Unaware Witness

You were the witness
Of my gradual disappearance
I evaporated one look at a time
Beneath your harshness
You so vibrant
Me cloaked in my shyness
You not seeing
Or wondering whyness

My smile lost all its brightness
My spirit its lightness
You became more brilliant
Rising in heightness
As I faded into my blackness
You became sheer whiteness
I was all wrongness
You were always rightness

In the beginning
You gifted me your kindness
Looking past my frogyness
You were my royal highness
A princess gifted with open mindedness
With you I felt a level of significance
That proved to be  a risky business
I felt like a strong person
But in the end l lacked fitness

Do you remember 
My exuberance
The way I danced in my freeness
How you saw much more
Instead of so much lessness
I could just be myselfness
Before all the craziness
The impatience 
I exchanged my substance for faintness

Yes you were the witness
To my gradual disappearance
Our no longer in syncness
Somehow losing the us significance
You the unaware witness
With no remembrance 
So I let go of your promises
They were never meant to be
The realization of my happiness


Do not worry, I am not currently going through this.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015



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Date: 5/2/2015 11:37:00 PM
You are an inspiration, loved the heartfelt openness and emotion here!
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Date: 5/2/2015 7:08:00 PM
A right pickle of a messie relationship! It's rhyme Richard with all the nesses. Light & Love
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Date: 5/1/2015 1:30:00 PM
Nice Richard... Verlena
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/2/2015 7:56:00 AM
Thanks Verlena.
Date: 5/1/2015 5:28:00 AM
Glad to hear you aren't in crisis, Richard. Haven't read something of yours for a few days. Was very sick.....going to work but sick. Finally put some stuff up yesterday. This seems eerily familiar to me! My ex was totally gregarious and I was the 'deep' thinker, LOL. I like the self created words at I did a poem kind of like that that I meant for kids. I love it! Be Blessed, Brian
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Date: 5/2/2015 7:57:00 AM
You as well, Brian.
Date: 4/30/2015 7:00:00 PM
Despite your disclaimer, one wonders, and can only hope there is more truth to the flippant note than the 5 stanzas that spilled the hurt. Because then, we can comfortably remain in our comfort zone, and say, ah he's ok. However, I've always believed what you said that raw honesty is what makes art beautiful. Still, a faithful reader finds that your sensitive writes speak to the reader's soul without reproach, nor accusation. One of your best, Richard. Kim :)
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Date: 5/2/2015 8:01:00 AM
A most interesting reaction. In reality at the time of the experience I was a boy man who had not come fully into the realization of self. Thanks for your comment Kim.
Date: 4/30/2015 4:30:00 PM
I think we need to make a new dictionary for all the words you created! How fun. I know this has a melancholy air to it, but I loved the uniqueness of your write, it had a rhythm that stuck throughout the poem and it bounced perfectly. Your amazingness is brilliant :)
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Date: 5/2/2015 8:04:00 AM
Thanks Cassarah, this is one of those pieces that felt like it wrote it self.
Date: 4/30/2015 3:31:00 PM
I found this deep on so many levels, Richard. Relationships can be so....complicated. The ones that are worth it....will make it. Lovely write. I like how you bent the words to suit your fancy....I found the footnote a little sad. It would be great to be able to just post a poem without worrying about what people will think. The ones who really care, will soup mail. The ones who will jump to conclusions...who cares. Hugs
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 4/30/2015 6:07:00 PM
Hi Eileen, month end today so crazy busy. I haven't had much time to visit today. I appreciate you stopping by. Hugs!
Date: 4/30/2015 2:58:00 PM
I' m glad you are not passing from such a phase of thristiness dear friend.How profound this is ..and very sad indeed.
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Date: 4/30/2015 12:33:00 PM
Your word choices and colorful vocabulary make this a very interesting read. Emile.
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Date: 4/30/2015 9:49:00 AM
so glad it is a fictitious write Richard sadly many can relate to the picture you painted:-( Hugs Jan xx
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Date: 4/30/2015 11:00:00 AM
Thanks Jan, it is important not to lose ourselves in another person.
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