Undone

I slept inside a haunted house for the thrill: to see for myself if any ghosts were there. Then, like a warm breath clinging to Winter's chill: a foggy apparition appeared mid-air. It dissipated, yet my fright lingered still; fueling feelings of anguish and despair. And my curiosity morphed into fear: when I heard a faint voice whisper in my ear.
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Date: 6/24/2024 6:10:00 PM
A captivating and haunting piece. I enjoyed this read and poetry style/format. Congratulations on the win.
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Emile Pinet
Date: 6/25/2024 5:52:00 AM
Thanks, Edward. I welcome and appreciate your comments, my friend. Emile.
Date: 2/11/2024 5:47:00 AM
Congratulations on your win in my contest with this exceptional, chilling write, Emile. Stunning imagery here. You put me right there on the scene!
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Date: 2/11/2024 7:59:00 AM
Thanks, Edward, I both welcome the placement and appreciate your comments my friend, Emile.
Date: 1/26/2024 1:54:00 PM
A dark and haunting take on this contest theme..nicely done.
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Emile Pinet
Date: 1/27/2024 7:48:00 AM
Thanks, Silent One, I both welcome and appreciate your comments my friend, Emile.
Date: 1/26/2024 7:37:00 AM
Enjoyed your Ottava Rima and its splendid alliteration. My favourite form for rhyme poems. Thanks for sharing and also your 'Once in a While'. Tony
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Emile Pinet
Date: 1/26/2024 8:09:00 AM
Thanks, Tony, I welcome and appreciate your comments. I'm pleased you enjoyed it my friend, Emile.
Date: 1/25/2024 9:08:00 PM
Brilliant ottava rima, I absolutely loved the rhymes too. There was a time i used to do these things for the thrill too to end up with nothing but fear and wishing i hadnt done that. I love your descriptive language here as always and also your captivating rhymes that flow so seamlessly! as well as your alliterations. Absolute pleasure always reading your work. Best wishes for the contest
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Emile Pinet
Date: 1/26/2024 7:23:00 AM
Thanks, Ink Empress, I welcome and appreciate your comments, you never fail to uplift my day, my friend, Emile.
Date: 1/25/2024 6:10:00 PM
Emile, your poem left me with a sense of unease. It creates such a haunting experience that is both thrilling and terrifying. The imagery of the “faint foggy figure” and the “cold air” is mesmerizingly beautiful. Your poem evokes emotions and transport the reader to another world. Very well written. - Blessings, Daniel
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Emile Pinet
Date: 1/26/2024 7:22:00 AM
Thanks, Daniel, I welcome and appreciate your comments my friend, Emile.
Date: 1/25/2024 12:41:00 PM
Emile, you allowed me to enter that haunted house with you. Through your words, I saw the scene quite clearly. Good luck in the contest. I'll not be entering any more of them on PS. I've enjoyed every one of yours and have great respect for you as a poet and a gentleman.
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Date: 1/25/2024 12:58:00 PM
Thank you so much Lin, I am truly honored my friend, Emile.
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