Rob Carmack Poet Rhyme

Turning Lies

Twisting chosen truths around our hearts we bind.
Trials break facades showing what’s behind
professions under past skies.
Pulled triggers, it dies.
Bleeding our
LIES.
Will devour
and drink the proud cries.
Confessions under new skies.
Learning from growing pains to rewind.
Twisting chosen truths around our hearts we bind.

Contest: An invented form
Sponsor: Andrea Dietrich
Suggested Name: Focal
02.11.15

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Mark Koplin January 1, 2021 at 10:54 AM A splendid poem my friend! I love it!

Andrea Dietrich May 13, 2015 at 9:19 PM Rob, waiting and waiting for you to write a new poem!!

Andrea Dietrich April 20, 2015 at 2:26 PM thanks for reading my poem today. You will have to tell me all about your devilish encounters! Rob Carmack April 21, 2015 at 8:12 AM You're welcome. The first time they came head on, unmasked and playing no games. The second time, they were covert, wrapped in a present. I will email you the details.

Skat A February 27, 2015 at 10:45 PM Rob, CONGRATULATIONS, on your Win :-) ~SKAT~

Dr. Upma A. Sharma February 24, 2015 at 1:14 AM Deep thoughtful write rob,, lovely rhyming,, awesome in content,, Congrats on big win!

Reason A. Poteet February 23, 2015 at 6:40 PM Love the phrasing "chosen truths" which opens realms of thought for me. Enjoyed the read and congratulations on the win.

Richard Lamoureux February 23, 2015 at 8:30 AM One of the best! Congrats on your win.

Casarah Nance February 23, 2015 at 7:52 AM Well done, this was a hard form, an you did an awesome job of it!

Jan Allison February 23, 2015 at 2:20 AM great write with this challenging form - congrats Rob:-) Hugs jan xx

Andrea Dietrich February 23, 2015 at 1:07 AM Rob, you did a pretty good job with my form. I like your name Focal too. This was lower because you had ten syllables instead of nine in your second line. oh my gosh, I just went and checked "trials" with soup's counter and it says only one syllable. Soup is wrong, rob. if you are using Soup's counter, don't use it any more! use better ones online. Anyway, Congrats and thanks for trying my form. Rob Carmack February 23, 2015 at 2:30 PM I didn't check 'trials' anywhere, but I just did. English can be such a PITA. Thanks for including it in the list, but in the future, feel free to eliminate any poem I submit that has errors. Thank you for hosting.

Emile Pinet February 18, 2015 at 4:42 PM A marvelous display of emotions as one is led upon a trail of magic moments. Emile.

Sara Kendrick February 15, 2015 at 4:01 PM Reads like a winner to me..Great choice of theme..Thanks for stopping by..Sara

Constance La France February 12, 2015 at 12:55 PM Rob, well done on the invented form for Andrea's contest, a beautiful poem, best of luck but I am sure it is a winner and thanks for my placement in your Fighting God Contest ~~

Eileen Manassian February 11, 2015 at 2:48 PM This is a fantastic write. Hard hitting...but sometimes that is needed. Like the name you suggested, Rob. Good luck in the contest.