True Poetry In Motion?

I began to tell of the two pens (my couplet) I always carry tucked away in my shirt 
pocket, and of my humble closet which contains nary a pocketless shirt.
 
My thoughts drifted to what by.. and how I am inspired, when my love and I began speaking 
of a subject very dear to me.
 
     When we finished ....  in what I believe to be an infused prayer,...perhaps inspiration to 
some,... I saw what seemed to be liquid glass like droplets ..falling slowly from above ..
as a slow motion shower into an atmosphere of what may have been, space and time. I saw 
no earth or sky.
    
     These liquid glass droplets were falling without disruption through a pellucid barely 
recognizable outline of a figure that I perceived to be a poet.

     Somewhere from within I asked why the poet could not be lined somehow with a shell to 
capture these apparently valuable liquid glass treasures. They were so clear that the 
atmosphere through which they were falling, appeared as a gloom gray.
    
      I understood that these treasures cannot be contained or retained. They must fall 
through the poet who must also be like these liquid luculent treasures in order that these 
particular gifts may come through the poet ..continuing to transform same and all others who 
allow these treasures to permeate them.
      There is no clearer description within me to give. ... 

     And then... I was no longer free and came back into the pain, 
discomfort and seemingly bloated entity
within this shell.. that I call me.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2010

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Mason Avatar
January 30, 2010 at 9:59 AM
On the 26th I forgot to say what a wonderful write this was and now here it is a winner in Deborah's contest !! Congratulations!!
Devonshire Avatar
January 29, 2010 at 1:14 AM
Excellent writing, Robert, and well deserving of the honor in Deborah's contest. Love, Carolyn
Strand Avatar
January 28, 2010 at 8:04 AM
Congrats on your success in Debbie's contest Robert.Rgds Brian
Dietrich Avatar
January 28, 2010 at 7:27 AM
Robert, I missed this one too. What a very imaginative way to describe a "poet" This is truly a winner, and I congratulate your well deserved win. You are definitely one of my fav poets and this a fav poem! LUv, andrea
K. Avatar
January 27, 2010 at 8:40 PM
Robert, your talent shines through this piece--this is like reading a glimpse into your soul--thanks for sharing...and congrats on your win with this...:)
Richards Avatar
January 27, 2010 at 5:51 PM
I missed this poem earlier....but here among the winners I can see why it made it to the top! What a gifted writer once again,....you make magic out of the unusual. Excellent...my congratulations! ~ Carrie
Sweetheart Avatar
January 27, 2010 at 4:18 PM
Congrats Robert on your winning poem in Debbie's contest.. well deserved win for a wonderful write.. luv.. Linda-Marie..
Mason Avatar
January 26, 2010 at 3:34 PM
Interesting write here, Robert. I had to look up the word pellucid ... interesting adjective for a writer ... smile ... I love the Soup as it makes me want to stretch. Sorry about your pain ... this too shall pass ... thanks for all your recent comments on my writing. I appreciate it very much. Do I have your birth day/month? I don't need the year but I could add you to my blog calendar if I knew when it was or, have I already asked? I have C.R.S. so forgive me ... LOL ...
Witt-King Avatar
January 26, 2010 at 8:34 AM
Perfect...now added to my list of favorites, this is one to return to again and again, to be permeated and transformed by. May we all become such as you've described here. Such a gift...thank you Robert.
Witt-King Avatar
January 26, 2010 at 1:24 AM
Truly extraordinary, Robert. I love the way you juxtapose the mundane against the chimerical in such a way that the reader easily relates to both the physical and the abstract images. But the heart of your poem is where you visualize the poet being like the "liquid luculent treasures" (rich!) to be transformed by them. The same would be the case, I should think, for the readers. A grand entry to some contest, to be sure. A quick spell check and grammar beforehand so that it isn't disqualified.
Devonshire Avatar
January 25, 2010 at 9:22 PM
Very deep and meaningful response to the "inspiration" challenge, Robert. I love the way the glass droplets cannot be captured, but must filter through the poet to be shared as treasures with others. That last verse is a real kicker! Outstanding writing (again)! Love, Carolyn
Owens Avatar
January 25, 2010 at 7:04 PM
This kind of reminds me of an out of the body experience...(Maybe out of the poet experience) Love your poem...Marty
Chircop Avatar
January 25, 2010 at 6:32 PM
Excellent work indeed,,,, Charma
Pickett Avatar
January 25, 2010 at 6:21 PM
Wow, great tale, vivid and very descriptive....:JP]
Kendrick Avatar
January 25, 2010 at 5:35 PM
Very descriptive write I could feel the free flowing imagery coming forth with the let down to earth end. Keep the creative pen flowing. Sara
Clark Avatar
January 25, 2010 at 3:26 PM
Robert this is awesome! I hope this is an entry for the Why & How you write contest!! So beautiful and heartfelt! I Love it! Love Jeralynn
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