Truth, Tears and Temptation

Venus’s light grew ever brighter as discovery marked its territory
On new faces—old ones brought to the light of sudden love-falls
I grew wary of the feelings surpassing my entire being
Wavelengths of caution holding their hands up in dominance
“Do not pass as to succumb to the charm of your desires,
Yet pause in the epiphanies that blind you”

This voice had the authority over the stars and planets,
Over the birds and beasts, and could be heard by all rebellious men
Its anger was subtly piercing, with no trace of mortal malice
Erupting for the greater good of my confused soul,
Trapped in the sentiments that have swayed me into some false conviction

“Stay here and forget the voice,” says another oh so softly,
“Take wing into heavens none have traveled before
Do not pause at the discretion of your reasoning—
Instead ride upon the back of revolution’s stride
Taste the inner cravings that have molded you together
Crunch on the sustenance of those around you
Eat it all—for the morsels are both tasty and satisfying
Be fattened in the comfort that everyone around you…FALLS”…

And then my guard was cut clean off…
By the most gorgeous face I have ever set eyes upon
I had seen this face, many a time…
Yet now it pierced me sharper than ever before
I longed to taste the lips that spoke to me
I faltered in the sound of the laughter escaping the mouth
The heart of this being was so fixated in its own reality
And the despair of my desire grew uncomfortably under boulders of Never-
Will-I-Attain

Oh voice, loud as thunderous fire…
Why can I not desire what I will never have? 
Will I crumble to dust by this new feeling,
Or shall I forget it all and assemble my thoughts upon new and greater 
heights? 

“Oh beautiful soul, take a look at your heart of gold,
Remember your time is ever so short—and though all fall short,
These desires inside you will stretch your time into success
All bottled up in alerted misery,
Why burden yourself in cold sobriety?
Embark upon the passions like the waves of the sea—
Give that heart that you so long for what it deserves…
Give it the truth—your truth
And if you fall, you fall…”

I silenced the thought with terrible thrashing tears
Wanting to listen, yet too stiff to absorb it all
I begged the voice to strengthen me,
And all I could hear was the assurance of my desires

Yet the echo of the Almighty was clearer than the sorrows I possess even 
now:

“Do not pass as to succumb to the charm of your desires,
Yet pause in the epiphanies that blind you”

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014



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Date: 8/17/2014 8:09:00 PM
This poem is so riveting Laura, rereading this struggle is so stimulating to a mind that has tasted this torture and hope. " Be fattened in the comfort that everyone around you falls..." that's genius! Perhaps you could title this work Truth Tears And Temptation. I like being honest and sweet for you. J.A.B.
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 8/18/2014 5:26:00 PM
Thanks for the help dearest friend. You are so amazing! Lots of love!! ~Laura
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Justin Bordner
Date: 8/18/2014 1:10:00 AM
Hey, you truly fatten my heart Laura, seriously. I am so happy that you like the title, wow! Justin
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 8/17/2014 10:15:00 PM
Hey Justin. I really like the sound of that for the title. Thank you so very much! You bring me so much happiness. ~Laura
Date: 8/16/2014 4:29:00 PM
WOW Laura, this poem is an inspirational connection between metaphysics, Faith and Passion. I'm sure you composed this with a good degree of spontaneity,regardless, this intellectual and soulful endeavor is colossal in scope. Like me, you relish the big questions, the big challanges of Life. A write like this takes courage." Wavelengths of caution holding up hands of dominance..."The root of epiphany is the sustenance of wisdom. The dialogue is so subtle in imensity,so aggressive in quest.J.A.B.
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 8/16/2014 4:57:00 PM
Hey Justin, and thank you very kindly. Couldn't think of a good title for this one. I am glad you could get something out of this. Being pulled between two convictions can be tantalizing- your comment brings me solace. Thank you for the sweetness-I needed that... ~Laura
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Justin Bordner
Date: 8/16/2014 4:34:00 PM
Continued...This is fine poetry to sip, it squeezes my mind good! " Ride upon the back of revolution's stride..." thats rich thought beautiful Laura. The Dualism of mind, of psychic warfare. This is Grade A Poetry! J.A.B. A FAV. J.A.B.
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