Twilight Dancing

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Bite size No. 79 Contest Sponsored by Line Gauthier

December 23, 2023

I watched pine tree silhouettes swaying, dancing as sunlight drowned in the sea. They waltzed around golden flames of fire whose embers rose at twilight's gloaming, kindling a myriad of distant stars to glimmer.

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Mat Ignacio

Date: 12/29/2023 7:57:00 PM

'dancing as sunlight drowned in the sea' - beauty of a line here

Lin Lane
Date: 1/8/2024 8:14:00 AM

Thank you very much for commenting, Mat.

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 12/23/2023 4:44:00 PM

such lovely imager, Lin! I could actually see the pine trees swaying so magnificently as they finally kindled the stars to glimmer...just beautiful and breathtaking. Am faving. Have a Merry Christmas, Sara

Lin Lane
Date: 12/23/2023 10:59:00 PM

To tell a poet they can envision what's been written is a wonderful compliment. Thanks for your insight and kind comments, Sara.

Bill Baker

Date: 12/23/2023 9:56:00 AM

Excellent poetry, Lin. The imagery was eloquently displayed throughout your poem. You're on a contest roll, my friend. I hope to see a win in them. Smiles ~ Blessings, my friend. Bill

Lin Lane
Date: 12/23/2023 3:34:00 PM

I have lots of free time this week so I’m using it to write while I’m in the mood. Thank you. Bill.

Regina Mcintosh

Date: 12/23/2023 7:37:00 AM

Just love stars. Lovely writing. God bless you sweet friend. God bless you with a Merry Christmas, love, Gina

Lin Lane
Date: 12/23/2023 3:33:00 PM

Me, too, Gina. They’re so ethereal. Hope your holidays are happy ones.

Tom Cunningham

Date: 12/23/2023 7:09:00 AM

Beautiful imagery Lin, At our old house we had 7 poplars at the bottom of of the garden and I used to love watching them sway in the wind Tom

Lin Lane
Date: 12/23/2023 7:12:00 AM

I can picture what you're telling me, Tom. So many people don't see and appreciate such events in nature. I'm glad you do. Thank you.