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Untamed Heart

This is a collaboration with Susan Ashley, excerpts taken from her Amberina Ballerina poem. One of the best writes I've ever read, check it out! 

Thanks Susan for your awesome work,  I loved this and have high hopes for this song!

UNTAMED HEART

My untamed heart, 
ruled by unruly wants
Sometimes in tatters, 
but flatters and taunts

I played at life...
but life played me harder,
Lived bet to debt...
in life's Russian roulette

Chorus
I'm like a ghost ship, 
stranded on breakers
searching for life, without any light
I rummage through...
my Psyches ruins
Dreams duel disasters, 
but give up the fight

I place a wager...
speed into danger
My foolish whims, 
scatter in mistral winds

Now tossed by waves, 
by blind forces of fate
How they orchestrate, 
time, distance and place

Bridge
Now all that's left...
lies fallow,
in fields of regret
Hopes of a new day... 
are shattered
by a doomed sunset


Chorus
I'm like a ghost ship, 
stranded on breakers
searching for life, without any light
I rummage through...
my Psyches ruins
Dreams duel disasters, 
but give up the fight

Outro
Dreams duel disasters, 
but give up the fight
Dreams duel disasters, 
but give up the fight

repeat and fade

Written November 26,2021 
(revised Nov29,2021)
John Derek Hamilton, Susan Ashley

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Margarita Lillico

March 19, 2023 at 9:04 PM

Well thought and put together, fellow Canadian! Looking forward to spring?:)

John Hamilton

July 30, 2023 at 12:56 PM

Thanks Margarita nice of you to pass by today!

Gregory Richard Barden

December 9, 2021 at 11:29 PM

Nice collab … some solid lyrics searching for the right melody. Enjoyed the read and some very good metaphor and phrasing. Congrats on Poem of the Day - Blessings!

John Hamilton

December 13, 2021 at 1:40 PM

Hey thanks G, I wanted to know your opinion as this was my first collab, glad you liked it!

Kim Rodrigues

December 8, 2021 at 2:55 PM

Very well done and much deserved POTD! Congratulations on your collaboration!

P.S. Awtry

December 7, 2021 at 6:59 AM

so many interesting phrases ("lived bet to debt"--so good)! Oh, the sadness of it! All of the energy spent living recklessly and then to end so defeated... Masterfully executed. Congratulations to both you and Susan for this piece and for your POTD honors :)

John Hamilton

December 7, 2021 at 8:11 AM

Thanks so much PS for your kind visit and comment, one of the best comments received on this piece. Thanks again!

Susan Lawrence

December 4, 2021 at 4:57 PM

John , so happy to be introduced to your work in this wonderful collaboration with Susan ! The intimate journey of tears, regret , longing , and reflection ride through space and time in your lyrics . Bravo to you both and congratulations on POTD. Cheers , Susan :)

John Hamilton

December 6, 2021 at 7:11 AM

Thanks Susan I'm pleased to have you visit my page, always nice to have someone new visit. I'm sure Susan will be pleased as well, I enjoyed your thoughtful comment, and kind words.

Harry Horsman

December 4, 2021 at 7:59 AM

Amazing POTD, congratulations to you and Susan.

John Hamilton

December 6, 2021 at 7:08 AM

Thanks a lot Harry so nice to see you pass by my page today!

Alexis Y.

December 2, 2021 at 6:12 AM

Hi John, I'm just coming back to say congratulations to you and Susan for getting the poem of day. Have a nice day :-)Alexis

John Hamilton

December 2, 2021 at 3:09 PM

Thanks Lexi

Joanna Daniel

December 2, 2021 at 3:26 AM

Excellent poem chosen for POTD, John, back to congratulate you and Susan:) enjoy the honours:)

John Hamilton

December 2, 2021 at 3:09 PM

Thanks Jo

Valsa George

December 1, 2021 at 10:32 PM

A lovely poem born out of a lovely collaboration, John and Susan ! Enjoy your honor!

