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Unaware Witness

You were the witness Of my gradual disappearance I evaporated one look at a time Beneath your harshness You so vibrant Me cloaked in my shyness You not seeing Or wondering whyness My smile lost all its brightness My spirit its lightness You became more brilliant Rising in heightness As I faded into my blackness You became sheer whiteness I was all wrongness You were always rightness In the beginning You gifted me your kindness Looking past my frogyness You were my royal highness A princess gifted with open mindedness With you I felt a level of significance That proved to be a risky business I felt like a strong person But in the end l lacked fitness Do you remember My exuberance The way I danced in my freeness How you saw much more Instead of so much lessness I could just be myselfness Before all the craziness The impatience I exchanged my substance for faintness Yes you were the witness To my gradual disappearance Our no longer in syncness Somehow losing the us significance You the unaware witness With no remembrance So I let go of your promises They were never meant to be The realization of my happiness Do not worry, I am not currently going through this.

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Arthur Vaso

Date: 5/2/2015 11:37:00 PM

You are an inspiration, loved the heartfelt openness and emotion here!

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 5/2/2015 7:08:00 PM

A right pickle of a messie relationship! It's rhyme Richard with all the nesses. Light & Love

Verlena S. Walker

Date: 5/1/2015 1:30:00 PM

Nice Richard... Verlena

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/2/2015 7:56:00 AM

Thanks Verlena.

Brian Baumgarn

Date: 5/1/2015 5:28:00 AM

Glad to hear you aren't in crisis, Richard. Haven't read something of yours for a few days. Was very sick.....going to work but sick. Finally put some stuff up yesterday. This seems eerily familiar to me! My ex was totally gregarious and I was the 'deep' thinker, LOL. I like the self created words at I did a poem kind of like that that I meant for kids. I love it! Be Blessed, Brian

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/2/2015 7:57:00 AM

You as well, Brian.

Kp Nunez

Date: 4/30/2015 7:00:00 PM

Despite your disclaimer, one wonders, and can only hope there is more truth to the flippant note than the 5 stanzas that spilled the hurt. Because then, we can comfortably remain in our comfort zone, and say, ah he's ok. However, I've always believed what you said that raw honesty is what makes art beautiful. Still, a faithful reader finds that your sensitive writes speak to the reader's soul without reproach, nor accusation. One of your best, Richard. Kim :)

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/2/2015 8:01:00 AM

A most interesting reaction. In reality at the time of the experience I was a boy man who had not come fully into the realization of self. Thanks for your comment Kim.

Casarah Nance

Date: 4/30/2015 4:30:00 PM

I think we need to make a new dictionary for all the words you created! How fun. I know this has a melancholy air to it, but I loved the uniqueness of your write, it had a rhythm that stuck throughout the poem and it bounced perfectly. Your amazingness is brilliant :)

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/2/2015 8:04:00 AM

Thanks Cassarah, this is one of those pieces that felt like it wrote it self.

Eileen Manassian

Date: 4/30/2015 3:31:00 PM

I found this deep on so many levels, Richard. Relationships can be so....complicated. The ones that are worth it....will make it. Lovely write. I like how you bent the words to suit your fancy....I found the footnote a little sad. It would be great to be able to just post a poem without worrying about what people will think. The ones who really care, will soup mail. The ones who will jump to conclusions...who cares. Hugs

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 4/30/2015 6:07:00 PM

Hi Eileen, month end today so crazy busy. I haven't had much time to visit today. I appreciate you stopping by. Hugs!

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 4/30/2015 2:58:00 PM

I' m glad you are not passing from such a phase of thristiness dear friend.How profound this is ..and very sad indeed.

Emile Pinet

Date: 4/30/2015 12:33:00 PM

Your word choices and colorful vocabulary make this a very interesting read. Emile.

Jan Allison

Date: 4/30/2015 9:49:00 AM

so glad it is a fictitious write Richard sadly many can relate to the picture you painted:-( Hugs Jan xx

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 4/30/2015 11:00:00 AM

Thanks Jan, it is important not to lose ourselves in another person.