Tryst

once two met in rain to hide tears from prying eyes and longing in mine stole away in night to bargain locked heart's freedom you the only key sat perfectly still as I sketched it on my mind the smile you promised as showers subside blossoms thirst in desert sands til return of rain

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Panagiota Romios

Date: 1/26/2021 4:58:00 PM

I love senryus. These are so touching. You bring back memories of a magical night of mine in San Francisco. Thank you... Panagiota

Paul Callus

Date: 1/19/2021 12:51:00 PM

You need to venture in the rain more often, Richard, if the result is going to be as good as this poem! Best regards // paul

FJ Thomas

Date: 1/18/2021 12:55:00 PM

So sad dear Richard. Beautiful still. Stay safe :)

Juliet Ligon

Date: 1/12/2021 7:15:00 PM

Beautiful musings. I love how the last senryu connects right back to the first.

Quoth Theraven
Date: 1/13/2021 7:32:00 PM

Juliet, Thank you for that. Many a good beginning has an equal and opposite ending. -Richard

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 1/9/2021 9:49:00 AM

Do delicate, nothing abrupt here. I like how you did not ruin anything.

Quoth Theraven
Date: 1/13/2021 7:16:00 PM

Caren, Thank you. I tried not to. -Richard

Heidi Sands

Date: 1/6/2021 8:35:00 AM

I love these! I very much enjoyed them. Well done Richard! Keep up the great writing :)

Quoth Theraven
Date: 1/13/2021 7:15:00 PM

Heidi, Thank you. Did you see the sunset today? -Richard

Gershon Wolf

Date: 1/2/2021 8:19:00 PM

Beautiful, Richard. I esp. love the first stanza. So poignant. HNY, gw

Quoth Theraven
Date: 1/3/2021 2:43:00 PM

Gershon, Thank you and welcome to a brand new year. -Richard

Anisha Dutta

Date: 1/1/2021 9:56:00 PM

SUPERB I admire

Quoth Theraven
Date: 1/3/2021 2:40:00 PM

Anisha, Thank you, I admire you. It's a lovely Sunday and I have a fine tune playing in my head. 'Sunny afternoons that made me feel so warm inside ~~ Have turned as cold and gray as ashes As I feel the embers die ~~No longer can I walk these paths for they have changed ~~ I must be home the sun is gone and I think it's gonna rain ~~ I remember sunshine and you were mine ~~ Sunday will never be the same' -Spanky & Our Gang . Sunday Will Never Be The Same

Evelyn Judy Buehler

Date: 12/31/2020 9:33:00 PM

I love the setting of the rain, and the fine imagery, Richard. It's a Fave. :=)

Quoth Theraven
Date: 1/1/2021 8:48:00 PM

You're a Fave Evie, The rain has always been your friend, and life's too short not to smile. Here's a song I listen to whenever the radio cares to play it. I hope it plays for you in this brand new year. "Cause you only need the light when it's burning low Only miss the sun when it starts to snow Only know you love her when you let her go Only know you've been high when you're feeling low Only hate the road when you're missing home Only know you love her when you let her go... And you let her go" - Let Her Go

Michelle Faulkner

Date: 12/31/2020 9:08:00 PM

How seductive and mysterious, love is the key to freedom, (though you put it much more eloquently!)

Quoth Theraven
Date: 1/1/2021 8:41:00 PM

Michelle, Thank you, I like how your mind works too. Though not your fault your name brings back a whip to my heart. We all had one, and only one. Here are some lyrics I hope you like. "I came across a fallen tree I felt the branches of it looking at me Is this the place we used to love? Is this the place that I've been dreaming of?" -Somewhere Only We Know

Eve Roper

Date: 12/30/2020 9:16:00 PM

Great Senryu Richard. Happy New Year! Hugs Eve

Quoth Theraven
Date: 1/1/2021 8:35:00 PM

Eve, Thank you, Special days, all of them. Happy New Year hugs for you. And a special song quote for you: Lucky I'm in love with my best friend Lucky to have been where I have been Lucky to be coming home again Lucky we're in love in every way Lucky to have stayed where we have stayed Lucky to be coming home someday" -Lucky

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 12/30/2020 11:30:00 AM

VERY nice. I sure enjoyed this senryu set.

Quoth Theraven
Date: 1/1/2021 8:25:00 PM

Andrea, Thank you for that. Why is it I always find it so hard to talk sometimes. Anyway, here is your song. "I saw her sitting in the rain Raindrops falling on her She didn't seem to care She sat there and smiled at me And I knew (I knew, I knew, I knew, I knew) She could make me happy (happy, happy) Flowers in her hair, flowers everywhere" -(I Love) The Flower Girl

Maureen McGreavy The Insolent Rib

Date: 12/30/2020 10:09:00 AM

A tryst that twists and turns, I do love short form. Potent. xomo

Quoth Theraven
Date: 1/1/2021 8:11:00 PM

Maureen, Thank you, suffering from ennui.., perhaps. But aren't we all? I picked this song lyric just for you. "I know it's hard to keep an open heart When even friends seem out to harm you But if you could heal a broken heart Wouldn't time be out to charm you?" -November Rain

Rob Levasseur

Date: 12/30/2020 9:00:00 AM

I truly enjoyed this write. Thank you.

Quoth Theraven
Date: 1/1/2021 8:02:00 PM

Rob, Thank you for dropping by. I enjoyed your Sonnet 'In My Heart'. A fine poem for the changing seasons of life. -Richard

Sara Kendrick

Date: 12/30/2020 7:28:00 AM

Very descriptive and emotive work. I guess the rain was a good guise. Thanks for the visit to my page. Sara

Quoth Theraven
Date: 1/1/2021 7:57:00 PM

Sara, The rain holds a special memory sometimes. Not always bad, not always good. But always so very special. A sweet song lyric just for you. "There were bells on the hill But I never heard them ringing No, I never heard them at all Till there was you" -Till There Was You - The Music Man

Vijay Pandit

Date: 12/30/2020 6:35:00 AM

Charming to the heart of love. Cleverly said, Richard.

Quoth Theraven
Date: 1/1/2021 7:47:00 PM

Vijay, Thank you and happy new year's wishes. You know clever when you see it? I trust in that. However, charming I'm still working on. -Richard

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 12/30/2020 6:23:00 AM

This is one of the most compelling short poems I've ever read, my friend. How I long to be the "only key" to a loved one's heart. It goes to my faves! Love and wishes for good times in the coming year, Carolyn

Quoth Theraven
Date: 1/1/2021 7:42:00 PM

Carolyn, I hope your day was as good as mine. Oh, by the way, the meteor shower returns tomorrow. Make a wish. "Need to know that you will always be Same old someone that I knew Oh, what will it take 'til you believe in me? The way that I believe in you" -Just the Way You Are

Elaine George

Date: 12/29/2020 4:20:00 PM

This is a great Haiku, Quoth. ~ Elaine

Quoth Theraven
Date: 1/1/2021 7:33:00 PM

Hello Elaine, I've never met an Elaine I didn't like. "And all I can taste is this moment And all I can breathe is your life And sooner or later, it's over I just don't wanna miss you tonight" -Iris

Jan Allison

Date: 12/29/2020 3:11:00 PM

aww I especially love the final line and the overall imagery Richard. wishing you all the best for the new year, adding this gem to my faves:-) hugs jan xx

Quoth Theraven
Date: 1/1/2021 7:30:00 PM

Jan, I'm quoting from my favorite love songs this first day of 2021. "And I don't want the world to see me 'Cause I don't think that they'd understand When everything's made to be broken I just want you to know who I am" -Iris