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[ 10 syllable version of my poem A FIRST DATE ]

Under Starry Skies

Luscious night overseen by crescent moon
Playful ludic breeze toys with miles of sand
A zillion stars out in full bloom this June
'Twas yesteryear nervous you took my hand

The charming way you were so chivalrous
Stories shared with innocent childlike heart
Time vanished most unceremonious
Our souls melding as one right from the start

Looking at remembrances endearing
Years generous to us in every way
All hint of skepticism disappearing
Never be another come judgment day

Two souls inexplicably attracted
Entwining hearts forever connected     



AP: 3rd place 2020
Copyright © | Year Posted 2018

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February 16, 2018 at 10:17 AM
A great sonnet, it flows very well. Well done with the syllables...
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February 16, 2018 at 2:15 PM
Thank you so much. It was actually fun reworking my un-versed original version. A lot less work than l expected.b As different as they are now, I didn't feel right renamed it.
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