Unreleased

The wailing of a long midnight,
as burdened eyes carry much weight.
I leave you my tears from dismal rites
without the will to bear or translate

a rake piercing my threadbare sky.
The only thing I need to ask
is where’s the balm to our goodbye;
as somber air tries to unmask

the wilted hours robbing time’s grace;
while frozen lips that have not kissed
the hope of summer’s warm embrace,
endures my angst’s prowl ...unreleased.

Somehow the clouds drift to unfold
A vision of torn reveries
Designed by fate... gentle yet bold
Until new stars bequeath rest’s peace.



Gautami Phookan's The Poet II's Contest
by nette onclaud
9/8/2014   theme: I leave you my tears

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014



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Date: 9/14/2014 10:44:00 PM
Congratulations , nette, on this touching write placed in the top win,
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Date: 9/14/2014 6:01:00 PM
Congratulations Nette. Nicely done. Love, Joyce
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Date: 9/14/2014 4:21:00 PM
Beautifully crafted piece of work! I'm sooo impressed, loved it...!! Thank you nette and many congrats on your win.. hugs
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Date: 9/14/2014 1:46:00 PM
a beautiful write Nette many congrats:-) Hugs Jan xx
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Date: 9/14/2014 1:34:00 PM
I was hypnotised by this amazing poem Nette. Congratulations on your win.
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Date: 9/10/2014 11:37:00 AM
This hit me hard. The third stanza stood out for me as powerful beyond words. I like the bit of hope as this grand poem ends. You are remarkable, Nette
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Date: 9/9/2014 3:31:00 PM
Very expressive work..I like the line "a rake piercing my threadbare sky.". Reads like a winner to me...Thanks for the visit to my page..Sara
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Date: 9/9/2014 1:17:00 PM
touching poem filled with tender moments of a haunting loneliness, there's always tomorrow
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Date: 9/9/2014 9:42:00 AM
Touching write on love that hurts, nette
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Date: 9/9/2014 7:17:00 AM
Beautiful Nette :)
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Date: 9/9/2014 7:08:00 AM
The muse of poetry, Erato, certainly would applaud this majestic poem of yours for its beauty and splendor of language! Good luck ,dear nette!
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Date: 9/9/2014 6:39:00 AM
Oops sorry, this will definitely rate high in the contest. for sure, for sure.
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Date: 9/9/2014 6:38:00 AM
Pardon my french but this is frikin' amazing. You are so gifted. So well equipped. It takes work and dedication to write as you do. Thank You!
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Date: 9/9/2014 6:28:00 AM
- We have our memories, they will never die - When it's time to say goodbye with tears in my eyes .... :)) - Lovely poem,Nette my friend - Luck in contest ! - oxox // Anne-Lise :)
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