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Untitled

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Untitled

Only 14 and eager to find love, she sneaks out at four in the morning
Persuading her best friend to come along – meet someone new
Hence at the nearest park an unfamiliar friendship is formed
Sketchy as it may sound, Anthony grew to be an addition
to the bad influences that were to come – coming of age
But what did she know, she just wanted to fall in love

Only 15 and again she met someone knew, who showed her love
Nights spent away from home, with David by her side in the morning
Snorting candy in his restroom – new experiences come with age
Pupils dilated, shaky hands bringing them closer every other weekend anew
She found what she wanted, the paraphernalia was an addition
But just as simple as love was found, deceptions were bound to form

Only 16 and life was a pool of mixed emotions treacherously forming
Then Alberto came to show her that a broken heart still has hope for love
But she could not grasp the fact, so he became merely an addition
to the list of emotions she could no longer face each morning
Suicidal in thought and action but this was nothing new
For her arm wore a scar of each fear that surfaced as she aged

Only 17 and her mentality mistakenly surpassed her age
She contented with denying love as soon as it started to take form
For the season had passed and her heart rejected anything new
that entered in the form of affection – disdaining love
Instead she found emotion in other harm that morning
Being careless and carefree came easy when candy was an addition

Only 18 and her priorities were set aside as addiction from the addition
took over and washed away the intellect accumulated at her age
As she discovered how to assimilate in a declining community some morning
For the ignorance that surrounds her finally came to show form
She was crowned Prom Queen one night but still denied to feel the love
Not accepting the popularity that deemed from being someone new

Only 19 and her life takes a route that will reckon something new
Responsibilities wave over as her past becomes the addition
to the addictions that engulf her, for they fill the void of love
A void so profoundly misguided in context to her age
One that could never be accepted thus failing to form
Reminding herself of what derived from that morning

Untitled is the new chapter that will come a certain age,
as the addition of what has been expected for so long forms – 
the love that she needs in order to be at peace and not wake in the morning.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014

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Date: 5/13/2016 10:56:00 PM
Marielle D, Fantastic writing, glad to read your poem tonight. Forever ~LINDA~
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Date: 5/12/2016 9:47:00 AM
Marielle Dominguez, creative and well done. Thank you for sharing. **SKAT**
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Date: 12/12/2014 7:20:00 PM
Marielle.. powerful, well constructed write, my friend. Poetry Soup is a great place to display your creative, artist works. It's also an ideal place to meet and be shaped by other poets. Comment on their works and they will comment on yours. Give the contest a try as well. I look forward to reading more good writes like this one.. Come check me out!
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Date: 12/7/2014 7:19:00 AM
- Warm welcome to PoetrySoup, Marielle - I choose your first moving... but, well written poem - Nice to meet you! - Hope you will be satisfied with our "soup family" - we are many .. but has plenty of room for you too - Keep the PoetrySoup as a haven - (Comment on the poetry of others and they will comment on yours.) Thank you for posted your words and thoughts here, I want to come back to read more another day. - oxox // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 12/5/2014 9:21:00 AM
It is a beautiful poem about life ,hope and the world entire may live in it with passion and awaken new great expectations after the poetical moment of solitude .At the other side of the clouds ,there is to find the sunshine.Keep your face in the sunshine,and you won`t count the shadows.Best regards,O.B
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Date: 12/3/2014 11:01:00 PM
Sorry, Marielle, our children don't realize the pain that they put on the parent. We see them suffer and we die a little inside. Blessings my dear
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Marielle Dominguez
Date: 12/3/2014 11:27:00 PM
Hello Eve. This poem is actually from my perspective. I'm only 18 :) But I appreciate your comment as it has allowed me to view my poem from a different point of view. Thank you, -Marielle
Date: 12/3/2014 4:34:00 PM
i find this so deep dark and sad :-( Hugs Jan
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Date: 12/3/2014 4:47:00 PM
I'm content with the fact that my poem could surface emotion within. Thanks for the comment Jan :)