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Dark desires unkempt, tease and taunt and tempt, so what is the source, of these cravings coarse? Pausing flow of thought, the Gordian knot loosens to reveal what we truly feel. What we seek is bliss, rapture of God's kiss but see not the light; pitiful’s our plight. Stooped is our soul's stance, so we take a chance, choosing staid silence, sans thought violence. If we're resolute, in time we reboot; call it eccentric, we are void centric. As we cease to sway, the false falls away, revealing our soul, tranquil, blissful, whole. With erst cravings gone, we’re here, now reborn, pristine like the snow, light without shadow. 02-November-2022 Writing Challenge - Unburden a ''U'' Word- Poetry Contest Sponsor: Constance La France

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Date: 11/22/2022 2:08:00 PM
Seeker, your last two lines perfectly unify every verse that comes before it - "pristine like the snow...light without shadow." All the "unkempt" debris cleaned up and purified. Congratulations on your win. Blessings of bliss to you.
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Date: 11/22/2022 5:26:00 PM
Thank you dear Sam
Date: 11/15/2022 7:27:00 AM
Congratulations on this great winner in Constance's contest. Way to go. Sara
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Date: 11/15/2022 7:32:00 AM
Thank you, Sara
Date: 11/14/2022 6:19:00 AM
Seeker, a wonderful poem and I love your chosen image. Congratulations on your win in my Writing Challenge - Unburden- A ''U'' Word, well done! I hope you will enter my new contest, Writing Challenge "V" Forms with quote inspirations and themes.
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Date: 11/14/2022 6:42:00 AM
Thanks for hosting, Constance and for my placement. It’s always a pleasure to participate in your contests. V for Villanelle, I guess, verse is an option too. Will try to give it a shot!
Date: 11/12/2022 8:39:00 PM
"As we cease to sway, the false falls away, revealing our soul, tranquil, blissful, whole." Each stanza is a gem, especially the one quoted above ! Beautiful poem. Congratulations on your win, dear Seeker friend!
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Date: 11/13/2022 3:52:00 AM
Thank you, Valsa, so happy you enjoyed
Date: 11/2/2022 8:48:00 PM
Ridding ourselves of unkempt thoughts and desires... we keep the kempt ones. (I can't believe no red line appeared under 'kempt.' Not too long ago 'kempt' was not considered a word). Thank you for your thought-provoking and evoking lines, Seeker.
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Date: 11/2/2022 9:00:00 PM
Thank you, gw
Date: 11/2/2022 2:17:00 PM
"As we cease to sway, the false falls away, revealing our soul, tranquil, blissful, whole." Lovely!
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Date: 11/2/2022 7:17:00 PM
Thank you, Caren
Date: 11/2/2022 2:26:00 AM
Difficult to live near the presence of God. Yet we strive.
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Date: 11/2/2022 2:30:00 AM
Why do you say that?

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