10:38 AM A FAV, Vijay and an excellent entry for the contest. It shouldn't need luck. Your words resonate with my heart and soul, fortunately, Sara and I haven't had this experience yet. You bare your soul, and it speaks to us of true-life experiences, the hidden parts of life that we missed or now remember. The joys and sadness of two lives shared as one. Thanks for sharing this with us. Bill Vijay Pandit September 25, 2023 at 8:55 AM Always a blessing to not face a heartbreak described here. But it happens to some--and more importantly it suits the contest theme. Wishing continued joy and happiness to you and Sara, my friend. Much appreciate your kind remarks and your FAVE, Bill. Many thanks.

Karen Jones September 24, 2023 at 9:29 AM This poem is charming and showcases your intelligence as well as your passionate nature. I was engaged from beginning to end strung along like a note in a song by the rhyme. Good luck in the contest! Vijay Pandit September 25, 2023 at 8:50 AM I delighted to welcome you to my page, Karen. Much appreciate your visit and kind feedback. Many thanks.

Sotto Poet September 24, 2023 at 8:07 AM Dear Vijay, Your poem about the Unwritten Absence is truly exceptional. Your poetic prowess shines through in this piece, as you skillfully convey its essence. I was completely captivated by your writing, from the very first line to the very last. The enchanting tones and perfectly constructed rhymes drew me in and held my attention throughout. Your ability to vividly describe the power of your words is truly awe-inspiring. Each line of your poem is meticulously crafted, evoking a plethora of vivid images and stirring up a wide range of emotions. Vijay Pandit September 25, 2023 at 8:49 AM So very kind of you my friend. Always a delight to read your detailed comments gracing my page. Much appreciate your thoughtful insights, Lasaad. Many thanks.