Unwoven Tapestry

Strands of past moments,
Memories that used to be;
Unraveled treasures.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2009

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Neal Avatar
February 24, 2009 at 3:06 AM
Nice title, the poem has character. It is a shame to see such treasures unravel. Nice job, very creative work you create. DN
Goombi Avatar
February 18, 2009 at 11:30 PM
My grandma had a rug that was unraveling and the beauty of it was fading away. I remember that rug and this poem brought it back to mind. -Boo
Moreno Avatar
February 18, 2009 at 1:31 AM
This one is lovely, I like the idea behind it, it says so much......................Danielle
Neal Avatar
February 17, 2009 at 6:25 PM
You outdone yourself with this one, it is a great senryu. Love Elizabeth
Swanson Avatar
February 17, 2009 at 11:57 AM
Very beautiful senryu, I love the last line "unraveled treasures." Creates a warm, nostalgic feeling. :) Blessings, Amy
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February 17, 2009 at 11:38 AM
Raul ,Thank you for welcoming me to Poetry Soup and for commenting on my "Nectar Of Life" poem. Now < your senryu is something I really do like. I also do Oriental forms and really savor the simple words that have a meaning ; and sometimes if pondered more than one meaning. This senry is a wonderful example. I hope to see more of these and hope you will view some of my choka and tanka poetry as I post. Thank you again, Koko
Hollis Avatar
February 17, 2009 at 10:37 AM
Hello, I just wanted to say your really good at this. Thanks for saying "hello" and commenting on one of my poems. Really nice =) Yours are simple but really brilliant. Love them.
Martin Avatar
February 17, 2009 at 1:11 AM
Awesome work Raul, unraveled treasures they are. Tyler
Lopez Avatar
February 16, 2009 at 5:22 PM
Nice thoughts of an old tapestry..........nice
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February 16, 2009 at 12:32 PM
Love the serenity in this one. Wonderful use of imagery. Beautiful poem. Thank you for sharing it and for your kind words on my haiku. Keep on writing! Karen
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February 16, 2009 at 9:35 AM
Raul, memories are such precious posessions, aren't they? Nice Haiku! And I'm glad you share my sentiments regarding Robin Gass's Footles. She certainly is quite a talent. And, indeed, you are correct in saying there is much talent on this site. I have found it uplifting and it helps me cope better with the loss of my father. Love, Carolyn
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February 16, 2009 at 9:02 AM
This is so beautiful, Raul. The imagery is brilliant and the emotions are very deep in this, at the thought of losing such treasures. Awesome Senyru, my friend! Love, Robin
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February 16, 2009 at 8:27 AM
Treasures indeed..this is a super write..BG
Omaidin Avatar
February 16, 2009 at 8:11 AM
You coined this idea to perfection. WEll done. Regards: Déirdre
P. Avatar
February 16, 2009 at 7:15 AM
thats a really good senryu!! unraveled....? nice one, Raul!! ~ Arany
Ginn Avatar
February 16, 2009 at 7:08 AM
Oh wow Raul this is wonderful. Great job kiddo. Laurie
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February 16, 2009 at 12:28 AM
They are indeed Raul.Rgds Brian & thanks for your welcome comments and also on the blog
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