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Unaware

The sky is slowly melting as the sun blisters through,
The forecast is capping near one hundred twenty-two.
Birds stopped chirping, squirrels left without a clue,
Water trickles slowly, no trace of brilliant blue,
Oh such loving grandfather with inventions fresh and new,
Why were you so unaware of what global warming would do?
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Form: Monorhyme
Written: 07/14/2016
Contest: One Stanza - One Only
Sponsor: Broken Wing
Results: 5th Place
Copyright © | Year Posted 2016

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Gauthier Avatar
February 23, 2018 at 9:03 AM
Good poem, Jesse. Well done.
Merryman Avatar
July 23, 2016 at 9:02 PM
Jesse, this is good! A smooth flowing monorhyme that asks a valid question. Congrats on your placement! Blessings!
Day Avatar
July 30, 2016 at 1:42 PM
Thank you for reading and your comments! Jesse
Haight Avatar
July 21, 2016 at 6:30 AM
A well-written Monorhyme, Jesse, and your message so full of wisdom. Congratulations on your placement in the contest. 7 Hugs, Sandra
Day Avatar
July 30, 2016 at 1:43 PM
Thanks, Sandra - Jesse
Callus Avatar
July 20, 2016 at 5:20 PM
This is unique and beautiful, Jesse! Excellent use of the monorhyme form, too. Congratulations on such a worthy win! // paul
Day Avatar
July 30, 2016 at 1:44 PM
Thank you, Paul!
Neumann Avatar
July 20, 2016 at 3:01 PM
Congratulations. One stanza only and so much in it. I think your grandfather might well enjoy this too. Best wishes.
Day Avatar
July 30, 2016 at 1:45 PM
Thanks - maybe so. Thanks for reading - Jesse
Allison Avatar
July 20, 2016 at 2:27 PM
We areso much more aware these days Jesse yet look at the state of the world - man made destruction:-( congrats on your win:-) hugs jan xx
Day Avatar
July 30, 2016 at 1:45 PM
Thank you, Jan!
Devnath  Avatar
July 20, 2016 at 1:17 PM
Congrats on your beautiful win with this beautiful poem my lovely friend. Loved always, bl
U.D Palawon  Avatar
July 20, 2016 at 11:19 AM
Congrats on your high place. This is wonderful. I enjoyed it. Sunita.
Roper Avatar
July 19, 2016 at 12:35 PM
Jesse, very well written Monorhyme one that Broken Wing will truly enjoy. good luck in the contest. Hugs and thank you for visiting my poem.
Marcum Wong Avatar
July 19, 2016 at 4:29 AM
Wow,this is brilliant Jesse! It defines how unaware our forefathers were of cause and effect. I hope this receives a top placement in the contest! 7 ; )
Dietrich Avatar
July 17, 2016 at 5:17 PM
I am on my cell phone. This is more hellish than global warming!!
Day Avatar
July 17, 2016 at 5:28 PM
LOL! That's funny!
Dietrich Avatar
July 15, 2016 at 5:40 PM
grandfather did not really know the dangers at that time! WE have so much more knowledge today and still nothing gets accomplished. what a world!!
Dietrich Avatar
July 17, 2016 at 5:16 PM
I am grandma now. Not grandpa. Haha. Well. Most of us are not into science. It is too bad those smart guys were not promoted by the media or something!!
Day Avatar
July 16, 2016 at 10:33 AM
Joseph Fourier first suggested in the 1820s that gases in the Earth’s atmosphere trap heat and help keep the planet warm, coining the term greenhouse effect. Physicist John Tyndall later extended the theory by identifying that gases, such as carbon dioxide and methane, were responsible for the warming. It was logical to assume the possibility that more heat is trapped with the huge increase of emissions. My question is not of blame - it is why weren't these issues important enough to address in the "modern world" of the early 20th century before the damage was done? For me, this is the biggest lesson I learned from "grandfather". Will the positive effect of future invention be complete - tested with all theories of cause/effect? Sorry, grandfather, I ramble! LOL!
Dietrich Avatar
July 16, 2016 at 9:51 AM
I think my grandpa was a lot older than yours was. haha!! Believe me, when mine died, this issue was hardly a blip on the radar!
Day Avatar
July 15, 2016 at 6:23 PM
"Grandfather" was aware of pollution and the greenhouse effect but was a bit cavalier about dealing with it. I am not blaming him, I simply asked the question, how could he not be aware of the dangers? I agree concerning what we know now and what we don't do to remedy problems. Thanks for your visit and your comments! Jesse
Andresen Avatar
July 14, 2016 at 1:09 PM
- We learn .... we understand today (2016) ..... grandfather did not understand ..... save the earth - A great poem, Jesse - Good luck in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Day Avatar
July 14, 2016 at 6:54 PM
Thank you for reading and your eloquent comment! Jesse
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