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Turning Lies


Twisting chosen truths around our hearts we bind.
Trials break facades showing what’s behind
professions under past skies.
Pulled triggers, it dies.
Bleeding our
LIES.
Will devour
and drink the proud cries.
Confessions under new skies.
Learning from growing pains to rewind.
Twisting chosen truths around our hearts we bind.

Contest: An invented form
Sponsor: Andrea Dietrich
Suggested Name: Focal
02.11.15

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Mark Koplin

Date: 1/1/2021 10:54:00 AM

A splendid poem my friend! I love it!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/13/2015 9:19:00 PM

Rob, waiting and waiting for you to write a new poem!!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/20/2015 2:26:00 PM

thanks for reading my poem today. You will have to tell me all about your devilish encounters!

Rob Carmack
Date: 4/21/2015 8:12:00 AM

You're welcome. The first time they came head on, unmasked and playing no games. The second time, they were covert, wrapped in a present. I will email you the details.

Skat A

Date: 2/27/2015 10:45:00 PM

Rob, CONGRATULATIONS, on your Win :-) ~SKAT~

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 2/24/2015 1:14:00 AM

Deep thoughtful write rob,, lovely rhyming,, awesome in content,, Congrats on big win!

Reason A. Poteet

Date: 2/23/2015 6:40:00 PM

Love the phrasing "chosen truths" which opens realms of thought for me. Enjoyed the read and congratulations on the win.

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 2/23/2015 8:30:00 AM

One of the best! Congrats on your win.

Casarah Nance

Date: 2/23/2015 7:52:00 AM

Well done, this was a hard form, an you did an awesome job of it!

Jan Allison

Date: 2/23/2015 2:20:00 AM

great write with this challenging form - congrats Rob:-) Hugs jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/23/2015 1:07:00 AM

Rob, you did a pretty good job with my form. I like your name Focal too. This was lower because you had ten syllables instead of nine in your second line. oh my gosh, I just went and checked "trials" with soup's counter and it says only one syllable. Soup is wrong, rob. if you are using Soup's counter, don't use it any more! use better ones online. Anyway, Congrats and thanks for trying my form.

Rob Carmack
Date: 2/23/2015 2:30:00 PM

I didn't check 'trials' anywhere, but I just did. English can be such a PITA. Thanks for including it in the list, but in the future, feel free to eliminate any poem I submit that has errors. Thank you for hosting.

Emile Pinet

Date: 2/18/2015 4:42:00 PM

A marvelous display of emotions as one is led upon a trail of magic moments. Emile.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 2/15/2015 4:01:00 PM

Reads like a winner to me..Great choice of theme..Thanks for stopping by..Sara

Constance La France

Date: 2/12/2015 12:55:00 PM

Rob, well done on the invented form for Andrea's contest, a beautiful poem, best of luck but I am sure it is a winner and thanks for my placement in your Fighting God Contest ~~