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Unpacking Royal Baggage

I try unpacking her baggage Why does she have to be so mean You would think she was royalty Sitting in her chair like a Queen I pick up all her dishes The woman has not a care It seems that perspiration will destroy her perfect hair When it comes to making love Me oh my how my hands shake That woman is uncommon She points out every mistake! A fictional account "Thank God"! For Carolyn Devonshire's "Gems for Baggage Contest"

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Lynn Marie

Date: 3/13/2017 8:19:00 PM

A witty piece and your authors note made me laugh! :-) It's fun to read a "so outrageous poem, it couldn't possibly be true" and it feels like you had great fun writing it :-) blessings, lynn

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/14/2017 8:17:00 AM

You made my morning reading your kind comments.

Judy Ball

Date: 3/7/2017 1:04:00 PM

WoW! She sounds like a real sweetie pie. Glad this is just a fantasy. Great rhyme and rhythm. Easily read and understood.. A great message in the words here. God Bless my friend. A big 7 from me. JB

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/14/2017 8:16:00 AM

Me too, thanks Judy. :0)

James Marshall Goff

Date: 2/21/2017 10:51:00 PM

A treatise on relations! Well done!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/14/2017 8:16:00 AM

Thanks James :0)

Vera Duggan

Date: 2/20/2017 11:43:00 PM

Hi Richard, fiction or not there are woman out there like that, mind you at times I get treated like a queen and the only baggage I have is Peter and the kids, I love this little quatrain Richard, good luck in the contest and take care ........Vera

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 2/21/2017 8:45:00 AM

Thanks Vera, I do treat my sweetie like a queen but she also makes me feel like a King. Thanks for visiting.

Arthur Vaso

Date: 2/18/2017 10:49:00 PM

so kind of you to say fictional, I wont tell my ex this poem if you dont!!! :)

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 2/21/2017 8:45:00 AM

Ha ha!

Duke Beaufort

Date: 2/17/2017 5:50:00 AM

Cute. Who could be that mean? I am surprised she lets you touch her. I take that as more of an allegory for providing a service as a servant. This is a lot like having Trump as president. He likes to criticize everything, and he doesn't really do very much except self aggrandize. All showmanship. The outer appearances are all that matter, and aside from the royal companions, we are servants.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 2/18/2017 8:36:00 AM

Thanks Duke.