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Pick-A-Title, Vol. 41
Sponsored by: Edward Ibeh
01/25/2024

Like a frosty breath clinging to Winter's chill a faint foggy figure floats on the cold air. It disappears, but its presence lingers still, fueling feelings of anguish and despair. I broke into a haunted house for the thrill because I was told ghosts were often seen there. But my curiosity's morphed into fear, undone, I wish I had never set foot here.

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Edward Ibeh

Date: 2/11/2024 5:47:00 AM

Congratulations on your win in my contest with this exceptional, chilling write, Emile. Stunning imagery here. You put me right there on the scene!

Emile Pinet
Date: 2/11/2024 7:59:00 AM

Thanks, Edward, I both welcome the placement and appreciate your comments my friend, Emile.

Silent One

Date: 1/26/2024 1:54:00 PM

A dark and haunting take on this contest theme..nicely done.

Emile Pinet
Date: 1/27/2024 7:48:00 AM

Thanks, Silent One, I both welcome and appreciate your comments my friend, Emile.

Tony Hargreaves

Date: 1/26/2024 7:37:00 AM

Enjoyed your Ottava Rima and its splendid alliteration. My favourite form for rhyme poems. Thanks for sharing and also your 'Once in a While'. Tony

Emile Pinet
Date: 1/26/2024 8:09:00 AM

Thanks, Tony, I welcome and appreciate your comments. I'm pleased you enjoyed it my friend, Emile.

Ink Empress

Date: 1/25/2024 9:08:00 PM

Brilliant ottava rima, I absolutely loved the rhymes too. There was a time i used to do these things for the thrill too to end up with nothing but fear and wishing i hadnt done that. I love your descriptive language here as always and also your captivating rhymes that flow so seamlessly! as well as your alliterations. Absolute pleasure always reading your work. Best wishes for the contest

Emile Pinet
Date: 1/26/2024 7:23:00 AM

Thanks, Ink Empress, I welcome and appreciate your comments, you never fail to uplift my day, my friend, Emile.

Daniel Henry Rodgers

Date: 1/25/2024 6:10:00 PM

Emile, your poem left me with a sense of unease. It creates such a haunting experience that is both thrilling and terrifying. The imagery of the “faint foggy figure” and the “cold air” is mesmerizingly beautiful. Your poem evokes emotions and transport the reader to another world. Very well written. - Blessings, Daniel

Emile Pinet
Date: 1/26/2024 7:22:00 AM

Thanks, Daniel, I welcome and appreciate your comments my friend, Emile.

Lin Lane

Date: 1/25/2024 12:41:00 PM

Emile, you allowed me to enter that haunted house with you. Through your words, I saw the scene quite clearly. Good luck in the contest. I'll not be entering any more of them on PS. I've enjoyed every one of yours and have great respect for you as a poet and a gentleman.

Emile Pinet
Date: 1/25/2024 12:58:00 PM

Thank you so much Lin, I am truly honored my friend, Emile.