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Unwoven Tapestry

Strands of past moments, Memories that used to be; Unraveled treasures.

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Daniel Neal

Date: 2/24/2009 3:06:00 AM

Nice title, the poem has character. It is a shame to see such treasures unravel. Nice job, very creative work you create. DN

Chris Goombi

Date: 2/18/2009 11:30:00 PM

My grandma had a rug that was unraveling and the beauty of it was fading away. I remember that rug and this poem brought it back to mind. -Boo

Danielle Moreno

Date: 2/18/2009 1:31:00 AM

This one is lovely, I like the idea behind it, it says so much......................Danielle

Elizabeth Neal

Date: 2/17/2009 6:25:00 PM

You outdone yourself with this one, it is a great senryu. Love Elizabeth

Amy Swanson

Date: 2/17/2009 11:57:00 AM

Very beautiful senryu, I love the last line "unraveled treasures." Creates a warm, nostalgic feeling. :) Blessings, Amy

Koko Koomoa

Date: 2/17/2009 11:38:00 AM

Raul ,Thank you for welcoming me to Poetry Soup and for commenting on my "Nectar Of Life" poem. Now < your senryu is something I really do like. I also do Oriental forms and really savor the simple words that have a meaning ; and sometimes if pondered more than one meaning. This senry is a wonderful example. I hope to see more of these and hope you will view some of my choka and tanka poetry as I post. Thank you again, Koko

Tabitha Hollis

Date: 2/17/2009 10:37:00 AM

Hello, I just wanted to say your really good at this. Thanks for saying "hello" and commenting on one of my poems. Really nice =) Yours are simple but really brilliant. Love them.

Tyler Martin

Date: 2/17/2009 1:11:00 AM

Awesome work Raul, unraveled treasures they are. Tyler

Abe Lopez

Date: 2/16/2009 5:22:00 PM

Nice thoughts of an old tapestry..........nice

Date: 2/16/2009 12:32:00 PM

Love the serenity in this one. Wonderful use of imagery. Beautiful poem. Thank you for sharing it and for your kind words on my haiku. Keep on writing! Karen

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 2/16/2009 9:35:00 AM

Raul, memories are such precious posessions, aren't they? Nice Haiku! And I'm glad you share my sentiments regarding Robin Gass's Footles. She certainly is quite a talent. And, indeed, you are correct in saying there is much talent on this site. I have found it uplifting and it helps me cope better with the loss of my father. Love, Carolyn

Robin L. Gass

Date: 2/16/2009 9:02:00 AM

This is so beautiful, Raul. The imagery is brilliant and the emotions are very deep in this, at the thought of losing such treasures. Awesome Senyru, my friend! Love, Robin

Barbara Gorelick

Date: 2/16/2009 8:27:00 AM

Treasures indeed..this is a super write..BG

Deirdre Omaidin

Date: 2/16/2009 8:11:00 AM

You coined this idea to perfection. WEll done. Regards: Déirdre

Arany P.

Date: 2/16/2009 7:15:00 AM

thats a really good senryu!! unraveled....? nice one, Raul!! ~ Arany