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Turning Away

You go outside yourself look back, a storm of salt bocks your skull from seeing thoughts, yet their wings flap like dying pidgins on city concrete. Washing your hair over the sink blood returns to a floating mind. You have shorelines, waves, you are something doing something, but mostly you are steam on the face of a mirror. Salt hot-licks your mind, you taste of wet dog. Eventually you enter the body fully clothed, but outside of you the world is still naked and snarling.

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Date: 3/11/2024 11:13:00 AM
Dear Eric, I really liked how your portrayal of feeling disconnected, observing the chaos outside while battling storms within. The imagery of washing away the blood from a floating mind, returning to oneself, is poignant. I also liked your words capture the struggle of existing amidst turmoil. This is raw and honest reflection. - Blessings, Daniel
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Eric Ashford
Date: 3/12/2024 9:27:00 AM
Thank you, Daniel, of course you have nailed this poem. Your deep reading of it is perfect. Much thanks for this erudite review, All the best E.

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