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Two Sparrows

predictable pairing like plans and lovers two sparrows fly, flirt wing beats hyped to dull the scent of overcrowded news in spring air, grinning scrappy species two birds that pitch and swoop an operatic flow their sheen of relatability braided together a courtship gallantry in circled bolts when two birds fly about you suspenseful joy like an untroubled sigh re-directing thought seasonal movement a flight of promise that opens to the sky Poem composed: April 29, 2022

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Valsa George

Date: 6/1/2022 12:34:00 AM

I feel the presence of these two sparrows reeling and gliding over my head in joyful flight.... the two singing a single tune... ! I see here the symbol of indivisible togetherness. Really enjoyed this unhindered flight of promise to the very zenith ! Spontaneous flight of thoughts, Brian !

Brian Sambourne
Date: 6/1/2022 7:04:00 AM

Greetings Valsa, you are quite right in that 2 birds fly in "indivisible togetherness" - a unity merged with spring. Thank you for your insightful comments on my poem. Best wishes, Brian

Andrew John

Date: 5/30/2022 2:07:00 AM

Great description. Gallant courtship. Pitching and swooping. Enjoying this. Will go back to it.

Brian Sambourne
Date: 5/30/2022 7:37:00 PM

Thank you Andrew. Very kind of you to give my sparrow piece a positive thumbs up. Best wishes. Brian

Susan Ashley

Date: 5/10/2022 12:53:00 PM

Dear Brian, my heart's imagination flies upon the flirty flight of your romantic poetic sparrows. I love sparrows and I adore this piece. Your endearing imagery flits across the page with energy and beauty. Love it and a fav! Your last two lines a lovely grand finale. Warmest wishes, my friend.. ~Susan

Brian Sambourne
Date: 5/10/2022 2:37:00 PM

Hello Susan, So very thoughtful of you to drop by + comment on my posting. It is fortunate when nature gives a nudge to our pens. Thank you again for your affirmative view of "Two Sparrows." Best wishes. Brian

Anil Deo

Date: 5/9/2022 7:30:00 AM

"like an untroubled sigh," your poem takes me higher. And, "braided together" plus "circled bolts," are impressive use of language. Enjoyed

Brian Sambourne
Date: 5/9/2022 12:16:00 PM

Very thoughtful of you to comment supportively on my small write. Hope all is well with you, Anil. Sincerely, Brian

Gary Radice

Date: 5/8/2022 11:25:00 PM

Thank goodness for nature. You've written a beautiful poem here Brian and I love the spontaneity as to how it all came about. Cheers - Gary

Brian Sambourne
Date: 5/9/2022 5:27:00 AM

Many thanks for your affirmative note Gary. In a world war battered, it was a hopeful image of spring + renewal. Be well. Sincerely, Brian

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 5/4/2022 6:37:00 PM

Well done! Congratulations!

Brian Sambourne
Date: 5/4/2022 7:30:00 PM

My appreciation for your stop by + positive note. All the best. Brian

Sam Kauffman

Date: 5/4/2022 10:26:00 AM

Congratulations on your win Brian. Your poem flies on many levels. Wonderful metaphoric write. Love the last two lines and the flirting sparrows. All the best!

Brian Sambourne
Date: 5/4/2022 10:57:00 AM

Thanks very much Sam. My tip of the hat to two sparrows cavorting about me in an afternoon walk - grand inspiration. All the best. Brian

Christuraj Alex

Date: 5/4/2022 7:35:00 AM

Wow! Great! Congratulations!

Brian Sambourne
Date: 5/4/2022 8:03:00 AM

Thanks very much for the affirmative note. Best wishes, Brian

Sara Kendrick

Date: 5/2/2022 6:12:00 AM

Reads like a good contender to me in the contest. I see qualities that he will like in this one. Thanks for your visit to my page. Sara

Brian Sambourne
Date: 5/2/2022 7:42:00 AM

Greetings Sara. Thanks very much for your kind appraisal. Difficult to predict contests. I could paper the walls with NA's. Hope that your health is sound. Best wishes. Brian

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 4/30/2022 12:19:00 AM

This is really lovely Brian. You have enchanted us with their sky dance. Best of luck in the contest. Blessings xxoo

Brian Sambourne
Date: 4/30/2022 5:32:00 AM

Thanks very much Connie. Two sparrows did a courtship dance about me - hence my small poem came to light. Hope that you are well. Sincerely, Brian