Premiere Contest Winner UNLOVED

                         The stinging is particularly painful today, 
             Needles of sharp cold burning blood stab and sear my heart
                     The jabbing jagged thousand tiny holes stay
                     And begin again tomorrow to flay each part.

                                Rejection is a drowning drunk
                           Gasping with each mouthful of pride 
                        Another trophy now lies lifeless and sunk
                             Another screaming day that died.

                            For all the steaming dreaming part
                           I played in the capture of my choice
                       Flat failure is the guide of my loveless dart
                              Choking silence is my only voice.
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Bowring Avatar
December 5, 2023 at 3:26 PM
Back to say many congratulations my friend with first Place! Well done! Knew this was great when I first read it. So pleased for you. Love and hugs xx :):)
Lever Avatar
January 12, 2024 at 3:12 PM
Thank you christina. I will admit to you I have never read a Plath Poem and only heard Poe's The Raven on a radio programme once. I just googled her and him and read about them and put myself in the 'mood'. I am so glad it turned out alright. love and peace my friend xxxx
Miller Avatar
December 5, 2023 at 7:09 AM
Stunning work; congratulations
Lever Avatar
December 5, 2023 at 3:10 PM
Thank you Terry for your comments and the encouragement contained within them. love and peace xx janine
Jones Avatar
December 4, 2023 at 10:21 PM
Wow. Great job Janine! Congratulations on first place in the contest.
Lever Avatar
December 5, 2023 at 3:09 PM
Thank you karen for your comments and encouragement. i appreciate it very much. love and peace xxjanine
Hind Avatar
December 4, 2023 at 1:56 PM
Intense poetry, very heavy stuff... congrats on your win!
Lever Avatar
December 4, 2023 at 2:48 PM
Hello Paige, Thank you for your comments and your congratulations. I am delighted to have won and so happy with all the encouragement i have been given. love and peace xx janine
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December 4, 2023 at 11:26 AM
You wrote in the style of Poe and Plath well Janine, congratulations on your top spot win in Tom’s contest… Belle
Lever Avatar
December 4, 2023 at 2:47 PM
Hello Beryl, i thank you so much for your comments and your congrats. I am delighted to have won and i am so very appreciative of your and other poets encouragement. love and peace xxjanine
Mcintosh Avatar
December 4, 2023 at 9:44 AM
So amazing... wonderfully done. Congrats on the top win. God bless you, Love, Gina
Lever Avatar
December 4, 2023 at 2:46 PM
Hello Regina and thank you for your comments and your encouragement and your blessings, i am delighted to have won and i am blessed for having the wonderful congrats from everyone and yourself. love and peace xx janine
Anaya Avatar
December 4, 2023 at 9:13 AM
In the cadence of The Raven is displayed magnificently! Plath in the style of Poe. Congratulations Janine on the trophy win! I Am Anaya
Lever Avatar
December 4, 2023 at 2:45 PM
Hello Anaya and thank you so much for your comments of encouragement. I am delighted to have won this competition. xxlove and peace janine
Bowring Avatar
November 30, 2023 at 11:17 AM
Good evening dear Janine. I read this several times. It is so well written and well crafted. So deep, profound, expressive. Great rhyming and poetic lines,’ And begin again tomorrow to flay each part’ ‘ ‘ choking silence is my only voice’. You did a great job constructing this so well done! Really impressed. Thank you for sharing. Keep warm - hope you didn’t get too much snow! Hugs and smiles my friend xx:):)
Lever Avatar
December 1, 2023 at 5:17 AM
Hello Christina, thank you for your encouraging comments of Unloved. I entered the Poe with the style of Plath competition, which was hard as i have discalculus and trying to construct is extremely difficult for me, most times never acheiving it fully, but in this case i thought of Poe and Plath and sat in silence and then it came. i sometimes have the feeling i have 'lived' the emotion of a poem i write, as with this one when each time i stopped i thought of each poet and their work and 'felt' the angst and then carried on. I am trying to keep warm, ha ha, lots of jumpers, leggings under trousers, fluffy inner socks and gloves and neck warmer snood under my hood. Feel like a bigfoot when i go out. Its only 3 degrees here and falling to -3 tonight. ice everywhere. You keep well too and warm and thank you again, if i dont get chance, merry christmas christina, your name has love in it. xx love and peace xx janine
Jones Avatar
November 19, 2023 at 1:54 PM
This is so sad. :0( Enjoyed the rhyme.
Jones Avatar
December 4, 2023 at 10:25 PM
Ooooh I didn't know it was for a contest. Giggles. Congratulations again.
Lever Avatar
November 20, 2023 at 8:36 AM
Hello my friend, thank you for the comments. Yes it is sad, it is for a poetry competition on here, 'Poe in the style of Plath' So i brought the dark of both poets into the emotion and alliteration of plath style. I dont like constructing poetry but i thought i would have a go, after the first line, it just came flooding in. nice to hear from youxx
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