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Trouble and Strife For Ex Husband and Wife

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Rick was violent and showed no remorse His alcoholic outbursts lead to their divorce Wife Sue moves away with Billy their son Then Billy’s badly injured in a hit and run Sue contacts Rick, he dashes to the scene Billy’s hooked up to a life support machine Parents sit at his bedside both day and night Brought together by their son’s terrible plight Billy’s badly injured, his recovery is slow When he wakes from a coma he says ‘hello’ Huge tears of joy well up in Billy’s blue eyes Seeing mum and dad together is such a surprise Billy’s pulled through, everyone is delighted At such a crucial time his parents were reunited 01/19/21

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Jack Horne

Date: 1/28/2021 1:00:00 PM

awww, how lovely - so glad to see this was a winner

Mark Koplin

Date: 1/23/2021 8:25:00 PM

Well done Jan!! Congrats on your top win!

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 1/23/2021 11:53:00 AM

- Congratulations on your great win in the Carolyn Devonshire contest, Jan :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 1/22/2021 12:18:00 PM

Congrats on your very moving sentimental poem. I'm so glad the parents got together again, hope Rick has got over his drinking habit. Great write, Hugs and blessings, Jennifer.

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 1/22/2021 8:57:00 AM

Congratulations on your win. Sometimes good will come out of bad. A wonderful story and picture. Enjoy your win/day/weekend with blessings.............

Greg Gaul

Date: 1/22/2021 6:57:00 AM

Touching, poignant story well told in rhyme. Congratulations on your high finish. Well done. Loved the close.

Linda Alice Fowler

Date: 1/22/2021 6:18:00 AM

A nice write Jan. Congratulations on the win! Linda

Regina Mcintosh

Date: 1/22/2021 6:12:00 AM

I'm back to congratulate you, dear Jan. This is such a deserving write. God bless you with many more

Krish Radhakrishna

Date: 1/22/2021 5:19:00 AM

Jan brilliant write! I like the rhyme, so perfect and done with ease!! great flow and impact!! congrats on your win!!

Unseeking Seeker

Date: 1/22/2021 5:17:00 AM

Wow! So happy I’ve come across this beautiful write! Congrats on your win!

Wendy Watson

Date: 1/22/2021 5:12:00 AM

A great idea for the unity theme Jan. Congratulations.

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 1/22/2021 4:24:00 AM

Great take on the unity theme, Jan, and the story in this poem is compelling! Very nice work! Congrats on a great second place. Hugs, Carolyn

Alexis Y.

Date: 1/20/2021 4:24:00 PM

WoW! Jan, You penned such a heartfelt write that pulled at the heartstrings. I know from past experiences what alcohol abuse can do to a family. It was a sad way for his parents to reunite. So glad to see Billy recover; such a heartwarming ending to a great story. Well done. If this is for a contest, It looks like a winner to me. Best wishes in the contest. Have a great day:-) Alexis

Jan Allison
Date: 1/21/2021 2:49:00 AM

Thanks Alexis, I wrote it for the unity contest, i hope Carolyn likes it:-) hugs jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/20/2021 2:28:00 PM

what a lovely story you gave us in your metered rhyme, Jan. Awesome.

Jan Allison
Date: 1/21/2021 2:48:00 AM

thanks Andrea, I hope Carolyn likes it:-) hugs Jan xx

Gershon Wolf

Date: 1/20/2021 1:28:00 PM

Would that this could happen as you've penned it, i.e. that the boy doesn't die, and the parents are then able to overcome their previous differences. Poetry makes it possible... Happy Day! :) gw

Jan Allison
Date: 1/20/2021 2:08:00 PM

Thanks GW anything is possible in our poetic imagination... in real life who knows if this would happen:-) hugs jan xx

Regina Mcintosh

Date: 1/20/2021 5:55:00 AM

Awesome writing. Love this. God bless you

Jan Allison
Date: 1/20/2021 12:48:00 PM

Thanks Regina I am not sure if its what Carolyn is after but I have no control over my muse:-) hugs Jan xx

Mark Koplin

Date: 1/20/2021 5:49:00 AM

Another happy ending? Hopefully he cut out the booze and violence. Great write Jan, well done!

Jan Allison
Date: 1/20/2021 12:47:00 PM

Sadly Mark rehab doesn't always happen as I've found out to my cost with a guy in my early days on the site:-( hugs jan xx

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 1/20/2021 5:26:00 AM

So true! This happens many times I believe. Liked the rhythm Jan.

Jan Allison
Date: 1/20/2021 12:42:00 PM

Thanks Caren I doubt it will win the contest but I am pleased with the final poem:-) hugs Jan xx

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 1/20/2021 1:33:00 AM

Out of evil, some good can happen. Loved your poem. ~~

Jan Allison
Date: 1/20/2021 12:40:00 PM

thanks Victor:-) hugs jan xx

Harry Horsman

Date: 1/19/2021 9:56:00 PM

I've never had a potd, Jan nor would i know how to recommend one..But this is one that should go straight there. Here you show the whole sites the continuation of your diversity, truly is the way it is out there in the world today..Got to go to my fav's.

Jan Allison
Date: 1/20/2021 12:39:00 PM

aww what a lovely comment thanks Harry, i do surprise with the odd serious theme but my love will always be humourous poems:-)I'm shocked you have never had POTD you often see the same names getting it on an all too regular basis - I can predict when a certain poet will get it:-( hugs jan xx

Lindsay Laurie

Date: 1/19/2021 7:10:00 PM

Hello Jan … sometimes a tragedy shakes people up but can a violent man be trusted in the long run, although your couplet in heartwarming - thank you Jan - Lindsay

Jan Allison
Date: 1/20/2021 12:36:00 PM

Thanks Lindsay, its fictional and i hope it is never something that would happen in reality:-( hugs Jan xx

Jenna Logan

Date: 1/19/2021 1:05:00 PM

All's Well That Ends Well...a play by Shakespeare and appropriate for your story line. Nice write, Jan.

Jan Allison
Date: 1/20/2021 12:23:00 PM

I'm not a Shakespeare fan lol:-) thanks jenna for your comment:-) hugs Jan xx

Peter Dome

Date: 1/19/2021 12:48:00 PM

Wow. i was lured by the title .I relate My girlfriend had a drink problem.The accident was a mixed blessing. sometimes, we have to evaluate, what is is important, and not just think of ourselves. X well done.

Jan Allison
Date: 1/20/2021 12:23:00 PM

thanks for sharing Peter:-) hugs Jan xx

Ilene Bauer

Date: 1/19/2021 12:02:00 PM

it's refreshing to read something uplifting nowadays, jan, although i guess not all of it really is. still, a happy ending is lovely...

Jan Allison
Date: 1/19/2021 12:13:00 PM

thanks Ilene, we have good news no new community cases in a week but we cant be complacent, who would have thought this time last year how our lives would have been turned upside down and life put on hold in so many ways... the only way is up., Lets hope tomorrow goes well for joe... i will be watching... albeit at a great distance:-) hugs jan xx

Darlene De Beaulieu

Date: 1/19/2021 10:48:00 AM

Hello Jan I do like happy endings. ienjoyed this poem. Hugs Darlene

Darlene De Beaulieu
Date: 1/20/2021 11:24:00 AM

Your welcome my friend. Hugs. Darlene.

Jan Allison
Date: 1/19/2021 11:18:00 AM

thanks Darlene:-) hugs jan xx