Under Starry Skies

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[ 10 syllable version of my poem A FIRST DATE ]

Luscious night overseen by crescent moon Playful ludic breeze toys with miles of sand A zillion stars out in full bloom this June T'was yesteryear nervous you took my hand The charming way you were so chivalrous Stories shared with innocent childlike heart Time vanished most unceremonious Our souls melding as one right from the start Looking at remembrances endearing Years generous to us in every way All hint of skepticism disappearing Never be another come judgment day Two souls inexplicably attracted Entwining hearts forever connected AP: 3rd place 2020 Submitted on February 28, 2018 for contest BEST SONNET sponsored by LAURA LOO This is the versed version (10 syllables) of my original A FIRST DATE unversed sonnet - submitted in February 2018

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Silent One

Date: 2/16/2018 10:17:00 AM

A great sonnet, it flows very well. Well done with the syllables...

Line Gauthier
Date: 2/16/2018 2:15:00 PM

Thank you so much. It was actually fun reworking my un-versed original version. A lot less work than l expected.b As different as they are now, I didn't feel right renamed it.