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Two Haiku

icicle hanging
crackeling in the sunlight
small bird gets the point

lake fully frozen
fishing hut sits all alone
moose looks in window

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Timothy Hicks

Date: 10/21/2014 1:54:00 AM

Ahhh thanks for clearing that up! I assumed that was the case, but at the same time it seemed a bit morbid, perhaps my brain blocked it out... lol.

Timothy Hicks

Date: 10/21/2014 1:16:00 AM

Oooh I quite like this. Especially that moose looking into the window. Gives me a humble feeling - knowing that whether or not Man is there things still happen. With your first Haiku, I admit, I'm slightly lost - Is there wordplay going on in Line 3? Does he get the point of icicle or the point of what's going on, in the figurative sense?

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/21/2014 1:51:00 AM

The cracking icicle lands on the poor unsuspecting bird.

Leon Enriquez

Date: 6/26/2014 10:10:00 AM

Dear Richard: Very nicely done these fragments. Please check my poem "Timeless" which is for you. Enjoy! Leon

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/26/2014 10:38:00 AM

On my way Leon.

Paul Callus

Date: 6/1/2014 2:03:00 PM

Beautiful set of haiku, Richard! Lovely picture in second one, but the first is even better. // paul

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/1/2014 6:41:00 PM

You are kind Paul.

Roy Jerden

Date: 5/29/2014 11:42:00 AM

Nice pun in the first. The imagery in the second was outstanding!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/1/2014 6:42:00 PM

Thanks Very much Roy.

Scott Thirtyseven

Date: 5/27/2014 5:49:00 AM

Love 'em both. Very different pieces obviously, no birds hurt in writing this poetry I hope.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/27/2014 8:13:00 AM

It was for the January contest but I think I forgot to submit it.

Mel Merrill

Date: 5/25/2014 12:08:00 PM

Richard! How are you? These are two very good haiku...are they for the contest? Should be winners, if so :) Enjoy your weekend, my friend...Mel :)

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/27/2014 8:13:00 AM

Thanks Mel.

Verlena S. Walker

Date: 5/25/2014 7:50:00 AM

Nice Haiku Rick. Enjoyed. Verlena

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/25/2014 7:59:00 AM

Thanks Verlena

Joseph May

Date: 5/23/2014 9:23:00 PM

Very good haiku ...good luck in the contest

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/25/2014 8:00:00 AM

Thanks Joseph.

Kim Van Breda

Date: 5/22/2014 9:21:00 AM

Two "Winter's tales" in beautifully expressed Haiku format. Great writes as always Richard. Xx~Xx

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/22/2014 9:49:00 AM

Thanks Kim, you are kind.

Monterey Sirak

Date: 5/22/2014 6:30:00 AM

You have penned perfect snapshots. I especially love the last one, such a peaceful scene. I have had a bear try to get in my door, but never a moose looking in the window.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/22/2014 9:49:00 AM

Thanks Monterey.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/21/2014 4:12:00 PM

hahaha, I love that "small bird gets the point!!" FOr me, unusual imagery is so hard to do, but to use a play on words. I take great delight in doing it and reading it! the second one is a a great little picture of that moose and frozen lake.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/22/2014 8:44:00 AM

Thanks Andrea, I had fun writing these ones.