Susan Ashley Poet Pantoum

Two Pair of Killer Heels

Assassins hot, two pair; black, red
strappy, feminine, slaying men
stilettos risqué; red drop-dead
peppered lust  hot shake of cayenne

strappy, feminine, slaying men
naughty ninjas; stilettos black
peppered lust  hot shake of cayenne -
beware palpitations' attack!

naughty ninjas, stilettos black
dainty daggers traipse teasingly
beware palpitations’ attack;
high-heels' vamp kills you pleasingly

dainty daggers traipse teasingly
stilettos risqué; red drop-dead
high-heels vamp kills you pleasingly
assassins hot, two pair; black, red. 


Susan Ashley
July 29, 2017

~ Third Place ~
Premiere Contest: Two Pair of Shoes Premiere
Sponsor: John Lawless

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Dale Gregory Cozart January 27, 2018 at 11:25 AM I still love this poem! Susan Ashley January 27, 2018 at 6:39 PM Oh so sweet.. thank you Dale for your return visit and your lovely sentiments.., it is a hot little number of a poem! Please feel free to return as often you'd like. :) Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Akkina Downing December 10, 2017 at 8:50 AM Ok now I feel like I should own a pair like those. Gosh, now I'm imagining should I only wear them when I'm mad? LOL! Fabulous job my lovely imaginative awesome poetess friend :) hugs and smiles and loves :) Susan Ashley December 10, 2017 at 7:08 PM Lol!! Kina my fabulous friend, your lovely presence is such a delight on my poetry page. Thank you for your awesome and uplifting words of light, kindness and wit that makes my heart jump for joy :) Your beautiful sentiments like your beautiful friendship is received with much appreciation. My warmest wishes always ~Susan

Paul Callus December 7, 2017 at 12:05 PM Wearing stilettos is an art in itself; they enhance feet & legs, tease the imagination and are capable of stepping into the realm of fantasy! Stilettos can carry many a woman, but not all women can carry stilettos:) This Pantoum is quite a killer, Susan! No wonder it finished on the podium! ~ Warm regards // paul Susan Ashley December 7, 2017 at 6:46 PM Lol! You're right Paul, wearing stilettos is an art in itself..:)This was such a fun write to create, I just based it on two pair of heels out of my collection - I just love feminine shoes! To me, these sexy, strappy little numbers are works of art in themselves as well. I'm pleased that you enjoyed my poem my wonderful friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

John Michaels November 25, 2017 at 9:17 AM A very well-crafted write, Susan. Love the rhythm and flow of this, packed with metaphors and personification!! Congrats on your win, my friend! Kind regards, John. Susan Ashley November 25, 2017 at 1:53 PM John, your awesome comment is received with much appreciation. I'm so happy you enjoyed my poem and thank you for your wonderful thoughts and kind words that you shared with me. My very warmest regards my friend!

Line Gauthier September 18, 2017 at 4:31 PM Very well crafted poem. Loved it. Reminds me of back in the day... Susan Ashley September 18, 2017 at 7:03 PM Lol! You and me both Line! Thank you so much for your lovely visit and wonderful comment. Much appreciation for your kind words. :) Susan

Sunita U.D Palawon August 11, 2017 at 4:47 AM You took well the form and I enjoyed your creativity. Congrats. :) Sunita Susan Ashley August 11, 2017 at 8:08 PM Hi Sunita, thank you very much for your visit. I so appreciate the time you took to read my poem and comment so kindly on it :)

Lewis Raynes August 7, 2017 at 10:57 PM great little phantoum, congratulations on ur win here Susan. Susan Ashley August 7, 2017 at 11:05 PM Hi Lewis, thank you so much! I appreciate your comment and your visit :)

Larry Bradfield August 7, 2017 at 9:46 PM Great use of the pantoum! Congratulations, Susan..well earned. Susan Ashley August 7, 2017 at 10:27 PM Hi Larry, thank you so much for your wonderful comment and for the visit :)

Agnes Krampe August 7, 2017 at 7:21 PM Congrats on your win, Susan. Susan Ashley August 7, 2017 at 8:10 PM Thank you so much Agnes for your kind comment and for the visit :)

Connie Marcum Wong August 7, 2017 at 6:41 PM Susan, congratulations on your wonderful third placement! Awesome writing! : ) Susan Ashley August 7, 2017 at 8:11 PM Hi Connie, thank you for your wonderful comment and the visit! :)

Dean Wood August 7, 2017 at 3:35 PM Quick tempo, and a nice Pantoum. Congratulations on your placement Susan! -- Dean Susan Ashley August 7, 2017 at 8:13 PM Hi Dean, thank you for visit and kind words! :)

Lin Lane August 7, 2017 at 3:08 PM Well done, Susan. It looks like both of our 'ladies' like to wear sexy shoes. Susan Ashley August 7, 2017 at 7:56 PM Thank you Lin! Our girls are smokin'!! Lol! I so appreciate your visit and comment. :)

Dale Gregory Cozart August 7, 2017 at 2:10 PM I am not at all surprised this poem placed! It is sassy, sophisticated and VERY sexy. Congrats on your win!! Susan Ashley August 7, 2017 at 7:53 PM Hi Dale, thank you so much for your enthusiastic response to my poem. I'm so happy you enjoyed it, your comment is very much appreciated :)

John Lawless August 7, 2017 at 1:39 PM a KILLER POEM about KILLER SHOES. And a really great take on the theme.... Susan Ashley August 7, 2017 at 7:50 PM Hi John, thank you so much! I had so much fun with this theme and I'm glad you enjoyed my take on it, I appreciate your comment greatly :)

Alesia Leach August 5, 2017 at 5:46 PM Nicely done! Spicey! Loved it! Good Luck in the contest! Susan Ashley August 5, 2017 at 5:58 PM Thank you very much Alesia! I'm glad you enjoyed the spice :)

Joseph May July 30, 2017 at 9:34 PM Very nicely done Susan....Gl in the contest Susan Ashley July 30, 2017 at 9:44 PM Hi Joseph, Thank you very much for the read and the comment:)

Daniel Turner July 29, 2017 at 6:37 PM Love the humor here, Susan but my gaze usually creeps a little farther up:) Shame on me. lol Susan Ashley July 29, 2017 at 7:39 PM Hi Daniel, I get what you're saying but the view a little further up is ehanced by the view a little further down.., killer strappy heels are magically delicious lol! :)

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart July 29, 2017 at 1:58 PM Damn! I can't wear heels. Sexy poem! :) xomo! Susan Ashley July 29, 2017 at 8:57 PM Hi Maureen, I don't wear heels much anymore, but back in the day... I was hell on heels lol! Thank you so much for your comment and the read :)