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Full moon on black leaves ripples i n water,
Lending glitter near the river shoals--
 its mediterranean hue brushes on marbles 
to shade the landscape

Tears with spoonful of expectation
clump on grains' bay-- stars
drip by  thevshore
where flickering lights 
 keep lonely vigil  from the distance, 
angst-ridden ladies sleep
And in
while a pier's ladder gradually churns
 till boats sail under a post
 leading their oarsmen home, angst gone.



Gautami Phookan's The Poet II's Contest
by nette onclaud
9/8/2014   theme: I leave you my tears
Copyright © | Year Posted 2014

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Mehta Avatar
September 14, 2014 at 10:44 PM
Congratulations , nette, on this touching write placed in the top win,
Johnson Avatar
September 14, 2014 at 6:01 PM
Congratulations Nette. Nicely done. Love, Joyce
Phookan Avatar
September 14, 2014 at 4:21 PM
Beautifully crafted piece of work! I'm sooo impressed, loved it...!! Thank you nette and many congrats on your win.. hugs
Allison Avatar
September 14, 2014 at 1:46 PM
a beautiful write Nette many congrats:-) Hugs Jan xx
Meier-Hans Avatar
September 14, 2014 at 1:34 PM
I was hypnotised by this amazing poem Nette. Congratulations on your win.
Mara Avatar
September 10, 2014 at 11:37 AM
This hit me hard. The third stanza stood out for me as powerful beyond words. I like the bit of hope as this grand poem ends. You are remarkable, Nette
Kendrick Avatar
September 9, 2014 at 3:31 PM
Very expressive work..I like the line "a rake piercing my threadbare sky.". Reads like a winner to me...Thanks for the visit to my page..Sara
Parker Avatar
September 9, 2014 at 1:17 PM
touching poem filled with tender moments of a haunting loneliness, there's always tomorrow
Mehta Avatar
September 9, 2014 at 9:42 AM
Touching write on love that hurts, nette
Nance Avatar
September 9, 2014 at 7:17 AM
Beautiful Nette :)
Trifiatis Avatar
September 9, 2014 at 7:08 AM
The muse of poetry, Erato, certainly would applaud this majestic poem of yours for its beauty and splendor of language! Good luck ,dear nette!
Yvonne Avatar
September 9, 2014 at 6:39 AM
Oops sorry, this will definitely rate high in the contest. for sure, for sure.
Yvonne Avatar
September 9, 2014 at 6:38 AM
Pardon my french but this is frikin' amazing. You are so gifted. So well equipped. It takes work and dedication to write as you do. Thank You!
Andresen Avatar
September 9, 2014 at 6:28 AM
- We have our memories, they will never die - When it's time to say goodbye with tears in my eyes .... :)) - Lovely poem,Nette my friend - Luck in contest ! - oxox // Anne-Lise :)
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