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Turn Down the Voices In My Head

I pretended to be sleeping, .... through long hours of the night Across the milky-way, you slept, 'til dark became the light I could hear your quiet breathing, .... in the rekindling of dawn sighing empty words we never said, just the rustle of the bed where I pretended to be sleeping, buried deep, in pillows weeping Knowing you were close, beside me, ...pretending something, too The night was dark and lonely, as cold as two hearts grieving Exhausted love, that could not sleep, is weary love that we can't keep A love that's running out of breath, is brushing death too soon... I pretended to be sleeping, but could hear my own heart breaking.... I stayed awake to hear your breath, But now, afraid of footsteps leaving A branch against the window glass, is scratching to come in As if to pry, the words, "goodbye", that is carried in the wind I pretended to be sleeping, but, I can't ignore the sunrise The day arrives, without disguise, I must face it now, and ask it why? You have turned your back, as if to hide Pretending something too....
____________________________________________________ For Debbie's Contest: Songs to Poetry "I Can't Make You Love Me, If You Don't" by Bonnie Rait ("Turn down the lights, turn down the bed, turn down the voice in my head...inspired the turning a back on love)
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A  Avatar
October 13, 2013 at 9:27 PM
nice one..SKAT
Johnson-Saunders Avatar
October 11, 2013 at 1:45 PM
A fav for me!
Johnson-Saunders Avatar
October 11, 2013 at 1:45 PM
Carrie, congrats on your placement in the Songs to Poetry contest! This is one of my favorite songs and you have taken the emotion to another level! A truly brilliant free verse! Love and blessings, Rhonda
Kendrick Avatar
October 11, 2013 at 9:06 AM
Congrats on your winning work..Way to go..Sara
A   Avatar
October 10, 2013 at 8:44 PM
Carrie, , Awesome Songs to Poetry ... congrats~ LINDA
Chircop Avatar
October 8, 2013 at 1:12 AM
Rereading this beauty and back to congratulate you..So beautiful.
Adams Avatar
October 7, 2013 at 8:04 PM
great heartfelt write...nicely penned Carrie,,,congrats on your win :)
Guzzi Avatar
October 7, 2013 at 7:31 PM
Polished to perfection. I bet this could be sung Carrie. I would have liked it if you stepped a bit farther away from the songs 'plot'? Congrad's on your verse winning! Light & Love
Hendricks Avatar
September 28, 2013 at 11:38 AM
A stunner, Carrie. Sad and beautiful. Good luck in Debbie's contest, my friend. Licia :-)
Dietrich Avatar
September 21, 2013 at 11:59 PM
It happens sometimes in a marriage. I've felt this and it's a horrible feeling! WEll done!
Loving Iii Avatar
September 21, 2013 at 2:52 PM
when i read the title i knew from which it came. and as i think about it now this is a poem about it. sad though it it i read it with the beauty it contained. and i saw you or the picture of you, not knowing if it were for real or for pretend. buti know you know these feelings. and that is what makes good poetry so heart felt. john
Horsman Avatar
September 20, 2013 at 10:04 AM
oh so profound, sad, and truly wonderful poetry...
Tacito Avatar
September 20, 2013 at 8:24 AM
Stunning, STUNNING! A striking end to this battle of want & letting go. Catchy title!
Chircop Avatar
September 20, 2013 at 5:49 AM
I do believe your poem will score very high..highest : ) in Deborah's contest..This poem gave me goosebumps all over..Sad and so beautiful
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