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Entry for A Wicked Twist on Fairytales Poetry Contest: Sponsored by: Sara Jama  

 

Under the tree where the bodies hang swaying, dancing in the gelid breeze neath their rotting toes, the children sang; slow circling a boy; they taunt and tease. "It's your father and your mother, too," they chant, as one, fiery eyes aglow, "Who dance on the rope, and soon will you." to the cadence of a cawing crow. "We'll slice you up and cook us a stew." the chant gets faster. Each takes a knife "Then we'll boil your bones and make some glue." thirteen stabs put an end to a life. They braise the boy, then each they follow from dark black cauldron upon a fire; of steaming stew, they take a swallow; each with each other, they now conspire. "We sliced you up and cooked us a stew." the singing slows as the children fill "And no one cares because no one knew." soon, sleep takes over the early thrill. Wolf was waiting on the edge of dark thirteen children who once danced and sang become just a stain, a bloody mark; under the tree where the bodies hang.

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Date: 5/28/2025 7:53:00 AM
And I thought you were such a nice guy Terry !!! Wow I am still shivering. Umm I cant say it was a "nice poem", I can say it was wonderfully written, and captivating. Move over Steven King, Terry Miller is on the scene. Congrats on the win in the contest Terry, definitely well deserved.
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Date: 5/23/2025 8:09:00 AM
Oh my. Dark and twisted for sure. Should do well in the contest!
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Terry Miller
Date: 5/23/2025 8:35:00 AM
It is dark indeed Andrea, I hope it is what was required, thank you for stopping by and reading
Date: 5/22/2025 3:17:00 PM
Ba, ba, ba, ba, ba, ew - weeew - your imagination did cleverly chew! Fantastic ending, so fitting. A grim tale that would teach children irony, plus a moral: what goes around comes around, OR give children nightmares. No child would hear the tale and walk away with no reaction. Though dark, so very dark (I wouldn't want to see the movie), I appreciate the talent, the tale's worth and the creativity that when into it. 1st stanza, 4th line, is front the word intended? Great Job ... CayCay
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Terry Miller
Date: 5/23/2025 8:31:00 AM
Thank you!
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CayCay Jennings
Date: 5/23/2025 4:35:00 AM
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Terry Miller
Date: 5/22/2025 3:40:00 PM
I struggled with that word, good catch pointing it out, I wanted to use it as to deceive to be fake put on a face but I am very open to suggestions, as I am not 100% with that line. But the contest wanted dark, so here it is
Date: 5/19/2025 11:22:00 AM
Geez! LOL! Truly Grimm!
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Terry Miller
Date: 5/20/2025 9:30:00 AM
It is a bit!

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