Jan Allison Poet Couplet

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Trouble and Strife For Ex Husband and Wife

Rick was violent and showed no remorse
His alcoholic outbursts lead to their divorce

Wife Sue moves away with Billy their son
Then Billy’s badly injured in a hit and run

Sue contacts Rick, he dashes to the scene
Billy’s hooked up to a life support machine

Parents sit at his bedside both day and night
Brought together by their son’s terrible plight

Billy’s badly injured, his recovery is slow
When he wakes from a coma he says ‘hello’

Huge tears of joy well up in Billy’s blue eyes
Seeing mum and dad together is such a surprise

Billy’s pulled through, everyone is delighted
At such a crucial time his parents were reunited

01/19/21

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Jack Horne January 28, 2021 at 1:00 PM awww, how lovely - so glad to see this was a winner

Mark Koplin January 23, 2021 at 8:25 PM Well done Jan!! Congrats on your top win!

Anne-Lise Andresen January 23, 2021 at 11:53 AM - Congratulations on your great win in the Carolyn Devonshire contest, Jan :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Jennifer Proxenos January 22, 2021 at 12:18 PM Congrats on your very moving sentimental poem. I'm so glad the parents got together again, hope Rick has got over his drinking habit. Great write, Hugs and blessings, Jennifer.

Paula Goldsmith January 22, 2021 at 8:57 AM Congratulations on your win. Sometimes good will come out of bad. A wonderful story and picture. Enjoy your win/day/weekend with blessings.............

Greg Gaul January 22, 2021 at 6:57 AM Touching, poignant story well told in rhyme. Congratulations on your high finish. Well done. Loved the close.

Linda Alice Fowler January 22, 2021 at 6:18 AM A nice write Jan. Congratulations on the win! Linda

Regina Mcintosh January 22, 2021 at 6:12 AM I'm back to congratulate you, dear Jan. This is such a deserving write. God bless you with many more

Krish Radhakrishna January 22, 2021 at 5:19 AM Jan brilliant write! I like the rhyme, so perfect and done with ease!! great flow and impact!! congrats on your win!!

Unseeking Seeker January 22, 2021 at 5:17 AM Wow! So happy I’ve come across this beautiful write! Congrats on your win!

Wendy Watson January 22, 2021 at 5:12 AM A great idea for the unity theme Jan. Congratulations.

Carolyn Devonshire January 22, 2021 at 4:24 AM Great take on the unity theme, Jan, and the story in this poem is compelling! Very nice work! Congrats on a great second place. Hugs, Carolyn

Alexis Y. January 20, 2021 at 4:24 PM WoW! Jan, You penned such a heartfelt write that pulled at the heartstrings. I know from past experiences what alcohol abuse can do to a family. It was a sad way for his parents to reunite. So glad to see Billy recover; such a heartwarming ending to a great story. Well done. If this is for a contest, It looks like a winner to me. Best wishes in the contest. Have a great day:-) Alexis Jan Allison January 21, 2021 at 2:49 AM Thanks Alexis, I wrote it for the unity contest, i hope Carolyn likes it:-) hugs jan xx

Andrea Dietrich January 20, 2021 at 2:28 PM what a lovely story you gave us in your metered rhyme, Jan. Awesome. Jan Allison January 21, 2021 at 2:48 AM thanks Andrea, I hope Carolyn likes it:-) hugs Jan xx

Gershon Wolf January 20, 2021 at 1:28 PM Would that this could happen as you've penned it, i.e. that the boy doesn't die, and the parents are then able to overcome their previous differences. Poetry makes it possible... Happy Day! :) gw Jan Allison January 20, 2021 at 2:08 PM Thanks GW anything is possible in our poetic imagination... in real life who knows if this would happen:-) hugs jan xx

Regina Mcintosh January 20, 2021 at 5:55 AM Awesome writing. Love this. God bless you Jan Allison January 20, 2021 at 12:48 PM Thanks Regina I am not sure if its what Carolyn is after but I have no control over my muse:-) hugs Jan xx

Mark Koplin January 20, 2021 at 5:49 AM Another happy ending? Hopefully he cut out the booze and violence. Great write Jan, well done! Jan Allison January 20, 2021 at 12:47 PM Sadly Mark rehab doesn't always happen as I've found out to my cost with a guy in my early days on the site:-( hugs jan xx

Caren Krutsinger January 20, 2021 at 5:26 AM So true! This happens many times I believe. Liked the rhythm Jan. Jan Allison January 20, 2021 at 12:42 PM Thanks Caren I doubt it will win the contest but I am pleased with the final poem:-) hugs Jan xx

Victor Buhagiar January 20, 2021 at 1:33 AM Out of evil, some good can happen. Loved your poem. ~~ Jan Allison January 20, 2021 at 12:40 PM thanks Victor:-) hugs jan xx

Harry Horsman January 19, 2021 at 9:56 PM I've never had a potd, Jan nor would i know how to recommend one..But this is one that should go straight there. Here you show the whole sites the continuation of your diversity, truly is the way it is out there in the world today..Got to go to my fav's. Jan Allison January 20, 2021 at 12:39 PM aww what a lovely comment thanks Harry, i do surprise with the odd serious theme but my love will always be humourous poems:-)I'm shocked you have never had POTD you often see the same names getting it on an all too regular basis - I can predict when a certain poet will get it:-( hugs jan xx

Lindsay Laurie January 19, 2021 at 7:10 PM Hello Jan … sometimes a tragedy shakes people up but can a violent man be trusted in the long run, although your couplet in heartwarming - thank you Jan - Lindsay Jan Allison January 20, 2021 at 12:36 PM Thanks Lindsay, its fictional and i hope it is never something that would happen in reality:-( hugs Jan xx

Jenna Logan January 19, 2021 at 1:05 PM All's Well That Ends Well...a play by Shakespeare and appropriate for your story line. Nice write, Jan. Jan Allison January 20, 2021 at 12:23 PM I'm not a Shakespeare fan lol:-) thanks jenna for your comment:-) hugs Jan xx

Peter Dome January 19, 2021 at 12:48 PM Wow. i was lured by the title .I relate My girlfriend had a drink problem.The accident was a mixed blessing. sometimes, we have to evaluate, what is is important, and not just think of ourselves. X well done. Jan Allison January 20, 2021 at 12:23 PM thanks for sharing Peter:-) hugs Jan xx

Ilene Bauer January 19, 2021 at 12:02 PM it's refreshing to read something uplifting nowadays, jan, although i guess not all of it really is. still, a happy ending is lovely... Jan Allison January 19, 2021 at 12:13 PM thanks Ilene, we have good news no new community cases in a week but we cant be complacent, who would have thought this time last year how our lives would have been turned upside down and life put on hold in so many ways... the only way is up., Lets hope tomorrow goes well for joe... i will be watching... albeit at a great distance:-) hugs jan xx

Darlene De Beaulieu January 19, 2021 at 10:48 AM Hello Jan I do like happy endings. ienjoyed this poem. Hugs Darlene Darlene De Beaulieu January 20, 2021 at 11:24 AM Your welcome my friend. Hugs. Darlene. Jan Allison January 19, 2021 at 11:18 AM thanks Darlene:-) hugs jan xx

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