John Hamilton

December 2, 2021 at 3:09 PM

Thanks Valsa

Brandy Nicole

December 1, 2021 at 7:35 PM

Enjoy the spotlight. Congratulations John and Susan, on Poem of the Day. Hugs, Brandy

John Hamilton

December 2, 2021 at 3:10 PM

Thanks Brandy

Unseeking Seeker

December 1, 2021 at 6:08 PM

Beautiful, hypnotic beat! Congrats on POTD, John & Susan

John Hamilton

December 1, 2021 at 6:58 PM

Thanks so much US, it is a nice surprise for sure.

John Watt

December 1, 2021 at 4:55 PM

John/Susan, looks like Vijay was prophetic about this being POTD! Congrats to you both for the honor ~ John

John Hamilton

December 1, 2021 at 6:57 PM

Thanks a lot John, guess he was right, it is a nice surprise!

Beryl Edmonds

December 1, 2021 at 4:14 PM

A wonderful collaboration John and Susan, congratulations on poem of the day… Belle

John Hamilton

December 1, 2021 at 6:56 PM

Thanks a lot Belle glad you liked it enough to comment!

Robert Lindley

December 1, 2021 at 3:59 PM

Congratulations to both poets for this gem being awarded POTD. I quite was sure that it would be given this fine creation because it is indeed a masterpiece that exhibits the magnificent talents of both of its highly esteemed authors... God bless..

John Hamilton

December 1, 2021 at 6:56 PM

You are too kind Robert, but we do appreciate your generous comments!

Regina Mcintosh

December 1, 2021 at 3:51 PM

Wonderful song. I love it. Would enjoy hearing it played.. Wish you both all the best with all your poetic endeavors. God bless you and Happy Writing. Love, Gina

John Hamilton

December 1, 2021 at 6:55 PM

Thanks so much Gina we do appreciate it!

Andrea Dietrich

December 1, 2021 at 1:11 PM

yes, I see. This is amazing work, you two. Also I see congrats are in order for the POTD. Way to go!!! Sure would be nice to hear it with a tune.

John Hamilton

December 1, 2021 at 6:54 PM

Thanks Andrea, it will take some time but I hope it turns out great!

Heidi Sands

December 1, 2021 at 10:26 AM

Congratulations for POTD! :)

John Hamilton

December 1, 2021 at 6:54 PM

Thanks again Heidi

Constance La France

December 1, 2021 at 8:45 AM

John, beautiful and amazing collaboration and congratulations to both of you on receiving the POEM OF THE DAY honor ~ peace and tranquility _Constance

John Hamilton

December 1, 2021 at 6:53 PM

Thanks Constance we appreciate it very much!

Eve Roper

December 1, 2021 at 8:41 AM

John, great collaboration from both you and Susan. Congratulations to both of you on your POTD! Hugs Eve

John Hamilton

December 1, 2021 at 6:53 PM

Thanks so much Eve, nice to see you pass by today, we thank you for your kind congrats!

L Milton Hankins

December 1, 2021 at 8:37 AM

Wonderful collaboration. Your images are so poignant, so well-composed. Congratulations to both of you on your P.O.T.D.!

John Hamilton

December 1, 2021 at 6:52 PM

Thanks so much LMH nice to see you pass by my page, we thank you for your kind comment and congrats!

Susan Ashley

December 1, 2021 at 7:32 AM

John, it is such a pleasure to return with my congratulations for our poem being recognized with POTD honors. Without your invitation, this song would never have been written. Enjoy the accolades for this wonderfully crafted piece of depth and sad beauty. I'm so pleased it's being celebrated on your page. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

John Hamilton

December 1, 2021 at 7:41 AM

Thanks Susan, I hope your getting the same accolades on your page, your inspired imagery is what makes this song pop! I am so grateful for your amazing writing, definitely one of the top writers on this site. The privilege is all mine, believe me!