Turning Away

You go outside yourself
look back,
a storm of salt
bocks your skull
from seeing thoughts,

yet their wings flap like dying pidgins
on city concrete.

Washing your hair over the sink
blood returns to a floating mind.
You have shorelines, waves,
you are something
doing something,
but mostly you are steam
on the face of a mirror.

Salt hot-licks your mind,
you taste of wet dog.

Eventually you enter
the body fully clothed,

but outside of you
the world is still naked
and snarling.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2024

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Rodgers Avatar
March 11, 2024 at 11:13 AM
Dear Eric, I really liked how your portrayal of feeling disconnected, observing the chaos outside while battling storms within. The imagery of washing away the blood from a floating mind, returning to oneself, is poignant. I also liked your words capture the struggle of existing amidst turmoil. This is raw and honest reflection. - Blessings, Daniel
Ashford Avatar
March 12, 2024 at 9:27 AM
Thank you, Daniel, of course you have nailed this poem. Your deep reading of it is perfect. Much thanks for this erudite review, All the best E.
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