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Twisted

thoughts, willy-nilly, drift out of mind
restless in the muddle of entanglements 

things
twisted
like my garden watering hose that weeps the earth to life
a bold green pushed to fruition 

twisted
like winding highways that overtake you with litter
scraps of fast food for gulls in cherished feeding

twisted
like student summer factory work that manufactures
cursing
when assembly line work disassembles purpose

twisted
like landfill debris of mangled cellphones
tech faith that ushers us to connective clutter

twisted
like barely concealed malice
an ugliness unfolding worthy of trash TV

twisted
like war's celebratory cruelty, the tyrant's glee
in threatening a seeded nuclear future

still
in the midst of blaze and fumes, caress what's most
vulnerable 
affirm the grit of human living
and hold out hope
like a candle hovering just outside a keyhole


Poem composed April 13, 2023

Copyright © Brian Sambourne | Year Posted 2023

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Anne-Lise Andresen Date: 4/17/2023 11:11:00 AM - Congratulations on your win, Brian ... interesting and great written :) - Login to Reply Brian Sambourne Date: 4/25/2023 7:40:00 AM Greetings Sunshine, Your note to me brings April light. Thanks very much! Brian

Kabutha Paul Hempstone Date: 4/16/2023 8:31:00 PM I really enjoyed reading your poem, and my favorite line was "hold out hope like a candle hovering just outside a keyhole", it's such a powerful and evocative image that perfectly captures the theme of resilience and perseverance in the face of adversity. Your use of imagery throughout the poem is truly impressive, and I can feel the emotions that the poem conveys. Thank you for sharing your work with us! Login to Reply Brian Sambourne Date: 4/16/2023 8:46:00 PM Thank you, Kabutha, for your detailed and supportive response to my poem. I wanted to end the piece on a positive note so I looked to an image of light to stress hopefulness. Be well, Brian

Paula Goldsmith Date: 4/16/2023 1:07:00 PM Congratulations on your win. A creative write. Have a blessed day/week.............. Login to Reply Brian Sambourne Date: 4/16/2023 2:15:00 PM Thanks very much, Paula for your stop by + congratulations. Be well. Brian

Constance La France Date: 4/15/2023 3:00:00 PM Brian, thank you for sharing your wonderful poem with us in my Writing Challenge congratulations ! Login to Reply Brian Sambourne Date: 4/15/2023 4:08:00 PM Hello Constance, My appreciation for the 2nd position placement in your contest. A grand listing of T words as a prompt. Cheers, Brian

Sotto Poet Date: 4/15/2023 8:34:00 AM You have a gift for words, dear Brian. Congratulations, my friend, on creating a work of such great merit. Login to Reply Brian Sambourne Date: 4/15/2023 4:10:00 PM Greetings Lasaad, You are most kind as I doubt most would find my work of high merit. However, your thoughtful appraisal is encouraging indeed. Best wishes, Brian

Sara Kendrick Date: 4/15/2023 2:48:00 AM Reads like a good contender to me for the contest. Way to go. We do need to hold onto hope for the future, but we know the end of the story as it is written about in The Book. Thanks for sharing and for dropping by my page. Sara Login to Reply Brian Sambourne Date: 4/15/2023 5:06:00 AM Hello Sara, thanks for your affirmative message. I am not sure if my "Wasted" poem will strike the right note with the sponsor. My twisted list was actually whittled down for this submission. Be well. Cheers, Brian

Gary Radice Date: 4/14/2023 12:55:00 AM There are so many twisted layers to this superb piece Brian. I really enjoyed the read. Cheers - Gary Login to Reply Brian Sambourne Date: 4/14/2023 6:12:00 AM Hi Gary, I hope that you are well. Thank you for you stop by and supportive comment. The world is a conundrum indeed. As a youth, I thought nothing could be worse than the Vietnam War. How little I knew. Best wishes, Brian