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Until Night's End

Though wrinkled veins line years on drooping arms I'll hold all springtime's traces of young vows, To care for you through life’s devoted charms And rouse our crowning milestones , joy endows While tint of whitened hair enchants my heart-- That passing unto seasons now grows old, Upon this dream's compass we have to part. So sing dear one, our floral notes behold As I guard you through one last winter rain, Until once more sweet memories grip us To cuddle laughter's beat and tunes again; When petals fly with traces of caress. …Before leaves of demise call us to rest; We’ll share night's end upon heaven’s bequest. ------------------- RHYMED, METERED poem Contest Sponsor: Janice Canerdy 5/6/2017 Checked www.howmanysyllables.com -----------

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Date: 5/10/2017 1:59:00 PM
Beautifully written....congratulations on your win!
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Date: 5/9/2017 8:38:00 PM
So glad to see this poem make an appearance again. Congrats on your placement. I still love it as much as when I first read it last year.
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Date: 5/9/2017 2:29:00 PM
This is outstanding Nette! I love how you have equated the seasons with aging. Congratulations on a fine win! 7 ; )
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Date: 5/8/2017 10:22:00 AM
A 7 for your lovely, touching, WINNING poem, Nette. Thanks for entering my contest. Janice
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Date: 9/25/2016 7:24:00 AM
Nette, I find the line "As I guard you through one last winter rain".. to be a brilliant pivotal point in this lovely sonnet. Lovers, protecting the core and depth of their loving as the dance draws to a close. Congrats on your placement in the contest.
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Date: 9/24/2016 2:30:00 PM
beautiful Nette for a beautiful lady :) congratulations on your placement :)-luloo
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Date: 9/24/2016 11:19:00 AM
Stunningly stirring. Beautiful beautiful!
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Date: 9/24/2016 10:47:00 AM
Congratulations Nette, beautifully done...
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Date: 9/24/2016 9:19:00 AM
Such a beautiful and tender portrayal of aging. I love your imagery, Nette. Congrats on your win.
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Date: 9/24/2016 8:52:00 AM
Nette, congratulations on your win :-) this was beautiful ! Hugs
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Date: 2/22/2015 6:50:00 AM
Just found this gem. I love me some sonnets my friend. This is tops in my book! A diamond shining in a bright sun! Bravoooooooooooooooooooooooooo!!
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Date: 2/1/2015 1:48:00 PM
NETTE:) A lovely and beautiful win *Hugs* SKAT
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Date: 1/28/2015 9:42:00 AM
Congratulations!
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Date: 1/25/2015 6:54:00 AM
Well written sonnet... congrats on your win.
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Date: 1/24/2015 8:46:00 PM
Well penned sonnet, congrats on the win, nette
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Date: 1/24/2015 6:30:00 PM
Such a beautiful sonnet - many congrats:-) Hugs jan xx
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Date: 1/24/2015 6:00:00 PM
Very beautiful Sonnet, Nette. Your lovely words echo what is in my heart. Congratulations on your wonderful win. 7 + Fav, Hugs, Sandra
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Date: 1/24/2015 5:54:00 PM
These lines are very tender and they touched my heart deeply. This is how everyone should spend their last night on earth... A truly beautiful poem, Nette. Congrats on your first place win!
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Date: 1/20/2015 3:09:00 PM
Now this is love, growing through the years and building on the original promise.
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Date: 1/18/2015 11:11:00 AM
So heartfelt and loving....I floated through this beautiful sonnet ....huggs
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Date: 1/17/2015 9:21:00 PM
Absolutely beautiful, intriguing, love filled poem, I just love this style!
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Date: 1/17/2015 10:02:00 AM
The personalization in each line, captures the season's change of heart. Just loveliness!
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Date: 1/16/2015 1:21:00 PM
Supreme poem! What could be more fulfilling than being in the arms of a loved one until night's final end,
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Date: 1/16/2015 11:52:00 AM
Masterfully written with great command of your pen, Nette! A 7 from me, for sure!
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Date: 1/16/2015 11:34:00 AM
Gracefully you have accented the aging years into something of beauty..I enjoyed reading Your work today..Thanks for the visit to my page..Sara
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