Undone

I snuck into a haunted house for the thrill: to see for myself if any ghosts were there. And like a warm breath, clinging to Winter's chill, a foggy apparition appeared mid-air. Though it dissipated, my fright lingered still; fueling feelings of anguish and despair. My curiosity soon morphed into fear, on hearing a faint voice whisper in my ear.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2024

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Wraith Avatar
June 24, 2024 at 6:10 PM
A captivating and haunting piece. I enjoyed this read and poetry style/format. Congratulations on the win.
Pinet Avatar
June 25, 2024 at 5:52 AM
Thanks, Edward. I welcome and appreciate your comments, my friend. Emile.
Ibeh Avatar
February 11, 2024 at 5:47 AM
Congratulations on your win in my contest with this exceptional, chilling write, Emile. Stunning imagery here. You put me right there on the scene!
Pinet Avatar
February 11, 2024 at 7:59 AM
Thanks, Edward, I both welcome the placement and appreciate your comments my friend, Emile.
One Avatar
January 26, 2024 at 1:54 PM
A dark and haunting take on this contest theme..nicely done.
Pinet Avatar
January 27, 2024 at 7:48 AM
Thanks, Silent One, I both welcome and appreciate your comments my friend, Emile.
Hargreaves Avatar
January 26, 2024 at 7:37 AM
Enjoyed your Ottava Rima and its splendid alliteration. My favourite form for rhyme poems. Thanks for sharing and also your 'Once in a While'. Tony
Pinet Avatar
January 26, 2024 at 8:09 AM
Thanks, Tony, I welcome and appreciate your comments. I'm pleased you enjoyed it my friend, Emile.
Empress Avatar
January 25, 2024 at 9:08 PM
Brilliant ottava rima, I absolutely loved the rhymes too. There was a time i used to do these things for the thrill too to end up with nothing but fear and wishing i hadnt done that. I love your descriptive language here as always and also your captivating rhymes that flow so seamlessly! as well as your alliterations. Absolute pleasure always reading your work. Best wishes for the contest
Pinet Avatar
January 26, 2024 at 7:23 AM
Thanks, Ink Empress, I welcome and appreciate your comments, you never fail to uplift my day, my friend, Emile.
Rodgers Avatar
January 25, 2024 at 6:10 PM
Emile, your poem left me with a sense of unease. It creates such a haunting experience that is both thrilling and terrifying. The imagery of the “faint foggy figure” and the “cold air” is mesmerizingly beautiful. Your poem evokes emotions and transport the reader to another world. Very well written. - Blessings, Daniel
Pinet Avatar
January 26, 2024 at 7:22 AM
Thanks, Daniel, I welcome and appreciate your comments my friend, Emile.
Lane Avatar
January 25, 2024 at 12:41 PM
Emile, you allowed me to enter that haunted house with you. Through your words, I saw the scene quite clearly. Good luck in the contest. I'll not be entering any more of them on PS. I've enjoyed every one of yours and have great respect for you as a poet and a gentleman.
Pinet Avatar
January 25, 2024 at 12:58 PM
Thank you so much Lin, I am truly honored my friend, Emile.
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